Geography— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and unclear in places. Try to make your response more concise and structured by stating your opinion clearly and supporting it with specific reasons. Avoid filler words and redundancy.

예시: I like geography because it helps me understand different cultures and places. In today's globalized world, this knowledge is essential for communication and travel. Therefore, I believe studying geography is very important.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes personal experience, which is good. However, the sentence structure is unclear and some phrases are repetitive. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more precise in your explanation.

예시: Yes, geography is very useful, especially when traveling. For example, I have visited 25 countries, and understanding the geography and culture, such as religious customs in Islamic countries, helped me respect local traditions and avoid misunderstandings.

제안: Your answer is somewhat disorganized and contains hesitations. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details smoothly. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I learned geography in high school. I was very interested because my teacher was fun and supportive, which made the lessons enjoyable and helped me understand the subject better.

제안: Your answer shows your motivation but is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your reasons logically.

예시: Yes, I would like to become a geography teacher because I enjoy learning about different countries and their cultures. I want to share this knowledge with students and inspire them to appreciate the importance of geography.

제안: Your answer is relevant but unclear and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use linking words, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Be specific about how you want to learn.

예시: Yes, I want to learn more about the geography of other countries, especially through practical experiences like traveling. This hands-on learning helps me understand cultures better than just studying from books.

× Uh, I think geography offers a lot of it knowledge about different cultures and locations, which is really important to live in globalization like worlds now.

✓ Uh, I think geography offers a lot of knowledge about different cultures and locations, which is really important to live in a globalized world now.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used before 'knowledge'. It should be removed to correctly express the idea. Also, 'globalization like worlds now' is awkward; it should be 'a globalized world now' to correctly describe the current state of the world.

× which is really important to live in globalization like worlds now.

✓ which is really important to live in a globalized world now.

The phrase 'globalization like worlds' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'a globalized world' using the indefinite article 'a' to refer to the world in a general sense.

× So nowadays the world is gonna be really globalized.

✓ So nowadays the world is going to be really globalized.

'Gonna' is informal and should be replaced with 'going to' in formal speech or writing.

× So we cannot, we can not live without geography.

✓ So we cannot live without geography.

The phrase 'we cannot, we can not' is redundant. Use either 'cannot' or 'can not' but not both together.

× When I was traveling around the world, I went to 25 countries before, but and I use using geography knowledge.

✓ When I was traveling around the world, I went to 25 countries before, and I used geography knowledge.

The phrase 'use using' is incorrect. The past tense 'used' should be used to match the past action. Also, 'but and' is redundant; 'and' alone is sufficient.

× When I go to the Islamic countries, I need to I be careful about Islam, religious problems and also the culture, about the culture, the learning.

✓ When I go to Islamic countries, I need to be careful about Islamic religious issues and also learn about the culture.

The phrase 'I need to I be careful' is incorrect; it should be 'I need to be careful'. 'Islam, religious problems' is awkward; 'Islamic religious issues' is clearer. Repetition of 'about the culture' is unnecessary; 'learn about the culture' is better.

× Yes, I do I, yes, I have, I have learned about geograph learn geography in high school.

✓ Yes, I have learned geography in high school.

The sentence is repetitive and contains errors. 'I do I, yes, I have, I have learned about geograph learn geography' is incorrect. Simplify to 'Yes, I have learned geography in high school.' to correctly express past experience.

× Uh, which I was really, I was really interested in geography because the teacher of geography is really fun for me and they, he is really supportive and amazing people.

✓ I was really interested in geography because the geography teacher was really fun for me and he is a really supportive and amazing person.

The pronouns 'they, he' are inconsistent; use 'he' if referring to one teacher. 'People' should be singular 'person' when referring to one individual.

× So I, he made me, uh.

✓ So he inspired me.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. A complete sentence like 'So he inspired me.' conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× Uh, yes, if I have a chance, I want to be, I want to become a geography teacher because I want to different a lot of, a lot of different countries.

✓ Uh, yes, if I have a chance, I want to become a geography teacher because I want to learn about a lot of different countries.

The phrase 'I want to different a lot of' is incorrect. The verb 'learn about' fits the context. Also, 'a lot of different countries' is the correct quantifier usage.

× So I have knowledge about the culture and the traditions of a lot of countries.

✓ So I have knowledge about the cultures and traditions of many countries.

'Culture' and 'traditions' should be plural when referring to multiple countries. 'A lot of' can be replaced with 'many' for better formality.

× So I want to share that knowledge to the students and I want them to, uh, have, uh, interested about geography, which is really important.

✓ So I want to share that knowledge with the students and I want them to be interested in geography, which is really important.

The correct preposition is 'share with' not 'share to'. Also, 'have interested about' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'be interested in'.

× I want to learn about the geography, about the countries, but I want I want to learn more practical learning, especially like going to the the countries compared a lot of them the studying in a school or something on the desk because it it gives me more realistic culturally cultural.

✓ I want to learn about the geography of countries, but I want to have more practical learning, especially by going to the countries rather than just studying in school or at a desk because it gives me a more realistic cultural experience.

The sentence has multiple preposition errors and awkward phrasing. 'Learn about the geography of countries' is correct. 'More practical learning' is better than 'learn more practical learning'. 'Going to the countries rather than just studying' clarifies the comparison. 'More realistic cultural experience' is the correct phrase.