Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally natural and effective, but it could be improved by correcting some grammatical errors and making the sentences more concise. For example, instead of "I'm so captivated with their vibrant colors and fragrances," say "I'm captivated by their vibrant colors and fragrances." Also, avoid redundancy such as "I really feel energized and refreshed" which can be simplified. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I really love flowers because I'm captivated by their vibrant colors and fragrances. I like to grow them on my balcony so I can enjoy their beauty every morning, which helps me feel refreshed. Additionally, I buy flowers to decorate my home on special occasions.

제안: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases, such as "My parents and my parents" and "gathering and paintings." Try to clarify your ideas and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your points logically. Also, correct grammar mistakes and make your sentences more coherent.

예시: My parents are passionate about flowers and enjoy gardening and painting them. They take good care of the plants to watch them bloom over time, and they often share these beautiful moments with me, which makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences, such as "I'm so captivated by." Try to use present tense consistently and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, there are many beautiful flowers in my community. Whenever I go to work, I enjoy seeing the blossoms along the path. Their beauty always makes me feel refreshed and relaxed.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more natural. For example, "I would like to keep them whenever I see" is unclear. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos to capture the beauty of flowers, especially cherry blossoms. I'm captivated by their pink petals, which are truly amazing. I like to share these photos with my friends and family and keep them as memories.

제안: There is a mistake in the phrase "skip flowers" which should be "send flowers." Also, try to make your answer more concise and use linking words to connect ideas. Correct grammar errors and clarify your points for better coherence.

예시: Yes, in China, it is common to send flowers on special occasions like birthdays, anniversaries, or meetings. For example, I often give flowers to my parents on their birthdays to show my love and appreciation for their support.

× I'm so captivated with their vibrant colors and fragrances.

✓ I'm so captivated by their vibrant colors and fragrances.

The verb 'captivated' is typically followed by the preposition 'by' to indicate the cause of captivation. Using 'with' here is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'captivated by'.

× I would like to grow flowers on the balcony at home so that I can see them in the mornings that I really feel energized and refreshed.

✓ I would like to grow flowers on the balcony at home so that I can see them in the mornings and really feel energized and refreshed.

The original sentence has an incorrect structure with 'in the mornings that I really feel...'. It should be connected properly with 'and' to link the two ideas clearly.

× I also buy flowers to decorate my homes on some special occasions.

✓ I also buy flowers to decorate my home on some special occasions.

The word 'homes' is plural, but here it refers to the student's own residence, which is singular. Therefore, 'home' should be singular.

× My parents and my parents are passionate about flowers.

✓ My parents are passionate about flowers.

The phrase 'My parents and my parents' is redundant and incorrect. It should be simply 'My parents'.

× They are very good at gathering and paintings.

✓ They are very good at gardening and painting.

The words 'gathering' and 'paintings' are incorrect in this context. The correct words are 'gardening' (the activity) and 'painting' (the activity). 'Gathering' means collecting people or things, which is not intended here.

× They would like to see the flowers bloom and they take good care of the flowers so that they will see the flowers bloom over time and they would like to share these moments with me that could really make me feel. Relax and refreshed.

✓ They would like to see the flowers bloom and take good care of them so that they can see the flowers bloom over time. They would also like to share these moments with me, which really make me feel relaxed and refreshed.

The original sentence is too long and improperly punctuated, causing confusion. It should be split into two sentences with proper conjunctions and punctuation. Also, 'feel. Relax and refreshed' is incorrect; it should be 'feel relaxed and refreshed'.

× Yes, there were so many beautiful flowers in my community.

✓ Yes, there are so many beautiful flowers in my community.

The question is about the current situation, so present tense 'are' should be used instead of past tense 'were'. This is a 'There be' issue.

× Whenever I want to work, I could see the beauty of the flowers and the blossom along the path.

✓ Whenever I want to work, I can see the beauty of the flowers and the blossoms along the path.

The modal verb 'could' suggests past ability, but the context is present. 'Can' is appropriate here. Also, 'blossom' should be plural 'blossoms' to match 'flowers'.

× When I see them, I really feel refreshed and relaxed and I'm so captivated by.

✓ When I see them, I really feel refreshed and relaxed, and I'm so captivated by them.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'captivated by' missing the object. Adding 'them' completes the sentence. Also, a comma before 'and' improves readability.

× Yes, I would like to take photos to capture the beauty of the flowers, especially cherry blossoms.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos to capture the beauty of the flowers, especially cherry blossoms.

The use of 'would like to' implies a polite desire or future intention, but the question is about daily life habits. Using simple present 'like to' is more appropriate.

× I would also like to keep them whenever I see.

✓ I would also like to keep them whenever I see them.

The sentence is incomplete; the object 'them' is missing after 'see'. Adding 'them' completes the sentence.

× Yes, in China, it's very common for people to skip flowers on some special occasions, such as birthdays, anniversaries, or meetings.

✓ Yes, in China, it's very common for people to send flowers on some special occasions, such as birthdays, anniversaries, or meetings.

The verb 'skip' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'send' flowers. 'Skip' means to omit or not do something.

× For example, I would like to give flowers to my parents to show my love and appreciation for them on their birthdays and respect them for their great contribution.

✓ For example, I like to give flowers to my parents to show my love and appreciation for them on their birthdays and respect them for their great contribution.

Similar to previous, 'would like to' implies future or polite desire, but the context is habitual action. Using simple present 'like to' is more appropriate.