Flowers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence stating your feeling, then give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–4 sentences. Improve grammar (verb forms, articles, plurals) and word choice (e.g. 'receive flowers', 'sunflowers', 'make me feel refreshed').

예시: Yes, I love flowers, especially sunflowers. I feel very happy when someone gives me flowers because they brighten my day and smell lovely. For example, when I walk along a path lined with flowers, I feel refreshed and calm.

제안: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence identifying the person, then explain why you know they love flowers with specific details. Use correct nouns and simple past/present forms and avoid filler words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. She used to be my senior at the lab, but now she works for the owner of a flower shop. Because she spends every day arranging and selling flowers, she definitely loves them.

제안: Begin with a direct response, then provide specific reasons and one brief example. Correct grammar (contractions, articles, plurals) and vocabulary ('town', 'space', 'fake flowers'). Keep sentences concise and connected with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Not many. I live in a small town with limited space, so people rarely plant trees or flower beds. As a result, I only keep a few artificial flowers in my living room.

제안: Answer clearly and describe frequency and purpose with correct tense and vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases; use specific words for what you photograph. Use linking words like 'when' and 'so' and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often photograph flowers whenever I see interesting ones. When I find a colorful flower or a pretty arrangement on the path, I stop to take a photo and then upload it to my social media.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then explain with specific occasions when flowers are sent. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'funerals', 'congratulations', 'special occasions') and grammar. Avoid fillers and be concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: I don't think people send flowers very often in everyday life. We usually give flowers for special occasions such as funerals, weddings, or to congratulate someone, but not as a daily habit.

× Yes I do, when I received favour it's made me so happy, especially the sunflower.

✓ Yes I do. When I received favors it made me so happy, especially the sunflower.

The original mixes present ('Yes I do') with a past event description using incorrect tense and contraction. 'When I received favor' should use plural 'favors' (or 'a favor' depending on meaning) and simple past 'made' is correct for a completed past event. Also separate into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'When I received favors, it made me so happy' or 'When I received a favor, it made me very happy.'

× Every time that I walk by the path and the flower is around the side is make me more feel refreshed.

✓ Every time I walk by the path and see the flowers nearby, I feel more refreshed.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and incorrect verb forms. 'the flower is around the side' is awkward; use 'see the flowers nearby'. 'is make me more feel refreshed' mixes auxiliary and verb forms; correct is 'I feel more refreshed.' Use present simple for habitual action.

× Umm yes I do. I know this person because she is umm lab seniority and right now she umm work with like in the owner of the flower shops so she never do about the lab anymore.

✓ Umm yes I do. I know this person because she is a senior in the lab and right now she works as the owner of a flower shop, so she never works in the lab anymore.

Pronoun and noun phrase errors: missing article 'a' before 'senior', incorrect verb forms 'work' and 'do' should be 'works' (third person singular). 'the owner of the flower shops' should be singular 'the owner of a flower shop' unless multiple shops are meant. Use consistent third person singular verb forms for 'she.'

× Not very much, I live in the town so that's mean there no space to plant the flower or the tree so I only have a fake flower in my vest in the house.

✓ Not many. I live in a town, so that means there is no space to plant flowers or trees, so I only have a fake flower in a vase in the house.

Quantifier 'Not very much' is inappropriate for countable 'flowers' — use 'Not many.' 'the town' should be 'a town' for general statement. 'that's mean' needs 'means.' Missing 'is' in 'there is no space.' Use plural 'flowers or trees.' 'vest' is wrong word; correct is 'vase.' Use articles appropriately.

× Of course I do. When I found a fire pot oral Farrell in the pathway I always stop and took the photo of them and upload it in my social media.

✓ Of course I do. When I find a flower or plant on the path, I always stop, take a photo of it, and upload it to my social media.

Tense consistency and word choice errors: use present simple 'find' and 'stop' for habitual actions, not past 'found'/'took.' 'fire pot oral Farrell' is unintelligible; likely 'flower or plant.' Use 'take a photo of it' (singular) and 'upload it to my social media.' Also keep verbs parallel: 'stop, take, and upload.'

× Umm, I don't think so. Umm we send the pharaoh to the other in the important change like and con congratulations or celibate, and in our daily life we don't send the flower to each other's.

✓ Umm, I don't think so. Umm we send flowers to others on important occasions like congratulations or celebrations, but in daily life we don't send flowers to each other.

Many word choice and quantifier errors: 'pharaoh' is wrong word—should be 'flowers.' 'the other' should be 'others.' 'important change' should be 'important occasions.' 'con congratulations or celibate' should be 'congratulations or celebrations.' 'each other's' incorrectly uses possessive; correct is 'each other.' Use plural 'flowers' for general noun.