Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct tense and prepositions, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural by directly answering the question first, then adding details with linking words.

예시: No, I don't often wear jewellery. However, I sometimes wear rings and chains when I attend parties.

제안: Use correct sentence structure and avoid repetition. Express your preferences clearly and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer simple jewellery, such as plain rings and chains, because I don't like pieces that are too shiny or flashy.

제안: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Answer directly, then explain with clear linking words. Avoid unnecessary or confusing details.

예시: No, I don't usually buy jewellery. My parents also buy jewellery only during special occasions like New Year or festivals.

제안: Improve sentence structure and word order. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and provide specific examples.

예시: I think people wear jewellery for a long time because they have a strong attachment to it, especially if it was a gift from someone special.

× No, I did not often wear jewellery for a long time, but sometime when I go to in parties then I wear some.

✓ No, I did not often wear jewellery for a long time, but sometimes when I go to parties, I wear some.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'go to in parties' is incorrect; it should be 'go to parties'. The past tense 'did not often wear' is correct here as the student refers to a past habit.

× Jewellery is like rings and a chain.

✓ Jewellery includes rings and a chain.

'Jewellery' is an uncountable noun and should not be followed by 'is like'. Instead, use 'includes' to list items. Also, 'rings and a chain' is correct plural and singular usage.

× I like a simple jewellery is a simple ring and a simple chain.

✓ I like simple jewellery, such as a simple ring and a simple chain.

'Jewellery' is uncountable and should not be preceded by 'a'. The sentence structure is incorrect; it should be rephrased to express liking simple jewellery with examples.

× I did not like like jewellery that shine more.

✓ I do not like jewellery that shines too much.

The verb 'like' is repeated unnecessarily. Also, 'shine' should be 'shines' to agree with singular 'jewellery' treated as singular here. 'Did not like' is past tense, but the question is about general preference, so present tense 'do not like' is appropriate.

× No, I did not.

✓ No, I do not.

The question is about usual buying habits, so present tense 'do not' is appropriate instead of past tense 'did not'.

× I usually buy jewellery easy and in my home there are my father and my mother.

✓ I usually buy jewellery easily, and at my home, there are my father and my mother.

The adverb form 'easily' should be used instead of 'easy'. The sentence structure is awkward; adding a comma and rephrasing improves clarity.

× They did not also buy jewellery is usually but they buy jewellery is at New Year or a festival is there, then they buy a jewellery.

✓ They do not usually buy jewellery either, but they buy jewellery at New Year or during festivals.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'did not' and awkward phrasing. Present tense 'do not usually buy' fits better. 'Is usually' and 'is there' are incorrect; they should be omitted or replaced with correct prepositions.

× Why do you think some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time?

✓ Why do you think some people wear a piece of jewellery for a long time?

The word 'jewelry' is American English; 'jewellery' is British English. Since the transcript uses 'jewellery' elsewhere, it is better to maintain consistency.

× I think some people wear a piece of jewellery for a long time.

✓ I think some people wear a piece of jewellery for a long time.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× It is because your firm the attachment with that jewellery is or it is a gifted from a special people.

✓ It is because you form an attachment to that jewellery, or it is a gift from special people.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'your firm the attachment with' should be 'you form an attachment to'; 'a gifted' should be 'a gift'; 'special people' should not have 'a' before it. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I think this.

✓ I think so.

The phrase 'I think this' is unnatural in English; 'I think so' is the correct expression to agree or conclude.