Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and incomplete sentences.

예시: The weather where I live is quite changeable; sometimes it's rainy, and other times it's sunny. For example, if you go shopping without an umbrella, you might get wet because the rain can start unexpectedly.

제안: Focus on delivering a clear and complete answer. Use fewer filler words and provide specific reasons or examples to support your preference. Organize your answer with a topic sentence followed by supporting details linked logically.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy the winter season, especially when it snows. The snowy landscape is beautiful, and I like activities like building snowmen or drinking hot chocolate during that time.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by adding linking words and slightly expanding your supporting details to make your response more engaging.

예시: I prefer wet weather because rainy days are very enjoyable. For instance, we can make many snacks at home and spend quality time together, which makes those moments special.

제안: Avoid repetition and filler words. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Be specific about how often and why you check the forecast.

예시: Yes, I regularly check the weather forecast because the weather here is unpredictable. I usually check it before going outside to decide what clothes to wear.

제안: Provide a more complete and coherent answer by clearly stating the effects of climate change. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid incomplete sentences and filler words.

예시: Climate change has caused rising temperatures and more extreme weather events. For example, pollution from industries increases air pollution, which harms the environment. Additionally, rising sea levels affect beaches and coastal areas.

제안: Complete your sentences and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer, using linking words to improve flow.

예시: I would love to visit cities with different climates. For instance, Calgary in Canada has a climate that my relatives praise highly, and I am interested in experiencing it myself.

× Honestly speaking, the weather of my place where I live is quite, uh, interesting because sometime it is rainy or sometime it's sunny so uh, whenever.

✓ Honestly speaking, the weather of my place where I live is quite, uh, interesting because sometimes it is rainy or sometimes it's sunny so uh, whenever.

The word 'sometime' is an adverb meaning 'at some unspecified time' and is singular. The correct plural form 'sometimes' should be used to indicate 'on some occasions' or 'occasionally'.

× Suppose you are going outside for doing shopping.

✓ Suppose you are going outside to do shopping.

The phrase 'for doing shopping' is incorrect. The correct form is 'to do shopping' because 'to do' is the infinitive form used after 'going outside' to express purpose.

× So if you don't carry your umbrella, you will surely get wet in the.

✓ So if you don't carry your umbrella, you will surely get wet.

The phrase 'get wet in the' is incomplete and incorrect. The sentence should end at 'get wet' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× Or, uh, I always give priority to the cold weather because I think, uh, it is the most intra interesting season, uh, from all the seasons in the, uh, winter season, uh, the, the snowy, uh, area.

✓ Or, uh, I always give priority to the cold weather because I think, uh, it is the most interesting season, uh, among all the seasons, especially the snowy, uh, areas in winter.

The phrase 'most intra interesting' is incorrect; 'most interesting' is correct. Also, 'from all the seasons in the winter season' is redundant; 'among all the seasons' is better. 'Area' should be plural 'areas' to match the context.

× I really enjoy that moments and also I do.

✓ I really enjoy those moments and also I do.

The demonstrative pronoun 'that' should be plural 'those' to agree with the plural noun 'moments'.

× Honestly, I always give priority to the wet weather because I think rainy days are very enjoyable and we can make many snacks at home and just enjoy the moments that I spend with my husband.

✓ Honestly, I always give priority to wet weather because I think rainy days are very enjoyable and we can make many snacks at home and just enjoy the moments that I spend with my husband.

The phrase 'the wet weather' is better as 'wet weather' without the article 'the' when speaking generally about weather conditions.

× Definitely yes, As I mentioned in the above answer that the weather of my place is very umm, unpredictable.

✓ Definitely yes, as I mentioned in the above answer, the weather of my place is very, umm, unpredictable.

The phrase 'As I mentioned in the above answer that' is incorrect; 'as I mentioned in the above answer' is sufficient. Also, capitalization after a comma is incorrect; 'as' should be lowercase.

× So I often I often check the weather whenever I go outside on a regular basis because it helps me to wear the clothes that needs to wear.

✓ So I often check the weather whenever I go outside on a regular basis because it helps me to wear the clothes that I need to wear.

The phrase 'that needs to wear' is incorrect; it should be 'that I need to wear' to include the subject 'I' and correct verb agreement.

× There is an array of reasons for climate change in recent years.

✓ There are an array of reasons for climate change in recent years.

The phrase 'an array of reasons' is plural in meaning, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree with the plural subject.

× First of all, there are many, uh, industrial sectors, which produces a lot of air pollution as well as sound pollution, which affects the climate.

✓ First of all, there are many, uh, industrial sectors, which produce a lot of air pollution as well as sound pollution, which affects the climate.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'industrial sectors' (plural), so the verb should be 'produce' (plural) instead of 'produces' (singular).

× Moreover, if I talk about, uh, the beaches or, uh, the seas.

✓ Moreover, if I talk about, uh, the beaches or, uh, the seas,

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding a comma indicates continuation, but the sentence should be completed for clarity.

× As the future is unpredictable and uncertain, so if I get a chance, uh, to visit another city or country, I would definitely love to go to Calgary, which is a province of Canada actually, my uncle and aunt lives there and they always praise the climate of that province that it is very.

✓ As the future is unpredictable and uncertain, if I get a chance to visit another city or country, I would definitely love to go to Calgary, which is a province of Canada. Actually, my uncle and aunt live there and they always praise the climate of that province as very nice.

The phrase 'my uncle and aunt lives' is incorrect; 'uncle and aunt' is plural, so the verb should be 'live'. Also, the sentence is run-on and incomplete; it should be split and completed for clarity.