Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答に多くの「uh」や「umm」が含まれており、流暢さが低下しています。また、文が途中で終わっているため、内容が不十分です。より自然で効果的な回答を目指し、文を完結させ、具体的な理由や感情を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I love flowers, especially cherry blossoms. During the cherry blossom season, many people in Japan enjoy viewing them because they symbolize the beauty and transience of life.

제안: 回答に多くのためらいの言葉があり、流暢さが損なわれています。文の構造も単純で、詳細な説明が不足しています。より自然な表現を使い、妻が花を好きな理由やどのような花を飾るかなど具体的な情報を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, my wife loves flowers very much. She often decorates our home with fresh bouquets, especially roses and lilies, which brighten up the rooms.

제안: 文法的な誤りや不自然な表現があり、意味が伝わりにくいです。具体的な場所や花の種類について明確に述べ、文を完結させることが必要です。

예시: Yes, there are many flowers in my city. For example, cherry blossom trees bloom beautifully in the park near my apartment every spring.

제안: 回答が不完全で、文法的な誤りもあります。自分の行動と妻の行動を明確に区別し、妻が花の写真を撮る理由を具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。

예시: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers, but my wife often does because she finds them beautiful and enjoys capturing their colors.

제안: 回答が不明瞭で、文が途中で終わっています。花を贈る一般的な状況や理由について具体的に述べ、文を完結させる必要があります。

예시: It depends on the occasion. People in my country often send flowers for celebrations like birthdays or to express sympathy during funerals.

× Yes I do as a Japanese resident, I'm, umm, interested in, uh, especially cherry blossom during the cherry blossom season, many people, uh, want to see it because it.

✓ Yes, I do. As a Japanese resident, I'm especially interested in cherry blossoms during the cherry blossom season because many people want to see them.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and missing verbs, making it unclear. The phrase 'especially cherry blossom during the cherry blossom season' needs to be connected properly. Also, 'many people want to see it because it' is incomplete and unclear. The correction clarifies the sentence and uses the present participle 'interested in' correctly.

× Yes I do umm, I think, umm, this applies to my wife. Uh, she loves flowers very much. Uh, she puts uh, several flowers into my home.

✓ Yes, I do. I think this applies to my wife. She loves flowers very much. She puts several flowers in my home.

The preposition 'into' is incorrect here; 'put flowers into my home' should be 'put flowers in my home' because 'in' indicates location, while 'into' implies movement inside, which is unnecessary here.

× Yes, my city has several flowers. For example, in the sanity of my apartment there are plenty cherry blossoms because, uh, my city receives it from.

✓ Yes, my city has many flowers. For example, in the vicinity of my apartment, there are plenty of cherry blossoms because my city receives them.

'Several flowers' is vague; 'many flowers' is more natural. 'Sanity' is a mishearing or typo for 'vicinity'. 'Plenty cherry blossoms' should be 'plenty of cherry blossoms'. Also, 'receives it from' is incomplete and unclear; 'receives them' refers to cherry blossoms properly.

× No, I don't, but, uh, my wife tends to take photos of flowers because she loves flowers very much. Uh, as she say, uh, photos of flowers makes make.

✓ No, I don't, but my wife tends to take photos of flowers because she loves them very much. As she says, photos of flowers make her happy.

'As she say' should be 'as she says' (third person singular). 'Photos of flowers makes make' is incorrect; the verb should agree with the plural subject 'photos', so 'make' is correct. The sentence is completed to make sense.

× It depends on the situation. I support that several people. Gave a bucket of flowers to people that are related to.

✓ It depends on the situation. I think several people give bouquets of flowers to people they are related to.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. 'I support that several people.' is incomplete and unclear. 'Gave a bucket of flowers to people that are related to.' is a fragment missing subject and object clarity. The correction combines and clarifies the meaning, using 'give bouquets' instead of 'bucket' which is incorrect.