Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar and word choice: say 'I love flowers' not 'love to flower'. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with linking words. Keep it concise and natural (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I love flowers. Their vibrant colors and natural fragrance always brighten my mood, and I often give them to people to show affection.

제안: Fix grammar and sentence structure: use singular/plural correctly and complete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add linked supporting details (use linking words like 'for example' or 'so'). Avoid trailing fragments.

예시: Many people like flowers, but my husband especially appreciates them. For example, their scent, colors and soft petals relax him, so I often give him a bouquet when he is stressed.

제안: Avoid repetition and correct grammar. Start directly: say whether there are many flowers, then give specific examples and a reason. Use linking words and finish sentences fully.

예시: Yes, there are many flowers near my home because I grow several plants in front of the house, such as roses, sunflowers, lilies and tulips. I spend a lot of time caring for them, which makes me feel calm and happy.

제안: Use natural phrasing and correct verb forms. Give a concise topic sentence, then one or two clear supporting points with linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like 'on the daily basis' and 'the show social media'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy nature photography and often photograph flowers in the morning because of the soft light. I share the pictures on social media, and my friends' feedback encourages me.

제안: Improve grammar and vocabulary accuracy. Start with a clear statement, then list common occasions with correct words (e.g. 'sympathy' not 'sympathetic movement'; 'hospital visits' not 'hospital visa'). Keep the list concise and relevant.

예시: Yes, sending flowers is a common tradition in Pakistan. People typically give flowers for celebrations such as weddings, anniversaries, birthdays and graduations, as well as to express sympathy during hospital visits or funerals.

× I really love to flower.

✓ I really love flowers.

The phrase 'love to flower' incorrectly uses the verb 'flower' after 'love'. When expressing liking for something as a noun, use the plural noun 'flowers' or the gerund 'flowering' if talking about the action. Here the student means they love flowers, so use the noun plural 'flowers'.

× Their vibrant color and natural fragrance can brighten up my mood.

✓ Their vibrant colors and natural fragrance can brighten my mood.

The pronoun 'Their' refers to the plural noun 'flowers', which is fine, but 'color' should be plural because multiple flowers have multiple colors; 'brighten up my mood' is acceptable but more natural as 'brighten my mood'. Use 'colors' and simplify verb phrase.

× They are the best way to express my love to someone.

✓ They are the best way to express my love to someone.

This sentence is acceptable but could be improved by using 'for someone' instead of 'to someone' for naturalness. However, it does not violate the listed grammar types, so minimal change is given.

× Most of the person love to flowers, but my husband hold deep appreciation for them.

✓ Most people love flowers, but my husband holds a deep appreciation for them.

'Most of the person' is incorrect; use 'Most people' for the plural generalization. 'Love to flowers' mixes infinitive with noun; use 'love flowers'. Subject-verb agreement: 'husband holds' requires third person singular 'holds'. Also include the article 'a' before 'deep appreciation'.

× They're enchanting. Fragrance, vibrant color and soft texture give him relaxation.

✓ They're enchanting. Their fragrance, vibrant colors, and soft texture relax him.

List nouns need determiners and plural agreement: 'Fragrance' should be 'their fragrance' or 'the fragrance', 'vibrant color' -> 'vibrant colors'. 'Give him relaxation' is an awkward collocation; use the verb 'relax' to convey the effect.

× Whenever he feels stressful and depressed after a hectic day, I give him a bouquet which gives happiness, calming and.

✓ Whenever he feels stressed and depressed after a hectic day, I give him a bouquet that brings him happiness and calm.

Use the adjective 'stressed' (not 'stressful') to describe a person. 'Which gives happiness, calming and.' is incomplete and awkward; 'that brings him happiness and calm' is concise and grammatical. Use proper relative pronoun 'that' and complete the list.

× As they as they discussed before, I really love to flowers that's why I have grown so many plants in front of my house like roses, sunflower, Lily and tulips.

✓ As I mentioned before, I really love flowers, so I have grown many plants in front of my house, such as roses, sunflowers, lilies, and tulips.

'As they as they discussed before' is incorrect and unclear; likely 'As I mentioned before' is intended. 'Love to flowers' should be 'love flowers'. Use 'so' to connect clauses. Plural forms and capitalization: 'sunflowers' and 'lilies' are plural and not proper nouns, so lowercased. Use 'such as' for examples.

× Most of the time I spend to take care of them.

✓ Most of the time I spend taking care of them.

After 'spend' the gerund form 'taking' is required (spend + -ing). The preposition 'to' is incorrect here.

× It gives me happiness and. Calm.

✓ It gives me happiness and calm.

Fragmented punctuation caused 'and. Calm.' to be a sentence fragment. Combine into a single phrase 'happiness and calm'.

× I am a big fan of nature photography, so I take photos on the daily basis specially in the morning by the different angles and lights.

✓ I am a big fan of nature photography, so I take photos on a daily basis, especially in the morning from different angles and in different light.

Use 'on a daily basis' not 'on the daily basis'. 'Specially' should be 'especially'. 'By the different angles and lights' is incorrect preposition use; use 'from different angles' and 'in different light' or 'under different lighting'.

× Furthermore, also shared with my friends on the show social media, they gives me feedback, capturing the beauty of flowers, give me relaxation.

✓ Furthermore, I also share them with my friends on social media; they give me feedback about the photos, which captures the beauty of the flowers and relaxes me.

Sentence lacks subject for 'shared' and misorders words. Add subject 'I' and correct verb forms: 'share' present tense, 'they give' plural verb, and 'relaxes me' for effect. 'Show social media' is incorrect; use 'social media'. Use relative clause to link ideas.

× Yes, send flowers to someone is a tradition of Pakistan.

✓ Yes, sending flowers to someone is a tradition in Pakistan.

When using a noun idea as subject, use gerund 'sending' not base verb 'send'. Also use 'in Pakistan' (preposition) rather than 'of Pakistan' for this context.

× Mostly people give flowers to each other on the special occasions like wedding anniversary, celebrating milestone, birthday, graduation, promotion, parties and some sympathetic movement like hospital visa, topology and funerals.

✓ People usually give flowers to each other on special occasions like wedding anniversaries, milestones, birthdays, graduations, promotions, parties, and on sympathetic occasions such as hospital visits, condolences, and funerals.

'Mostly people' should be 'People usually'. Use plural forms for repeated events: 'wedding anniversaries', 'birthdays', etc. 'Celebrating milestone' -> 'milestones'. 'Some sympathetic movement like hospital visa, topology' is unclear; replace with standard phrases 'hospital visits' and 'condolences'. Use commas correctly in list.