Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, làm giảm tính hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy chú ý sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp.

예시: No, I don't write very often because I usually feel a bit lazy. Instead, I prefer speaking since it helps me improve my social skills.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh". Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn thích viết những chủ đề đó.

예시: I like to write short paragraphs about topics I care about, such as the environment and personal traits, because they interest me deeply.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thì sai hoặc từ không phù hợp.

예시: Yes, I think my writing has changed. In the past, I wrote about simple topics like princesses, but now I prefer more academic subjects such as the environment or global issues.

제안: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không cần thiết như "uh" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp. Câu trả lời nên mạch lạc, có liên kết giữa các ý và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

예시: I prefer typing because it is more convenient. I can carry my laptop easily and find information quickly. Also, I am good at typing with all ten fingers, which helps me write faster.

제안: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngắt quãng như "uh", "umm" và chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là thì và số nhiều. Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn.

예시: I don't write diaries often now, but when I was a child, I wrote every day about my likes, favorite food, or princesses. It was very interesting.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt mạch lạc, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn để truyền đạt ý tưởng rõ ràng.

예시: I usually use my phone to record moments in my life because it helps me save memories. I find it very convenient and useful.

× No, I think I'm don't frequently write because I feel a little bit lazy and I don't spending lots of time, especially trees or flowers to write a essays.

✓ No, I think I don't frequently write because I feel a little bit lazy and I don't spend lots of time, especially on trees or flowers, to write essays.

The phrase 'I'm don't' is incorrect; 'I don't' is the correct form for negation. Also, 'don't spending' should be 'don't spend' because after 'do not' the base form of the verb is used. Additionally, 'a essays' is incorrect; 'essays' is plural and does not need 'a'. The preposition 'on' is needed before 'trees or flowers' to indicate the topic.

× No, I think I'm don't frequently write because I feel a little bit lazy and I don't spending lots of time, especially trees or flowers to write a essays.

✓ No, I think I don't frequently write because I feel a little bit lazy and I don't spend lots of time, especially on trees or flowers, to write essays.

The preposition 'on' is required before 'trees or flowers' to correctly indicate the subject or topic of writing.

× Instead of that I'm I'm interested in speaking more than writing because it helps me improve my social skill and.

✓ Instead of that, I'm interested in speaking more than writing because it helps me improve my social skills.

The phrase 'I'm I'm' is a repetition error; only one 'I'm' is needed. Also, 'social skill' should be plural 'social skills' to refer to general abilities.

× Because I'm quite lazy in writing, so I am interested in, uh, writing some paragraphs about some, uh, topics that I really love, such as environment or, uh, personal personalities like that.

✓ Because I'm quite lazy in writing, I am interested in writing some paragraphs about topics that I really love, such as the environment or personal personalities.

The conjunction 'so' is redundant after 'because' and should be removed. Also, 'such as environment' needs the definite article 'the' before 'environment'.

× I think the thing that I write maybe change because in the past I often focused on writings a Princess, but when I I'm mature I often want to write something more academic, like a topic about environment or a world problem.

✓ I think the things that I write may change because in the past I often focused on writing a princess, but when I am mature I often want to write something more academic, like a topic about the environment or a world problem.

'Maybe' should be 'may' to express possibility. 'Writings a Princess' is incorrect; it should be 'writing a princess' or better 'writing about a princess'. 'I'm mature' should be 'I am mature' for clarity. Also, 'environment' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I think the thing that I write maybe change because in the past I often focused on writings a Princess, but when I I'm mature I often want to write something more academic, like a topic about environment or a world problem.

✓ I think the things that I write may change because in the past I often focused on writing a princess, but when I am mature I often want to write something more academic, like a topic about the environment or a world problem.

The phrase 'focused on writings a Princess' is incorrect; 'focused on writing a princess' is correct. Also, 'about environment' requires the definite article 'the'.

× I think I prefer typing when I'm writing more than handwriting because it's more convenient.

✓ I think I prefer typing when I write more than handwriting because it's more convenient.

The phrase 'when I'm writing' is acceptable but 'when I write' is more natural and consistent in this context.

× I can bring my laptops to write or even finding information about some things.

✓ I can bring my laptop to write or even find information about some things.

'Laptops' should be singular 'laptop' unless referring to multiple devices. Also, 'finding' should be 'find' to parallel 'write' after 'can'.

× One perfect about me that I can, uh, type my 10 finger and I think it's also my talent.

✓ One thing perfect about me is that I can type with all 10 fingers and I think it's also my talent.

'One perfect about me' is incorrect; 'One thing perfect about me' or 'One perfect thing about me' is better. 'Type my 10 finger' should be 'type with all 10 fingers'.

× Uh, nowadays I don't frequently, uh, write Diaries, but when I was kid, I wrote it every days, you know, umm, the content might be uh, the, my preferences or, uh, my favorite food or my favorite Princess.

✓ Nowadays, I don't frequently write diaries, but when I was a kid, I wrote them every day. The content might have been my preferences, my favorite food, or my favorite princess.

'When I was kid' should be 'when I was a kid'. 'Every days' should be 'every day'. 'Write it' should be 'write them' to refer to diaries. 'Might be' should be 'might have been' for past possibility.

× I think other device that I used to record my night is my fault.

✓ I think the other device that I use to record my night is my phone.

'Other device' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Used' should be 'use' for present tense. 'My fault' is incorrect; likely meant 'my phone'.

× I'm, I'm really interested in theme, uh, what are happening, uh, in my life by my phone because it helps us save my memories because I'm, I don't have a memorable, umm, memorable.

✓ I'm really interested in themes that are happening in my life through my phone because it helps me save my memories, as I don't have a good memory.

'Interested in theme' should be 'interested in themes'. 'What are happening' should be 'that are happening'. 'By my phone' should be 'through my phone'. 'Helps us save my memories' is inconsistent; 'helps me save my memories' is correct. 'I don't have a memorable' is incomplete; 'I don't have a good memory' is correct.