Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，且有些重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更准确的词汇。

예시: No, I don't write a lot because I find it mentally demanding and time-consuming. I usually prefer other ways to express myself.

제안: 回答中表达了个人经历，但句子结构不够清晰，且有语法错误。建议使用更连贯的句子，并适当使用连接词。

예시: Recently, I like to write about my feelings because I recently broke up with my ex-girlfriend. Writing helps me remember the experience and learn from it.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但表达不够流畅，有重复和语法错误。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并注意语法准确。

예시: Yes, definitely. For example, today I wrote about a delicious ice cream I had and the shop where I bought it. Tomorrow, I might write about a deep conversation with my friends that gave me a new perspective on life.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子不够连贯。建议简化表达，使用正确的时态和连接词，使回答更自然。

예시: I prefer handwriting because when I was young, computers were not common. Writing by hand is a habit for me, and it helps me focus better.

× I think writing is quite mental demanding.

✓ I think writing is quite mentally demanding.

这里需要使用副词修饰形容词demanding，mental是形容词，应该用其副词形式mentally。

× I think writing is quite time wasting.

✓ I think writing is quite time-wasting.

time-wasting是复合形容词，表示“浪费时间的”，需要用连字符连接。

× What do you like to write?

✓ What do you like to write?

此句无语法错误，符合语法规范。

× If recently I suppose I prefer to write down some of my feelings,

✓ Recently, I suppose I prefer to write down some of my feelings,

recently作为时间副词应放句首，且if引导条件句不合适，应去掉。

× I just break up with my ex-girlfriend and I I could feel that the frequency of writing increased.

✓ I just broke up with my ex-girlfriend and I could feel that the frequency of writing increased.

break up是过去发生的动作，需用过去式broke up；重复的I应去掉。

× I just want to write down something and memorize this experience and have a lesson from it.

✓ I just want to write down something, memorize this experience, and learn a lesson from it.

want后面用动词原形，且表达“从中吸取教训”应用learn a lesson。

× Do you think the things you write would change?

✓ Do you think the things you write will change?

表达将来可能发生的变化，should用will更合适。

× For example, today I ate a quite delicious ice cream and I just write the the place of the ice cream shop.

✓ For example, today I ate quite a delicious ice cream and I just wrote the place of the ice cream shop.

quite a delicious是正确的表达；ate是过去式，write应改为过去式wrote。

× And maybe tomorrow I have a really deep conversation with my friends or teachers and I write the new perspective towards this life.

✓ And maybe tomorrow I will have a really deep conversation with my friends or teachers and I will write the new perspective towards this life.

描述将来事件，应使用将来时will have和will write。

× While I'll interview his handwriting, umm when I was young, there is no too much computers and for for us to type in.

✓ While I prefer handwriting, umm when I was young, there were not too many computers for us to type on.

interview用错，应为prefer；there is应改为there were；too much用于不可数名词，computers是可数名词，应使用too many；for for重复，应去掉一个；type后应接介词on。

× So I suppose it is just out of habit and so that I am more familiar with the handwriting and besides, I think handwriting can make me more focused on.

✓ So I suppose it is just out of habit and that I am more familiar with handwriting, and besides, I think handwriting can help me focus more.

so that用法不当，应改为that；handwriting前不加the；make sb. do sth.结构中focus为动词，不用加on；more focused改为focus more。