Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to give a clear and concise answer without hesitation or repetition. Start with a direct response about the weather, then briefly mention the seasons. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundancy such as mentioning 'two seasons' and then 'four seasons'.

예시: I live in the northern part of my country where the weather is quite unpredictable. Generally, we experience four distinct seasons: summer, winter, spring, and autumn.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and vocabulary. Explain reasons with specific details and avoid unclear words like 'causing'.

예시: I prefer cold weather because it is more comfortable and we can enjoy the foggy mornings, which create a peaceful atmosphere.

제안: Try to structure your answer better by starting with a clear preference, then explain reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence flow.

예시: I prefer dry weather because when it is wet, it is difficult to go outside. Moreover, dry weather allows us to go anywhere at any time without any problems.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by removing contradictions and using linking words for coherence. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes.

예시: I am not in the habit of checking the weather forecast regularly; however, I often check it when I plan a get-together or a day out to avoid any inconvenience.

제안: Even if you are unsure, try to give a simple opinion or example related to the topic. This shows your ability to communicate and think critically.

예시: Although I am not an expert, I think climate change has caused more extreme weather like floods and heatwaves in recent years.

제안: Make your answer clearer by correcting grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically and avoid unclear phrases like 'mind state'.

예시: Yes, I would definitely like to visit cities with different climates because I want to experience new weather conditions and enjoy different environments.

× there are two seasons, uh, there are Four Seasons in my, where I live, it is uh, uh, summer, winter, spring and autumn.

✓ There are four seasons where I live: summer, winter, spring, and autumn.

The original sentence incorrectly states 'there are two seasons' and then 'there are Four Seasons', which is contradictory and confusing. The correct sentence clearly states the number of seasons and lists them properly. Also, 'Four' should not be capitalized here. This correction clarifies the existence and number of seasons using the correct 'there are' structure.

× I prefer cold weather as we do not sweat at there and we can enjoy the fog and the causing.

✓ I prefer cold weather as we do not sweat there and we can enjoy the fog and the cold.

The phrase 'sweat at there' is incorrect; the preposition 'at' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'the causing' is unclear and likely a mistake; it is corrected to 'the cold' to make sense in context. Proper preposition use and word choice improve clarity.

× there are two seasons, uh, there are Four Seasons in my, where I live, it is uh, uh, summer, winter, spring and autumn.

✓ There are four seasons where I live: summer, winter, spring, and autumn.

The original sentence inconsistently mentions 'two seasons' and 'Four Seasons'. The quantifier 'two' is incorrect here; the correct number is 'four'. Consistent and accurate quantifiers are essential for clear communication.

× I prefer dry weather only as when it is, it is a wet weather we cannot go anywhere and in dry weather we can go anywhere at anytime.

✓ I prefer dry weather only because when it is wet weather, we cannot go anywhere, but in dry weather, we can go anywhere at any time.

The phrase 'when it is, it is a wet weather' is awkward and incorrect; 'because when it is wet weather' is clearer. Also, 'at anytime' should be 'at any time' as two words. Proper preposition and phrase usage improve sentence clarity and correctness.

× As I'm not in the habit of checking the weather forecast, but yes, definitely when I plan something, get together or day out I often check weather forecast.

✓ I'm not in the habit of checking the weather forecast, but yes, definitely when I plan something like a get-together or a day out, I often check the weather forecast.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'As' at the beginning and lacks articles before 'get together' and 'day out'. Also, 'check weather forecast' needs 'the' before 'weather forecast'. Correct pronoun and article usage make the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Yes, I definitely like to visit other cities that have different climates where I live because I want to experience other climate also rather than mind state.

✓ Yes, I definitely like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because I want to experience other climates as well rather than my own.

The phrase 'different climates where I live' should be 'different climates from where I live' to indicate comparison. 'Other climate also' should be 'other climates as well' for correct plural and adverb use. 'Mind state' is incorrect and replaced with 'my own' to refer to the speaker's climate. Proper pronoun and preposition use improve clarity.