Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and be more specific and clear in your descriptions. Also, keep your answer concise and structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

예시: Yes, I absolutely love flowers. I have planted a variety of flowers in my garden at home, such as roses and daisies, which brighten up the space and make me feel happy.

제안: Avoid filler words and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be specific about how flowers affect your friend.

예시: Yes, my friend Benicia really loves flowers. She often asks me to bring some when we meet because flowers always brighten her mood and help her feel happy and relaxed.

제안: Be careful with grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

예시: Yes, there are many flowers in my town because many people are passionate about planting flowers and trees, which makes our surroundings beautiful and clean.

제안: Work on sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about why you like taking photos of flowers.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I find their colours very interesting and beautiful. Also, I enjoy capturing different kinds of flowers to share with my friends and keep as memories.

제안: Avoid filler words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific occasions when people send flowers.

예시: Yes, in my country, sending flowers has become increasingly popular. People often give flowers to show their love, care, and support, especially on special occasions like birthdays, anniversaries, or when someone is unwell.

× I have planted a variety of flowers in my garden at home such as roses, UMM and Daisy with brightness of my umm, most umm and make me feel happy.

✓ I have planted a variety of flowers in my garden at home such as roses, umm and daisies with brightness that makes me feel happy.

The word 'Daisy' should be plural 'daisies' to match the plural 'roses' and the phrase 'make me feel happy' should be 'makes me feel happy' to agree with the singular subject 'brightness'. This corrects singular/plural agreement and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, my friend Benicia really loves flower and she often asks me to bring some flowers whenever we meet because, umm, flowers always brightens her mood and feel her, uh, happy and relaxed.

✓ Yes, my friend Benicia really loves flowers and she often asks me to bring some flowers whenever we meet because, umm, flowers always brighten her mood and make her feel happy and relaxed.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the context. The verb 'brightens' should be 'brighten' to agree with plural subject 'flowers'. Also, 'feel her happy' is incorrect; it should be 'make her feel happy' to correctly express the idea.

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers in my town and many people are passionate about planting flowers and and trees with which makes our surrounding most beautiful and clean.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers in my town and many people are passionate about planting flowers and trees, which makes our surroundings more beautiful and clean.

The repeated 'and and' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'and'. The phrase 'with which makes' is incorrect; it should be 'which makes' to properly connect the clause. 'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' and 'most beautiful' should be 'more beautiful' for correct comparative form.

× Yes, I often take photo of flower because I find their color and save most interesting and very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of flowers because I find their colors most interesting and very beautiful.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' to match the context of taking multiple pictures. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers' to agree with 'their'. 'Color' should be plural 'colors' to match 'their'. The phrase 'save most interesting' is incorrect and should be omitted or rephrased; here it is omitted for clarity.

× Also I like capturing different kind of flowers to share with my friends and keep them as a memories.

✓ Also, I like capturing different kinds of flowers to share with my friends and keep them as memories.

'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' because it refers to multiple types. 'A memories' is incorrect; 'memories' is plural and does not need an article 'a'.

× Yes, in my country sending flowers to umm others has become increasingly popular. UMM people often give flowers to sow their love, care and support UMM, especially on a special day like birthday, anniversary or someone is unwell.

✓ Yes, in my country sending flowers to others has become increasingly popular. People often give flowers to show their love, care and support, especially on special days like birthdays, anniversaries or when someone is unwell.

The word 'sow' is incorrect and should be 'show' to convey the intended meaning. 'UMM' is filler and should be removed for clarity. 'Birthday' and 'anniversary' should be plural to match 'special days'. The phrase 'or someone is unwell' should be 'or when someone is unwell' for correct sentence structure.