Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I love flowers), then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and avoid fillers. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' properly. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use correct verb forms and articles.

예시: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses and sunflowers. They make me feel happy because their bright colors lift my mood, and when I buy them I feel over the moon. I also enjoy their scent, which is very comforting.

제안: Answer directly, use correct tense and articles, and give a specific example. Avoid vague phrases like 'dirt' and unnecessary hesitations. Use one linking phrase to explain why she likes flowers.

예시: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She often buys them for special occasions such as birthdays and holidays because they brighten the house and make her feel happy and satisfied when she returns home.

제안: Give a clear, concise response: state where you live and whether you have flowers, then explain briefly why. Avoid confusing or contradictory phrases and unnecessary repetition. Use correct prepositions and simpler sentences.

예시: I live in an apartment in Ho Chi Minh City, so I don't have a garden and I can't grow many flowers. Because space and building rules are limited, I usually buy potted plants instead of planting a garden.

제안: Be specific and grammatical. Start with a direct sentence (Yes, I often photograph flowers), then explain when and why using clear reasons and one example. Replace unclear words ('safely leave my mood') with correct expressions.

예시: Yes, I often photograph flowers because their bright colors lift my mood and give me energy. For example, when I walk outside and see flowers along the path, I take a quick photo to remember the moment and cheer myself up.

제안: Answer directly and use clear examples of occasions. Explain briefly why people send flowers, using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'per day'.

예시: Yes, in Vietnam people often send flowers for occasions such as weddings, funerals, and holidays like Tet. Giving flowers is meaningful because it shows respect and affection, and people choose types of flowers that suit the recipient.

× Actually, I really love flowers, especially some kind of like, uh, uh, rose and sunflowers.

✓ Actually, I really love flowers, especially roses and sunflowers.

The phrase 'some kind of like, uh, uh, rose and sunflowers' is awkward and uses an incorrect quantifier/phrase. Use the plural nouns 'roses' and 'sunflowers' to refer generally to those types. Remove filler words for clarity.

× This give me a sense of happiness and whenever I buy it, I can feel over the moon because they give me the not only the beautiful, it's beautiful, but also the sense of it very, umm, satisfaction.

✓ They give me a sense of happiness, and whenever I buy them I feel over the moon because they are not only beautiful but also very satisfying.

Subjects and verbs must agree: plural 'they' requires 'give' and 'are'. 'It' and 'them' were mixed incorrectly. Remove redundant words and reorder ('not only... but also') to correct form. Use 'satisfying' (adjective) rather than awkward noun phrasing.

× Well, it's actually my mother.

✓ Well, actually, it is my mother.

Use 'it is' or 'she is' consistently. The contraction 'it's' can be ambiguous; expanding to 'it is' clarifies speech. No major grammar error but clearer phrasing helps.

× She's always buy flower for some occasion such as dirt or some holidays that is very good and this can make my house better and beautiful.

✓ She always buys flowers for occasions such as birthdays or holidays; this makes my house look nicer and more beautiful.

Third person singular requires '-s' on the verb: 'she buys'. Use plural 'flowers' and correct nouns ('birthdays' not 'dirt'). Use 'makes' not 'can make' for habitual facts, and 'nicer'/'more beautiful' for natural adjective combinations.

× Umm, so she love it because it's can give the, give her, uh, the sense of satisfaction and she can feel over the moon whenever she's back.

✓ She loves them because they give her a sense of satisfaction, and she feels over the moon when she comes home.

Use correct verb form 'loves' for third person singular and plural pronoun 'them' for 'flowers'. Remove auxiliary 'can' where not needed for habitual states. 'Whenever she's back' is unnatural; use 'when she comes home'.

× Recently I live in the Ho Chi Minh City in an apartment, so I don't have the own garden because it's not, it's just a small apartment.

✓ Recently I have been living in Ho Chi Minh City in an apartment, so I don't have my own garden because it's a small apartment.

Use present perfect progressive 'have been living' to indicate a recent ongoing situation. Use 'my own garden' (possessive) and remove redundant words.

× So alternatively I'm not allowed and not be allowed to roam on island in my apartment.

✓ Also, I'm not allowed to have plants on the balcony in my apartment.

Original sentence misuses prepositions and verb forms. 'Roam on island' is meaningless here. Clarify intended meaning: 'not allowed to have plants on the balcony' uses correct preposition and verb construction 'am not allowed to'.

× Yes, I often take a photo with flowers because their bright colors and they can safely leave my mood and give me energy.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of flowers because their bright colors lift my mood and give me energy.

Use plural 'photos' and correct preposition 'of'. 'Lift my mood' is the correct collocation; 'leave my mood' is incorrect. Remove unnecessary words and use simple present for habitual actions.

× For sample, say whenever I'm going out and I see the flower in the path or surrounding, it can give me some energies and restore my mood.

✓ For example, whenever I'm going out and I see flowers on the path or nearby, they give me energy and restore my mood.

Use 'for example' not 'for sample'. Use plural 'flowers' and prepositions 'on the path' or 'nearby'. 'Energy' is uncountable, so use 'energy' not 'energies'. Use present simple for habitual results.

× That is very good. And sometime I yeah.

✓ That is very good. And sometimes I do.

Use adverb 'sometimes' and complete the sentence with a verb. 'I yeah' is informal and incomplete; 'I do' is a simple, complete response.

× Yes, honestly, in Vietnam many people give flowers to others, especially some special occasions like per day or holidays.

✓ Yes, honestly, in Vietnam many people give flowers to others, especially on special occasions or holidays.

Use preposition 'on' with 'special occasions'. Remove 'per day' which is incorrect here. Maintain present simple for general facts.

× That is very meaningful and knowing the kind, the type of flowers, the other love is very uh, good and it can show the respect to them.

✓ It is very meaningful, and knowing the types of flowers someone likes is good because it can show respect for them.

Reorder sentence for clarity. Use 'types of flowers' and 'someone likes' instead of fragmented phrases. Use 'show respect for them' (preposition) and avoid repeating definite articles unnecessarily.

× So, uh, giving flowers is very uh, formal in Vietnam.

✓ So, giving flowers is very common and traditional in Vietnam.

'Formal' may be inaccurate; 'common' or 'traditional' better fits cultural practice. Choose adjectives that accurately convey meaning.