Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but lacks fluency and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I love flowers, especially those growing on trees because they look more beautiful and are more relaxing to see than picked flowers.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and clearly, and provide specific supporting details with proper linking words.

예시: I don't know anyone who is particularly passionate about flowers, but I personally enjoy offering colorful and fragrant flowers to Lord Buddha as a sign of respect.

제안: Your answer is good but could be more organized and fluent. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: Absolutely. I have planted many flowers around my house, including roses and dahlias. Additionally, I own a small restaurant with a rooftop pool where I have also planted various flowers.

제안: Your answer is heartfelt but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: I don't often have time to take photos of flowers, but I enjoy watching them grow. They are like my children, and I love admiring their beauty.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to show contrast and cause-effect relationships.

예시: In the past, few people sent flowers as gifts, but nowadays, with more flower shops available, more people are choosing to send flowers to others. I think this reflects a growing appreciation for nature.

× I prefer flowers in the tree not picked flowers because when the flowers are on the tree it very nice and mind relaxing when it picked up the not that much beautiful so.

✓ I prefer flowers on the tree, not picked flowers, because when the flowers are on the tree, they are very nice and mind relaxing; when they are picked, they are not that beautiful.

The sentence has singular and plural agreement issues. 'Flowers' is plural, so the pronoun referring to them should be 'they' instead of 'it'. Also, 'picked flowers' is plural, so the verb should agree accordingly. Correcting these ensures subject-verb and pronoun agreement.

× I prefer flowers in the tree not picked flowers because when the flowers are on the tree it very nice and mind relaxing when it picked up the not that much beautiful so.

✓ I prefer flowers on the tree, not picked flowers, because when the flowers are on the tree, they are very nice and mind relaxing; when they are picked, they are not that beautiful.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'flowers in the tree'; the correct preposition is 'on' to indicate flowers growing on the tree. Also, 'picked up' should be 'picked' to describe flowers that have been removed from the tree.

× when the flowers are on the tree it very nice and mind relaxing

✓ when the flowers are on the tree, they are very nice and mind relaxing

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to plural 'flowers'. The correct pronoun is 'they', and the verb 'are' should be used to agree with the plural subject.

× when it picked up the not that much beautiful so.

✓ when they are picked, they are not that beautiful.

The phrase 'when it picked up' is incorrect. The passive form 'are picked' is appropriate here to describe the state of flowers after being picked. Also, 'not that much beautiful' should be 'not that beautiful' for natural expression.

× Actually, I don't have an idea about one who have a good taste in flowers, but I love flowers and also I love to offer flowers to our Lord Buddha, uh, with various colors and good scent.

✓ Actually, I don't have an idea about anyone who has a good taste in flowers, but I love flowers and also I love to offer flowers to our Lord Buddha with various colors and good scents.

The pronoun 'one' is less natural here; 'anyone' fits better. Also, 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'anyone'. 'Scent' should be plural 'scents' to match 'various colors'.

× I planted so many flowers around my house. Uh, and also I have a small restaurant with the pool in on the top of my house and I planted their roses, uh, dahlias and some, some kind of other flowers.

✓ I have planted many flowers around my house. Also, I have a small restaurant with a pool on the top of my house, and I have planted roses, dahlias, and some other kinds of flowers there.

The sentence mixes tenses and has pluralization issues. 'Planted' is better as present perfect 'have planted' to indicate experience. 'Their roses' is incorrect; 'roses' is sufficient. 'Some kind of other flowers' should be 'some other kinds of flowers' for correct plural form.

× I have a small restaurant with the pool in on the top of my house and I planted their roses, uh, dahlias and some, some kind of other flowers.

✓ I have a small restaurant with a pool on the top of my house, and I have planted roses, dahlias, and some other kinds of flowers there.

The phrase 'in on the top' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on the top'. Also, 'their roses' is incorrect; 'roses' is sufficient. 'There' is added to indicate location of planting.

× Actually, I don't have that much time to take flowers in my daily life, but I enjoy watching of the flowers.

✓ Actually, I don't have much time to take photos of flowers in my daily life, but I enjoy watching the flowers.

The phrase 'take flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'take photos of flowers'. Also, 'watching of the flowers' is incorrect; 'watching the flowers' is correct. The modal verb issue is minor but relates to correct verb usage.

× They are just like my children.

✓ They are just like my children.

No correction needed; pronoun usage is correct here.

× I love to see them grow and I love to see their beauty.

✓ I love to see them grow and I love to see their beauty.

No correction needed; present tense usage is appropriate.

× Actually earlier very little has sent flowers to others as gifts but nowadays there are more flower shops and people getting changed their mind to send some flowers as gifts to others.

✓ Actually, earlier very few people sent flowers to others as gifts, but nowadays there are more flower shops and people are changing their minds to send flowers as gifts to others.

'Very little has sent' is incorrect; 'very few people sent' is correct for countable subjects. 'People getting changed their mind' is incorrect; it should be 'people are changing their minds' to use present continuous tense and plural 'minds'.