Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and clear by directly addressing the question with a topic sentence, then adding specific details. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. For example, mention the general climate and specify the challenging months with linking words for coherence.

예시: I live in Canada, where the weather is generally beautiful throughout the year. However, in January, it can be quite harsh due to heavy snowfall. Apart from that, the weather is usually pleasant for most of the year.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas. Try to combine your reasons smoothly to make your response more natural and effective.

예시: I prefer hot weather because summer days are longer, allowing more time for travel and outdoor activities. This makes the season more enjoyable compared to the cold winter months.

제안: Your answer is a bit repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples to support your preference. Avoid redundancy to make your answer more effective.

예시: I generally prefer dry weather because wet conditions can be irritating and limit outdoor activities. For instance, walking or traveling becomes difficult when it's raining heavily.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will improve clarity.

예시: Yes, I check the weather forecast daily before leaving the house because the weather in Canada changes frequently. This helps me dress appropriately for the day.

제안: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors. Provide specific examples of climate change effects and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

예시: In recent years, climate change has caused global temperatures to rise due to global warming and air pollution. As a result, some areas experience hotter summers, while others see increased snowfall and extreme weather conditions.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details about the climate differences. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, my home country has a hotter climate than Canada, with six months of cold weather and six months of heat, and no snow except in certain regions.

× I live right now, I'm living in Canada and I think it's very beautiful weather in Canada throughout the year.

✓ I am currently living in Canada, and I think the weather in Canada is very beautiful throughout the year.

The phrase 'I live right now' is awkward and incorrect; 'I am currently living' better expresses the present continuous action. Also, 'it's very beautiful weather' is incorrect; 'the weather is very beautiful' is the correct structure because 'weather' is a singular noun requiring 'is'.

× Just in few months like January for every sometimes the weather is like tough like when there is too much snow.

✓ Only in a few months, like January, sometimes the weather is tough when there is too much snow.

The phrase 'Just in few months' should be 'Only in a few months' because 'few' needs an article 'a' to quantify properly. Also, 'for every sometimes' is incorrect and unnecessary; 'sometimes' alone suffices. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Otherwise the weather is good for us.

✓ Otherwise, the weather is good for us.

A comma is needed after 'Otherwise' to separate the introductory adverb from the main clause, improving readability.

× Personally I love hot weather because I think summers are the best thing to travel and we can enjoy the full day as the day are longer in summers than the winter.

✓ Personally, I love hot weather because I think summers are the best time to travel, and we can enjoy the full day as the days are longer in summer than in winter.

'The best thing to travel' should be 'the best time to travel' because 'time' fits better in this context. 'The day are longer' is incorrect; it should be 'the days are longer' to agree in number. Also, 'in summers' and 'the winter' should be 'in summer' and 'in winter' as seasons are generally singular when referring to the season as a whole.

× So I prefer hot weather than the cold weather.

✓ So I prefer hot weather to cold weather.

The correct preposition after 'prefer' when comparing two things is 'to', not 'than'. Also, 'the cold weather' can be simplified to 'cold weather' for parallel structure.

× I generally prefer the dry weather because I think it's sometimes it's too irritating when the weather is too wet and we are not able to travel properly or walk properly or can't enjoy the activity we are doing the outdoor as sometimes it is irritating when we step into our wet weather.

✓ I generally prefer dry weather because sometimes it is too irritating when the weather is too wet, and we are not able to travel or walk properly or enjoy outdoor activities, as it is irritating when we step into wet conditions.

'The dry weather' should be 'dry weather' as weather in general does not need 'the'. The sentence is also run-on and redundant; it is corrected for clarity and conciseness. 'The outdoor' should be 'outdoor activities' or 'outdoors'. 'Step into our wet weather' is awkward; 'step into wet conditions' is clearer.

× One day there is a cold and another day there is a hot sometimes.

✓ One day it is cold, and another day it is hot sometimes.

'There is a cold' and 'there is a hot' are incorrect; weather conditions require 'it is cold' or 'it is hot'. The modal verb 'is' is correctly used here, but the sentence structure needs correction.

× So I check whenever I stepped out before before that because I make sure I wear the right clothes according to the weather.

✓ So I check whenever I step out because I make sure I wear the right clothes according to the weather.

'I stepped out before before that' is incorrect and redundant. The present tense 'I step out' fits better with habitual action. The sentence is simplified for clarity.

× In recent share the effect of weather changing is increasing day by day due to a global warming and another pollutant thing like air pollution.

✓ Recently, the effects of weather changes are increasing day by day due to global warming and other pollutants like air pollution.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and awkward phrasing. 'In recent share' is incorrect; 'Recently' is appropriate. 'Effect of weather changing' should be 'effects of weather changes'. 'A global warming' should be 'global warming' without 'a'. 'Another pollutant thing' is awkward; 'other pollutants' is better.

× So the weather is changing like now we are getting more hotter than than usual and then the years ago and even in some areas the snow is more and the weather is too bad.

✓ So the weather is changing; now we are getting hotter than usual compared to years ago, and in some areas, there is more snow and the weather is worse.

'More hotter' is incorrect; 'hotter' alone is the comparative form. 'Than than' is a repetition error. 'Then the years ago' should be 'compared to years ago'. 'The weather is too bad' should be 'the weather is worse' for comparative meaning.

× Like right now I'm living in Canada, but I I visit my home country and my home countries have totally different weather condition than Canada because there is a more hot season.

✓ Right now, I'm living in Canada, but I visit my home country, and my home country has a totally different weather condition than Canada because there is a hotter season.

'I I visit' is a repetition error. 'My home countries' should be 'my home country' for singular consistency. 'Weather condition' should be singular or plural consistently; 'weather conditions' is better. 'There is a more hot season' should be 'there is a hotter season' using comparative adjective.

× And in my country days, six months are cold and six months are hot.

✓ In my country, six months are cold and six months are hot.

'In my country days' is incorrect; 'days' is unnecessary and confusing. The sentence is corrected for clarity.

× There is no snow at all.

✓ There is no snow at all.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× We have to visit a particular regions to.

✓ We have to visit particular regions too.

'A particular regions' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'regions' is plural. It should be 'particular regions'. 'To' at the end is incorrect; 'too' meaning 'also' fits better here.