Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and structured. Avoid redundancy such as 'I really don't wear jewelry very often' and 'So I wear it quite' which is incomplete. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

예시: I don't wear jewelry often, but I do on special occasions because it is part of my tradition. For example, we have specific ornaments that are worn depending on the event, such as weddings or festivals.

제안: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct singular/plural forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your preferences.

예시: I like various types of jewelry, especially those made with diamonds. In my culture, it is traditional to wear classic gold jewelry combined with diamonds on wedding clothes, which I really enjoy.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid phrases like 'As far as buying a jewelry is concerned' and 'I am a miser' which may sound informal or awkward. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't buy jewelry often because I like to save money. However, when I attend important events, I usually purchase new pieces because I enjoy doing so.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat repetitive and contains awkward phrasing. Use clearer and more concise language, and link your ideas logically. Avoid vague phrases like 'this can only be the reason'.

예시: I think people wear jewelry for a long time because it holds emotional value, such as being a gift from loved ones. Additionally, some may keep it for many years because it has sentimental significance.

× I like different kind of jewelries, specially that are made-up from diamond.

✓ I like different kinds of jewelry, especially those that are made from diamonds.

The word 'kind' should be pluralized to 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. 'Jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. 'Specially' should be 'especially' to indicate emphasis. 'That' should be 'those' to refer to plural items. 'Made-up from diamond' is incorrect; it should be 'made from diamonds' to indicate the material.

× I like the classical jewellery which is made from gold and a combination of diamond and it's in my culture to where that jewelry on your clothes one's wedding.

✓ I like the classical jewellery which is made from gold and a combination of diamonds, and it's in my culture to wear that jewelry on your clothes on one's wedding.

The phrase 'to where that jewelry' is incorrect; it should be 'to wear that jewelry'. Also, 'diamond' should be plural 'diamonds' to match 'a combination of'. The phrase 'on your clothes one's wedding' is awkward; it should be 'on your clothes on one's wedding' to indicate the occasion.

× As far as buying a jewelry is concerned, I would like to say that I don't buy it very often.

✓ As far as buying jewelry is concerned, I would like to say that I don't buy it very often.

'Jewelry' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by the article 'a'. Therefore, 'a jewelry' is incorrect; it should be simply 'jewelry'.