Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer should be more clear and structured. Avoid unclear phrases like 'mountainous season' and 'there is a park around the environment'. Try to directly describe the weather and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I live in a mountainous region of Nepal, so the weather is usually beautiful and clear during the day and evening. In the mornings, it is often cool and fresh, which makes the environment very pleasant.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on giving a clear reason for your preference and avoid confusing phrases like 'drink lots of trees'. Use linking words to explain your reasons.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy wearing warm clothes like coats. Also, cold weather makes me feel comfortable and I like drinking hot beverages during that time.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some repetition and minor errors. Avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I prefer dry weather because I can walk and travel without worrying about rain or monsoons. Moreover, the days are usually clearer and more beautiful during dry weather.

제안: Your answer has repetition and incomplete ideas. Try to avoid repeating phrases and complete your sentences. Use linking words to explain why checking the forecast is important for your work.

예시: I usually check the weather forecast because it helps me organize my day. Since I work as a civil engineer and travel to different construction sites, I need to adjust my plans based on the weather conditions.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to clearly explain the effects of climate change with specific examples and use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: Climate change has affected both personal life and the environment. For example, weather and rainfall patterns have changed drastically in recent years, which has impacted forests and agriculture.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and adding more details. Use linking words to explain why you like visiting places with different climates.

예시: Yes, I definitely love traveling to cities with different climates from where I live. For example, I recently visited Muktinath, where the temperature was below zero degrees Celsius, which was a unique experience for me.

× I live in mountainous season of Nepal, so the weather is pretty much beautiful and clear during the day and evening time.

✓ I live in the mountainous region of Nepal, so the weather is quite beautiful and clear during the day and evening.

The phrase 'mountainous season' is incorrect; it should be 'mountainous region' to describe the area. Also, 'pretty much beautiful' is better expressed as 'quite beautiful'. 'During the day and evening time' is simplified to 'during the day and evening' for naturalness.

× Whenever and at the morning time there is a park around the environment.

✓ There is a park nearby in the morning.

The original sentence is unclear and awkward. 'Whenever and at the morning time' is incorrect; 'in the morning' is appropriate. 'Around the environment' is vague; 'nearby' is clearer.

× I prefer cold weather because during that time I can wear my several coats and according to the weather or morning and I also prefers to drink lots of trees so during cold time I can able.

✓ I prefer cold weather because during that time I can wear several coats according to the weather in the morning, and I also prefer to drink lots of tea during cold times.

The verb 'prefers' should be 'prefer' to agree with the subject 'I'. 'My several coats' is incorrect; 'several coats' is better. 'Drink lots of trees' is incorrect; it should be 'drink lots of tea'. 'I can able' is incorrect; 'I can' or 'I am able to' is correct.

× I prefer dry weather as during that time I can walk and travel without feeling worry about the monsoon or rain.

✓ I prefer dry weather because during that time I can walk and travel without worrying about the monsoon or rain.

'Feeling worry' is incorrect; the correct form is 'worrying'. Also, 'as' is better replaced with 'because' for clarity.

× And the weather during the day is also also beautiful and clearer than in a wait time.

✓ The weather during the day is also beautiful and clearer than in wet weather.

'Also also' is a repetition error; one 'also' is enough. 'In a wait time' is incorrect; it should be 'in wet weather'.

× I usually I usually watch weather forecast because it tells me to organize my day according to the weather.

✓ I usually watch the weather forecast because it helps me organize my day according to the weather.

The phrase 'I usually I usually' is a repetition error; one 'I usually' is sufficient. 'Watch weather forecast' needs the article 'the' before 'weather forecast'. 'Tells me to organize' is better expressed as 'helps me organize'.

× As I'm working as a civil engineer, I have to travel difference construction site where I have to make several changes according to.

✓ As I'm working as a civil engineer, I have to travel to different construction sites where I have to make several changes accordingly.

'Difference construction site' is incorrect; it should be 'different construction sites'. The preposition 'to' is needed after 'travel'. 'According to' is incomplete; 'accordingly' fits better here.

× The climate change has several effect on the personal life and environment is the weather plan pattern and the raining pattern has drastically changed from recent years and it leads to the forestry.

✓ Climate change has several effects on personal life and the environment. The weather patterns and the rainfall patterns have drastically changed in recent years, leading to deforestation.

'Climate change' is uncountable, so 'The' is unnecessary. 'Effect' should be plural 'effects'. 'Personal life and environment is' should be 'personal life and the environment are'. 'Weather plan pattern' is incorrect; it should be 'weather patterns'. 'Raining pattern' should be 'rainfall patterns'. 'Leads to the forestry' is unclear; 'leading to deforestation' is correct.

× Yes, I definitely love to travel in the city where the climate are different from where I live.

✓ Yes, I definitely love to travel to cities where the climate is different from where I live.

'City' should be plural 'cities' to match the context. 'Climate are' is incorrect; 'climate is' is correct because 'climate' is singular. 'Travel in the city' should be 'travel to cities'.

× Recently I went to Muktinath which is which is at the temperature in minus degrees Celsius.

✓ Recently, I went to Muktinath, where the temperature is below zero degrees Celsius.

'Which is which is' is a repetition error. 'At the temperature in minus degrees Celsius' is awkward; 'where the temperature is below zero degrees Celsius' is clearer and more natural.