Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'tropical country that is India' and improve sentence flow. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I live in India, which has a tropical climate. The weather changes with the seasons, but generally, it is quite hot throughout the year.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by making the first sentence clearer and using linking words to connect your preferences. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors like 'the my activities'.

예시: It depends on the activities I enjoy. For example, in summer, I love going to the beach and tanning under the sun, whereas in winter, I prefer wearing cozy, layered clothes.

제안: Try to make your sentences more natural and avoid repetition like 'going on roads' twice. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and correct minor grammatical errors.

예시: I prefer dry weather because wet conditions make it uncomfortable to walk or ride my scooty. In dry weather, I enjoy going outside more.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid filler words and correct grammar mistakes.

예시: I didn't usually check the weather forecast, but now I do it often on my mobile phone because, as a working person, I need to know if it will rain before going out.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific examples. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar.

예시: In recent years, I have noticed unusual weather patterns, such as heavy rains during summer and hot temperatures in the rainy season. These changes have negatively affected farmers because their crops are damaged.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more fluent and natural. Avoid hesitations like 'Uh' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your reasons clearly.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit other cities to experience different climates. I also enjoy nature and am interested in the types of crops farmers grow there. Additionally, I love spending time by the sea.

× I live in tropical country that is India and the weather here changes according to the season and to be more precise, it's a very hot climate.

✓ I live in a tropical country that is India and the weather here changes according to the season and to be more precise, it's a very hot climate.

The phrase 'tropical country' requires the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular, countable noun being mentioned for the first time. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× It depends based on the my activities I prefer.

✓ It depends on the activities I prefer.

The phrase 'based on the my activities' is incorrect. 'Based on' is redundant with 'depends on', and 'the my' is incorrect because 'my' already specifies possession. The correct phrase is 'depends on the activities I prefer' or simply 'depends on my activities'.

× In summers I love going to the beaches and tanning under the sun.

✓ In summer I love going to the beach and tanning under the sun.

The word 'summer' is generally used in singular form when referring to the season in general. Similarly, 'beach' is used in singular when referring to the general activity of going to the beach. Using plural forms here is incorrect.

× In winters I like to wear cozy clothes and layered clothes.

✓ In winter I like to wear cozy and layered clothes.

The word 'winter' is used in singular form when referring to the season generally. Also, 'cozy clothes and layered clothes' is repetitive; combining adjectives before 'clothes' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× I prefer dry weather rather than wet weather because in wet weather when we are going on roads I feel like a little bit discomfort to walk on roads or to ride my scooty, and in dry weather I love going outside.

✓ I prefer dry weather rather than wet weather because in wet weather, when we are on the roads, I feel a little discomfort walking on roads or riding my scooty, and in dry weather I love going outside.

The phrase 'going on roads' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on the roads'. Also, 'feel like a little bit discomfort' is incorrect; it should be 'feel a little discomfort'. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition use and natural phrasing.

× Actually, I don't have the habit of checking the weather forecast, but nowadays I check it on my mobile phone.

✓ Actually, I don't have the habit of checking the weather forecast, but nowadays I check it on my mobile phone.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I do often check because I'm working. I'm as a working person, I I should go out and manage the thing. So knowing whether, how, whether it is raining.

✓ I often check because I'm working. As a working person, I should go out and manage things, so I need to know whether it is raining or not.

The original sentences have redundancy and unclear phrasing. 'I do often check' is better as 'I often check'. 'I'm as a working person' is incorrect; it should be 'As a working person'. 'Manage the thing' is vague; 'manage things' is more natural. The last sentence is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yeah, In recent years and I noticed a few changes in the weather changes because when it's summer, there are heavy rains and in rainy season, it looks like summer season and it's very hot during a rainy season.

✓ Yeah, in recent years I have noticed a few changes in the weather because when it's summer, there are heavy rains, and in the rainy season, it feels like summer because it's very hot during the rainy season.

The phrase 'and I noticed' should be 'I have noticed' to indicate recent changes continuing to the present. 'In rainy season' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× And because of this, the farmers are getting affected more because the plantations they are.

✓ Because of this, the farmers are more affected because of their plantations.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'The plantations they are' is incomplete; it should be 'because of their plantations'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I'd like to visit other cities because I want to know what are the different types of the climate conditions there.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit other cities because I want to know what the different types of climate conditions are there.

The word order in indirect questions should be subject + verb, not verb + subject. 'What are the different types' should be 'what the different types are' in this context.

× And I really enjoy the nature, so I prefer what type of the cultivations they are preferring.

✓ And I really enjoy nature, so I prefer the types of cultivation they prefer.

'The nature' is incorrect; 'nature' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. 'What type of the cultivations they are preferring' is awkward; it should be 'the types of cultivation they prefer'. Also, 'cultivation' is uncountable here.

× Uh, pre preferred by the farmers there and I love enjoying the sea.

✓ Uh, preferred by the farmers there, and I love enjoying the sea.

The word 'pre preferred' seems to be a repetition or typo; corrected to 'preferred'. The rest of the sentence is correct. 'The sea' is correct here as it refers to a specific sea.