Writing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar (use fewer words and avoid repetition). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief supporting reason. Use a linking word if you add a second point.

예시: Not really. I usually type my notes and messages because typing is faster and more convenient. Also, digital notes are easier to organise.

제안: Begin directly with the topic sentence and correct grammar (time-consuming, when it comes to). Avoid fillers and repetition. Give one specific example and a short reason, using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: I don't often write formally, but I like handwriting personal cards such as birthday or holiday cards because a handwritten note feels more personal and shows my character.

제안: Fix grammar (I wrote, it was embarrassing). Keep to two or three sentences: state your view, then give a brief example. Avoid over-explaining with unnecessary words like 'actually' or 'kind of'.

예시: Yes. For example, when I was a child I wrote a love letter to a classmate, which was embarrassing. Now I wouldn't do that because I’m more mature.

제안: Make the topic sentence clear and correct grammar (I prefer typing; it improves my accuracy). Reduce redundancy and use one linking phrase when adding a second reason.

예시: I prefer typing because features like autocorrect and spellcheck help me avoid typos and improve accuracy. Also, typing is faster for long texts.

제안: Use correct grammar and simpler phrasing (interested in keeping diaries, when I travel). Answer frequency clearly (e.g., occasionally, rarely) then give a specific method and example. Avoid fillers.

예시: I don't keep a diary regularly, but I often record notes and videos on my phone when I travel to remember trips and sights.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small errors (trip, polish photos), and be specific about why you use photos. Limit to two supporting sentences and use linking words for coherence.

예시: I mainly take photos to record my life; I have over 10,000 on my phone. I photograph entire trips because pictures capture moments quickly, though editing them afterwards can be time-consuming.

× Not really, because I think handwriting is slow, so I usually type my notes and the messages because it's more efficient and convenient.

✓ Not really, because I think handwriting is slow, so I usually type my notes and messages because it's more efficient and more convenient.

Redundant article: 'the messages' is incorrect here; use 'messages' (no article) when speaking generally. Also parallel structure improved by adding 'more' before 'convenient' to match 'more efficient.' Suggestion: keep parallel adjectives and omit unnecessary articles when referring to things in general.

× Well like I just mentioned above I don't like writing because it time consuming but when things come to you know like write some personal stuff like birthday card or holiday card or write a letter.

✓ Well, like I just mentioned above, I don't like writing because it is time consuming, but when it comes to writing personal stuff like birthday cards, holiday cards, or letters, I prefer handwriting.

Missing auxiliary verb 'is' before 'time consuming' (predicate adjective needs verb). Incorrect verb forms: 'when things come to' should be 'when it comes to' and 'write' should be 'writing' to form the gerund after 'comes to.' Also pluralize 'card' to 'cards' and use consistent noun forms. Suggestion: use 'it is' for linking verbs and use gerunds after 'come(s) to.'

× I do prefer handwriting because they can show my character.

✓ I do prefer handwriting because it can show my character.

Pronoun 'they' mismatches singular noun 'handwriting.' Use singular 'it' to refer to 'handwriting.' If referring to 'handwritten notes' then use plural. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun it replaces.

× Yes, I think though actually when I was a kid I written a love letter to one of my classmates.

✓ Yes, I think so. Actually, when I was a kid I wrote a love letter to one of my classmates.

Incorrect past tense form: 'written' is a past participle and needs an auxiliary (have/has) for present perfect; simple past 'wrote' is correct here. Also restructure sentence for clarity. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past actions with a time reference.

× It kind of embarrassed and childish, but I would never do that right now 'cause I'm mature.

✓ It was kind of embarrassing and childish, but I would never do that now because I'm mature.

Adjective 'embarrassed' misused; 'embarrassing' describes the letter. Also past event needs past tense 'was.' Informal 'cause' changed to 'because.' Suggestion: use appropriate -ing forms to describe things that cause feelings and match tense.

× Will either prefer typing because you know the keyboard has auto correct function and can avoid typos and my spelling mistakes and somehow can improving my accuracy.

✓ I would prefer typing because the keyboard has an autocorrect function and can help avoid typos and spelling mistakes, and it can improve my accuracy.

'Will either prefer' is incorrect; use 'I would prefer' or 'I prefer.' 'autocorrect' is one word; include article 'an' before 'autocorrect function.' 'can improving' should be 'can improve.' Also rephrase for subject clarity. Suggestion: use correct modal/conditional forms and base verb after 'can.'

× So I'd definitely choose typing.

✓ So I'd definitely choose typing.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses conditional 'I'd' (I would) appropriately to state preference. No change needed.

× Well, I am a person that really interest in keep Diaries umm, but when things come to, you know when I'm going to trip, I would record some videos and to keep Diaries on my phone notes.

✓ Well, I am a person who is really interested in keeping diaries, but when I'm going on a trip, I record some videos and keep a diary on my phone's notes.

Multiple issues: relative pronoun 'that' better as 'who' for people; 'interest' should be 'interested'; 'in keep' should be 'in keeping' (gerund); 'Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries' and quantifier/article 'a diary' needed when singular; 'going to trip' should be 'going on a trip'; 'would' unnecessary—use present 'record'; 'phone notes' should be 'phone's notes' or 'notes on my phone.' Suggestion: use correct adjective form, gerunds after 'interested in,' and correct prepositions.

× Well, I would choose to take photos.

✓ Well, I choose to take photos.

Using 'would' suggests conditionality; if speaking about general habit, simple present 'I choose' is better. If intending hypothetical, 'I would choose' could be kept. Suggestion: match tense to habitual actions (simple present).

× Actually I have more than 10,000 pictures on my phone, which is kind of insane.

✓ Actually, I have more than 10,000 pictures on my phone, which is kind of insane.

This sentence is correct except for missing comma after 'Actually.' The grammar is fine; article usage is correct. Suggestion: add comma for natural speech pause.

× You know when every time I'm going to trip, I would take a photo from the beginning to the end.

✓ You know, whenever I go on a trip, I take photos from the beginning to the end.

'Every time I'm going to trip' is ungrammatical; use 'whenever I go on a trip' for habitual actions. 'Take a photo' changed to plural 'take photos' to match frequency. 'would' changed to simple present for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'whenever' for repeated events and 'go on a trip.'

× But somehow it's a little bit troublesome because you have to Polish your photo afterwards.

✓ But somehow it's a little bit troublesome because you have to polish your photos afterwards.

Unnecessary capitalization of 'Polish' (should be lowercase 'polish' as a verb). 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' to match general statement. Suggestion: use lowercase for verbs and pluralize when speaking generally.