Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'I be uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, use the correct word 'flashy' instead of 'fleshy'. Keep your sentences concise and clear, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I often wear jewellery, especially smaller pieces like rings and necklaces, because I find they complement my outfits without being too flashy. Moreover, I prefer minimalist designs since they suit both casual and formal occasions, making me feel comfortable and stylish at the same time.

제안: Avoid repetition and filler words like 'uh' and repeated words. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary to describe your preferences.

예시: I prefer wearing simple and elegant jewelry, such as silver or gold necklaces and small stud earrings, because they are versatile and suit many occasions. In addition, understated pieces enhance my overall look without being too flashy.

제안: Be careful to avoid repeated words like 'on on'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' effectively to make your answer coherent. Try to add a topic sentence to directly answer the question before giving details.

예시: I rarely buy jewelry, usually only on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries. I prefer simple and elegant pieces because they are versatile and suit many outfits. For example, I often choose silver or gold accessories that can easily match both casual and formal wear.

제안: Avoid unclear phrases like 'family hello passed down'. Use correct expressions and linking words to make your answer clear and logical. Also, try to be more specific and concise in your explanation.

예시: Some people wear a piece of jewellery for a long time because it carries deep sentimental value, such as being a gift from loved ones or a family heirloom passed down through generations. Furthermore, wearing the same jewelry consistently can become an important part of their personality and personal style.

× I be uh, I find they compliment my outfits without being too fleshy.

✓ I am, uh, I find they complement my outfits without being too flashy.

The phrase 'I be' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I am' to indicate the present continuous tense. Also, 'compliment' should be 'complement' as it means to enhance. 'Fleshy' is incorrect in this context; the correct adjective is 'flashy' meaning showy or ostentatious.

× especially smaller pieces like rings and jewelleries because I be uh, I find they compliment my outfits without being too fleshy.

✓ especially smaller pieces like rings and jewellery because I am, uh, I find they complement my outfits without being too flashy.

The word 'jewelleries' is incorrect as 'jewellery' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Use 'jewellery' instead.

× I find that uh under under stated pieces enhance my overall look without being too flashy.

✓ I find that understated pieces enhance my overall look without being too flashy.

The phrase 'under under stated' is incorrect and redundant. The correct adjective is 'understated' meaning subtle or not overly showy.

× I rarely buy jewelry on on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries.

✓ I rarely buy jewelry except on special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries.

The phrase 'on on' is a repetition error. Also, 'on special occasions' is acceptable but 'except on special occasions' better conveys the intended meaning that purchases happen only on those occasions.

× Additionally, consistently varying the same jewelry can become a significant part of their personality and personal identity and style.

✓ Additionally, consistently wearing the same jewelry can become a significant part of their personality, personal identity, and style.

The verb 'varying' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'wearing'. Also, commas are added for clarity in the list 'personality, personal identity, and style.'