Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid small redundancies. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep to under five sentences. For example, correct 'it also have' to 'it also has' and replace 'all the time' with 'very often' or 'on many occasions' to be more natural.

예시: Yes, I do. Last year my mother gave me a pearl necklace for my birthday, and I have worn it very often since then because it has a special design and sentimental value.

제안: Good structure and vocabulary. Slightly adjust word choice and reduce redundancy (e.g., 'subtle and shiny'—choose one clear descriptor) and correct 'over extravagant' to 'overly extravagant'. Use a linking word like 'for example' appropriately. Keep answers concise.

예시: I prefer small, delicate pieces that look elegant rather than flashy. For example, I often wear simple chains or small stud earrings because they match most outfits and make me feel comfortable.

제안: Improve grammar (use contractions or full forms correctly), correct noun-verb agreement and word order, and avoid repetition. Begin with a direct topic sentence then add one clear reason using a linking word like 'because'. For example, use 'I don't usually buy jewelry because I'm a university student with limited income' and avoid repeating 'don't usually buy'.

예시: No, I don't usually buy jewelry because I'm a university student with a limited income, so I can't afford expensive pieces.

제안: Good ideas but watch coherence and finish sentences. Use linking words ('also', 'for example') correctly and avoid vague phrases like 'momentary value'—use 'sentimental value'. Fix the unfinished ending. Keep answer within five sentences and provide a specific example with a completed thought.

예시: People often keep jewelry because it is attractive and has a timeless design, so it can be worn for many years. Also, many pieces have sentimental value; for example, my mother's pearl necklace reminds me of her, so I reserve it for special occasions.

× Yes I do, last year my mom gave me a Pearl necklace as a birthday gift so I have been wearing it all the time since then.

✓ Yes I do. Last year my mom gave me a pearl necklace as a birthday gift, so I have been wearing it all the time since then.

Punctuation and capitalization: the original is a run-on; separate into sentences and lowercase 'pearl' as it is not a proper noun. The tense 'have been wearing ... since then' is correct for an action continuing from the past to the present. Suggestion: use a period after 'Yes I do' and a comma before 'so' to join clauses correctly.

× On top of that it also have special designs so I like it very much.

✓ On top of that it also has special designs, so I like it very much.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb must be 'has' rather than 'have'. Also add a comma before 'so' to connect independent clauses. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number (singular/plural).

× For example, I like single chains or small earrings because they fit most outfits and make me feel comfortable rather than over extravagant.

✓ For example, I like single chains or small earrings because they fit most outfits and make me feel comfortable rather than over-extravagant.

Hyphenation: 'over-extravagant' is commonly hyphenated when used as a compound adjective. Alternatively use 'too extravagant'. Suggestion: prefer 'too extravagant' if hyphenation seems unusual: 'rather than too extravagant.'

× No I don't since I'm a university student so I have low income yet most of my expense are from my parents so the jewelry always very expensive.

✓ No, I don't. Since I'm a university student, I have a low income and most of my expenses come from my parents, so jewelry is always very expensive.

Multiple errors: punctuation/run-on sentences need splitting. 'Low income' requires 'a low income'. 'Expense' should be plural 'expenses'. Use 'come from' instead of 'are from'. 'Jewelry' as a general noun takes singular verb 'is' when referring to price level, so 'is always very expensive.' Suggestion: split into clearer sentences and fix noun number and verb choices.

× I can't afford it yet so I don't usually buy them.

✓ I can't afford it, so I don't usually buy jewelry.

Pronoun consistency: 'it' refers to 'jewelry' (uncountable), while 'them' is plural and inconsistent. Use 'jewelry' as uncountable or 'pieces of jewelry' if plural. Also add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: keep noun/pronoun number consistent.

× I think people keep certain pieces of jewelry for a long time because they are attractive and timeless in design, which makes them feel elegant whenever they wear them.

✓ I think people keep certain pieces of jewelry for a long time because they are attractive and timeless in design, which makes them feel elegant whenever they wear them.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; tense and agreement are correct. No correction needed. Explanation: present tense appropriately describes a general truth. (Included to indicate no change was necessary.)

× They also have sentimental or momentary value.

✓ They also have sentimental or commemorative value.

The phrase 'momentary value' is unclear or likely incorrect; 'sentimental value' is correct. If intended meaning is value tied to memory, 'commemorative' or 'emotional' is better. Suggestion: choose a clearer adjective: 'commemorative' or 'emotional.'

× For example, my mom gave me a Pearl necklace that I wear on special occasions because it reminds me of her and.

✓ For example, my mom gave me a pearl necklace that I wear on special occasions because it reminds me of her.

The sentence ends with an incomplete conjunction 'and' creating a sentence fragment. Remove the trailing 'and' and lowercase 'pearl'. Suggestion: finish the thought after 'and' if another idea was intended, otherwise remove 'and'.