Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应直接回应问题，避免无关内容。这里问题是写作频率，回答却谈及阅读经历，缺乏针对性。建议明确说明写作的频率或习惯。

예시: Yes, I write quite often, especially when I feel inspired or have free time. Writing helps me express my thoughts clearly.

제안: 回答较完整，但句子较长且有些重复。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，同时避免冗余。

예시: I enjoy writing fiction, especially love stories, because they make me happy. Moreover, I hope to share this happiness with my readers.

제안: 语法和表达不够准确，重复且用词错误（如more deeper）。建议使用正确的比较级，简洁表达观点。

예시: Yes, I believe my writing will change as I grow older. I want to explore deeper themes beyond just love stories.

제안: 表达基本清晰，但有语法错误（more efficient vs efficiently）。建议注意词性使用，提升语言准确性。

예시: I prefer typing because it makes writing more efficient, and it's easier to edit my work.

제안: 时态使用不当，句子结构不够自然。建议使用正确时态并简洁表达。

예시: I used to keep a diary when I was young, but I stopped after primary school. Instead, I began writing stories based on my life experiences.

제안: 回答内容相关，但有重复词汇（this this）和语法错误（become应为becomes）。建议注意细节，提升表达准确性。

예시: I record my life by taking videos and photos. Thanks to mobile phones, it's much easier to capture moments now.

× Yes, I'm good at writing and I have read a lot of stories during my life.

✓ Yes, I'm good at writing and I have read a lot of stories in my life.

介词搭配错误，应该用'in my life'表示在一生中，而不是'during my life'。

× I like to write fiction stories and love stories which make me feel very happy to do so, and I hope that I could deliver this kind of happiness to the people who read my stories.

✓ I like to write fiction stories and love stories, which make me feel very happy to do so, and I hope that I can deliver this kind of happiness to the people who read my stories.

连接词使用不当，'which'引导非限制性定语从句时前面应加逗号；'could'表示过去或虚拟语气，表达愿望时用'can'更合适。

× Maybe it will, it will be. And because with my age older, I have to do something more deeper and write something more deeper.

✓ Maybe it will. And as I get older, I have to do something deeper and write something deeper.

句子结构混乱，重复表达；'with my age older'表达不正确，应改为'as I get older'；'more deeper'是错误的比较级用法，'deeper'本身已是比较级。

× I prefer typing when I am writing because that will make my writing more efficient efficiently and if I want to change it, it will be much easier.

✓ I prefer typing when I am writing because that will make my writing more efficient, and if I want to change it, it will be much easier.

'efficient'是形容词，修饰名词；'efficiently'是副词，修饰动词。这里应使用形容词'efficient'来修饰'my writing'。

× When I was very young I do some Diaries, but after my primary school I didn't do so.

✓ When I was very young, I kept some diaries, but after primary school I didn't do so.

时态错误，描述过去的习惯应使用过去时；'do some Diaries'表达不准确，应该用'kept diaries'表示写日记。

× I started to write these stories out of my life.

✓ I started to write stories about my life.

'these stories out of my life'表达不自然，应该用'write stories about my life'表示写关于自己生活的故事。

× With the development of mobile phones this this kind of recording become much easier than before.

✓ With the development of mobile phones, this kind of recording has become much easier than before.

缺少逗号分隔状语；'become'时态错误，应使用现在完成时'have become'；重复单词'this'需删除。