Jewelry— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Correct factual/word choice errors and make the response concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one supporting detail. Avoid incorrect phrases (e.g. 'nose bleeding') and reduce hesitation. Use a natural phrase such as 'I wear earrings almost every day' and optionally mention one reason.

예시: Yes, I do. I wear earrings almost every day because they make me feel more put together and suit my style.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid plural form errors (use 'jewellery' or 'pieces of jewellery') and reduce hesitations. Use linking words to add one specific example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g. 'pair of earrings', 'bracelet').

예시: I prefer gold jewellery because it suits my skin tone and looks classic. For example, I usually wear a gold nose ring and a gold bracelet, and I often choose gold earrings to match.

제안: Answer directly and briefly, then give one clear reason. Fix plural and article errors: use 'jewellery' or 'pieces of jewellery' and avoid repeated hesitations. Use linking words like 'because' to explain why your mother buys them.

예시: No, I don't usually buy jewellery because my mother prefers to buy pieces for me. She often chooses earrings, bracelets and rings as gifts.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason and a concise, well-formed example. Use linking words like 'for example' correctly and avoid awkward phrasing. Make the final sentence grammatically complete.

예시: I think people keep a piece of jewellery for a long time because it has sentimental value. For example, I always wear a necklace my mother gave me because it reminds me of her and important family moments.

× Yes, I have a nose bleeding and I usually wear earrings almost every day.

✓ Yes, I have a nose piercing and I usually wear earrings almost every day.

The student used 'nose bleeding' which is incorrect; the correct noun for a decorative piece is 'nose piercing'. This is an issue of incorrect word choice (adjective/noun usage). Use 'nose piercing' to describe the pierced area or 'I have a pierced nose.' Also keep 'usually wear earrings almost every day' as is, or simplify to 'I usually wear earrings.'

× I prefer wearing gold jewelries because I think, uh, it suits me more.

✓ I prefer wearing gold jewelry because I think it suits me more.

'Jewelries' is not a standard plural form; 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun in English, so it should not take an -s. This is a quantifier/category error: use 'jewelry' or 'pieces of jewelry' when referring to countable items.

× I prefer wearing gold jewelries because I think, uh, it suits me more.

✓ I prefer wearing gold jewelry because I think it suits me more.

The verb 'suits' is correct for third person singular 'it'. The earlier corrected sentence retained 'suits me more' which matches the singular subject 'it' (the style). No change needed to the verb after replacing 'jewelries'.

× So I have a nose ring, uh, which is made of gold and whenever I wear a yarrings or bracelet is it is usually in gold.

✓ So I have a nose ring that is made of gold, and whenever I wear earrings or a bracelet, they are usually gold.

Multiple issues: 'yarrings' is a misspelling of 'earrings' and 'bracelet' needed an article ('a bracelet') when mentioned singularly. Also subject-pronoun agreement: 'earrings or a bracelet' refers to multiple items, so use 'they are usually gold.' This fixes singular/plural and article usage.

× No, I'm not very fond of buying jewelries.

✓ No, I'm not very fond of buying jewelry.

Again, 'jewelries' is incorrect; use the uncountable noun 'jewelry' or 'pieces of jewelry.' This is a quantifier/count noun error.

× It is my mother who, uh, buys me, uh, jewelries, uh, uh, such as earrings, bracelets, and, uh, rings.

✓ My mother buys me jewelry such as earrings, bracelets, and rings.

Unnecessary dummy 'It is' structure and repeated fillers create awkwardness; simplify to 'My mother buys me jewelry.' Also replace 'jewelries' with 'jewelry.' This addresses pronoun/structure and count noun errors.

× I think some people may wear a piece of jewelry such as wearing necklace or bracelet for a long time because it might be really close to their heart.

✓ I think some people may wear a piece of jewelry, such as a necklace or a bracelet, for a long time because it might be really close to their heart.

Missing articles: 'necklace' and 'bracelet' need articles ('a'). Also remove redundant 'wearing' after 'such as.' This corrects article usage and sentence structure.

× For example, I always wear a neck piece which was given by my mother so I used.

✓ For example, I always wear a necklace that was given to me by my mother, so I used to wear it.

Multiple problems: 'neck piece' is better as 'necklace.' 'Which was given by my mother' should be 'that was given to me by my mother' to show the recipient. The ending 'so I used' is incomplete; likely intended 'so I used to wear it' (meaning habit in past) or 'so I always wear it' (present habit). Choose 'so I always wear it' if present. Here correction uses 'so I used to wear it' to indicate past habit—ensure consistency with intended meaning. Also fixes pronoun 'me' and object 'it.'