Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and covers reasons why you love flowers, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your response within 4-5 sentences and avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly. Also, use linking words to connect your points clearly.

예시: Yes, I love flowers because their bright colors and pleasant fragrances always freshen up my mood. Moreover, I enjoy gifting them to my friends and family as they are a beautiful way to express emotions and feelings.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'friends circus'. Try to use correct grammar and clarify your ideas. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

예시: No, I don't know anyone who has a particular passion for flowers. Most of my friends and family are more interested in art and architecture rather than flowers.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and some redundancy. Use correct sentence structure and linking words to make your answer clearer and more natural.

예시: Yes, I live in a society that has many parks and gardens filled with beautiful flowers, which makes the area a very pleasant and attractive place to live.

제안: Your answer is relevant but the phrase 'rather than' is used incorrectly. Use appropriate linking words and correct grammar to express contrast clearly.

예시: No, I usually do not take photos of flowers; instead, I prefer to photograph people and landscapes.

제안: Your answer is informative but the phrase 'These American people' is unnatural in this context. Use more natural expressions and linking words to improve flow and clarity.

예시: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to each other on occasions such as weddings, anniversaries, and birthdays. Flowers beautifully convey emotions and are a wonderful way to express love and celebrate special moments.

× Yes, I love flowers because their bright colors and fragrances freshness up my mood and I like to gift them to my friends and family members because they are the best way to express emotions and feelings.

✓ Yes, I love flowers because their bright colors and fragrances freshen up my mood and I like to gift them to my friends and family members because they are the best way to express emotions and feelings.

The verb 'freshness' is incorrect here; the correct verb form is 'freshen' to agree with the plural subject 'colors and fragrances'. 'Freshness' is a noun, but a verb is needed to describe the action of improving the mood.

× No, I don't know anyone particularly who have a passion for, uh, flowers.

✓ No, I don't know anyone particularly who has a passion for, uh, flowers.

The pronoun 'anyone' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× In my friends circus and my family, they are more interested in art and structure rather than flowers.

✓ In my friends' circle and my family, they are more interested in art and structure rather than flowers.

The phrase 'friends circus' is incorrect; it should be 'friends' circle' to indicate the group of friends. Also, 'structure' should be plural 'structures' to match 'art' as plural interests.

× Yes, uh, I live in a society where lot of flowers and many parks and gardens that have beautiful flowers that makes my society a very beautiful residential area.

✓ Yes, uh, I live in a society where there are lots of flowers and many parks and gardens that have beautiful flowers that make my society a very beautiful residential area.

The phrase 'lot of flowers' should be 'lots of flowers' or 'a lot of flowers' and the verb 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with the plural subject 'parks and gardens'. Also, 'there are' is needed to introduce the existence of flowers and parks.

× No, I usually do not take photos of flowers rather than I like to take photos of people and landscapes.

✓ No, I usually do not take photos of flowers; rather, I like to take photos of people and landscapes.

The phrase 'rather than' is incorrectly used here. The correct expression is 'rather' to contrast preferences. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× These American people send flowers to each other on various occasions like wedding, anniversary and birthday.

✓ American people send flowers to each other on various occasions like weddings, anniversaries, and birthdays.

The word 'These' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, the occasions should be plural ('weddings', 'anniversaries', 'birthdays') to indicate multiple events.