Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love flowers, especially beautiful ones in spring. In Japan, cherry blossoms are very famous, and my family and I often visit parks to enjoy them together. We usually have food and drinks while appreciating the scenery, which makes it a wonderful experience.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many repetitions and grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas logically, avoid repeating words, and clarify your points with correct grammar and vocabulary.

예시: Yes, I have a friend named May, whose name comes from the flower Plumeria. This flower symbolizes being the center of attention, and I think it suits her because everyone likes her. She is a very kind person.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has many hesitations and some unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid unnecessary fillers like 'uh' and 'but'.

예시: In my city center, there are few flowers because there is little space for plants. However, the nearby park has many flowers, and I often visit it twice a week. Being there helps me feel relaxed.

제안: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct verb tenses. Also, avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my daily life. I send these photos to my friends who also love flowers, and we share pictures with each other. This exchange makes me feel happy.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and some unclear expressions. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas logically. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid unnecessary fillers.

예시: Yes, people in Japan often send flowers to others, especially on special occasions like birthdays. For example, many of my friends gave me flowers to celebrate my 20th birthday, which made me very happy.

× I love flowers, especially I like to see flower, beautiful flowers in the spring.

✓ I love flowers, especially I like to see flowers, beautiful flowers in the spring.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the context of seeing multiple flowers in spring.

× Well, in Japan the cherry blossom is really famous in Japan.

✓ Well, the cherry blossom is really famous in Japan.

The phrase 'in Japan' is repeated unnecessarily, causing redundancy. Removing the second 'in Japan' improves sentence clarity.

× So in Supreme we go to the park to see this, to see the beautiful cherry blossom with umm food and alcohol with my friends and with my family, which is really good experience.

✓ So in spring we go to the park to see the beautiful cherry blossoms with food and alcohol with my friends and family, which is a really good experience.

'Supreme' is likely a mispronunciation of 'spring'. 'Cherry blossom' should be plural 'cherry blossoms' as multiple flowers are seen. 'A really good experience' requires the article 'a' before 'really good experience'.

× Yes I do my friend who loves flowers and I her name is may her name her name is named after the flower which is prumeria which means like the the the flower means is the center of the people.

✓ Yes, I do. My friend who loves flowers, her name is May. Her name is named after the flower which is plumeria, which means the flower is the center of the people.

The sentence is run-on and confusing. Adding punctuation and correcting 'prumeria' to 'plumeria' clarifies meaning. Also, 'her name is May' is repeated unnecessarily and should be simplified.

× So PE everyone loves her that I think she is really good person.

✓ So, I think everyone loves her because she is a really good person.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Reordering and adding 'because' clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun use.

× Uh, in my city, uh, there are no, there are little, uh, flowers in my city because the, because I live in the center of the city, so there is no room for the, uh, plants in the flowers.

✓ Uh, in my city, there are few flowers because I live in the center of the city, so there is no room for plants or flowers.

'There are no, there are little' is incorrect; 'few' is appropriate for countable nouns like 'flowers'. Also, 'plants in the flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'plants or flowers'.

× But, uh, it but near the, but in the park, uh, there are many flowers that I go to often twice a week though, I feel really relaxed.

✓ But near the park, there are many flowers. I go there often, twice a week, and I feel really relaxed.

The original sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Breaking it into two sentences improves clarity and flow.

× I used to do, I take flowers in day my daily life.

✓ I used to take photos of flowers in my daily life.

'I used to do' is incomplete and unclear. The phrase 'I take flowers in day my daily life' is incorrect; it should be 'I used to take photos of flowers in my daily life' to express past habitual action.

× I take many flowers photos and to send my, to send my friends, my friends who loves the flowers.

✓ I take many photos of flowers and send them to my friends who love flowers.

'Flowers photos' should be 'photos of flowers'. 'My friends who loves' should be 'my friends who love' to agree in number.

× So we, uh, we send each other. We send flowers each other and which makes me really, uh, good feeling.

✓ So we send flowers to each other, which makes me feel really good.

'Send each other' is incomplete; it should be 'send flowers to each other'. 'Makes me really good feeling' is incorrect; it should be 'makes me feel really good'.

× I think so too. Umm, I think the people who live in my country with Japan send a lot of flowers to others.

✓ I think so too. Umm, I think the people who live in my country, Japan, send a lot of flowers to others.

The phrase 'in my country with Japan' is incorrect; it should be 'in my country, Japan'. No modal verb correction needed here, but sentence structure improved.

× Uh, especially in, uh, universally days or some special days.

✓ Uh, especially on universal days or some special days.

The correct preposition for days is 'on', not 'in'. Also, 'universally days' is likely 'universal days'.

× Uh, for example, uh, in, in birthday, uh, many, my, my friends gave me flowers to me and to celebrate like my university, uh, my 20th birthday, which was really, uh, happy.

✓ For example, on my birthday, many of my friends gave me flowers to celebrate my 20th birthday at university, which made me really happy.

'In birthday' should be 'on my birthday'. 'Many, my, my friends' is redundant; 'many of my friends' is correct. 'Gave me flowers to me' is redundant; 'gave me flowers' suffices. 'Which was really happy' should be 'which made me really happy'.