Geography— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by focusing on your feelings about geography first, then add specific details using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: I really enjoy geography because it helps me learn about different countries, such as their locations, capitals, and currencies. For example, when I was a child, I collected coins from various countries, which sparked my interest in maps and cultures.

제안: Your answer is too brief and lacks supporting details. To improve, provide specific reasons or examples to explain why geography is useful, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Absolutely, geography is very useful because it helps us understand the environment, cultures, and global issues. For instance, knowing about climate patterns can help predict weather changes and prepare for natural disasters.

제안: Try to make your answer more natural by using simpler expressions and linking your ideas clearly. Also, avoid repeating words like 'school' and 'learned' too closely.

예시: Yes, I studied geography at school, and I also taught myself more about it by researching climates and other topics online.

제안: Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Instead, give a clear opinion and support it with reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I don't want to be a geography teacher because I prefer other careers. For example, my sister teaches geography and history at a primary school, and I admire her, but it's not the right path for me.

제안: Make your answer clearer by explaining your motivation and using linking words. Also, try to avoid awkward phrasing like 'I keep learning' and 'go with the learning plan'.

예시: Yes, I plan to continue learning about other countries' geography because it helps me support my daughter's education and prepare for future opportunities.

× I like the word map and I like to know and discover more about each country, the location, the official currency and the capital city.

✓ I like the word map and I like knowing and discovering more about each country, its location, official currency, and capital city.

The verbs 'know' and 'discover' should be in the -ing form after 'like' when expressing enjoyment of activities. Using 'knowing' and 'discovering' correctly shows ongoing interest or enjoyment.

× When I was a kid I was collecting coins from different countries.

✓ When I was a kid, I collected coins from different countries.

The past continuous 'was collecting' is unnecessary here; simple past 'collected' is appropriate to describe a habitual action in the past.

× It was part of the school subjects I've learned in school and I also self learned part of the geography science by navigating the Internet and studying about the climates.

✓ It was part of the school subjects I learned in school, and I also self-learned part of geography by navigating the Internet and studying the climates.

The phrase 'studying about the climates' is incorrect; 'studying the climates' is correct. Also, 'self learned' should be hyphenated as 'self-learned'. The present perfect 'I've learned' is less appropriate here than simple past 'I learned' for completed past actions.

× My sister is a geography and history teacher and in the government sector she's teaching students in primary school.

✓ My sister is a geography and history teacher, and in the government sector, she teaches students in primary school.

The phrase 'she's teaching' suggests ongoing action; 'she teaches' is better for habitual or regular actions. Also, commas improve sentence clarity.

× I keep learning about the geography of other countries for the future as I go with the learning plan of my daughter.

✓ I keep learning about the geography of other countries for the future as I follow my daughter's learning plan.

The phrase 'go with the learning plan' is awkward; 'follow my daughter's learning plan' is clearer and more natural. Also, 'my daughter' should be possessive to indicate the plan belongs to her.