Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and use correct adverbs such as 'often' instead of 'oftenly'. Also, keep your answer concise and natural by combining ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I do not often wear jewellery. However, I usually wear it on special occasions like wedding anniversaries or parties.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and express preferences more naturally.

예시: I prefer lightweight and elegant jewelry because heavy pieces are uncomfortable to wear.

제안: Reduce repetition and filler words. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

예시: No, I do not purchase jewelry often because I already have many pieces from my wedding.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve grammar by using plural forms correctly. Use linking words to connect reasons logically.

예시: I believe some people wear jewelry for a long time because they do not have time to buy new pieces, and they are not interested in changing their jewelry frequently.

× No, I do not wear jewellery oftenly.

✓ No, I do not wear jewellery often.

The word 'oftenly' is incorrect because 'often' is already an adverb and does not take the '-ly' suffix. The correct form is 'often'.

× I believe that some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because uh, they don't have uh, the time to purchase new one and maybe they are also not interested to change their jewellery frequently.

✓ I believe that some people wear a piece of jewelry for a long time because, uh, they don't have, uh, the time to purchase a new one and maybe they are also not interested in changing their jewellery frequently.

The phrase 'purchase new one' is incorrect because 'one' is singular and requires an article 'a' before it. Also, 'interested to change' should be 'interested in changing' because 'interested' is followed by the preposition 'in' and a gerund form of the verb.