Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer no natural and has grammatical errors. Use simple, clear sentences and correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and keep answer within 5 sentences. For example, start with a topic sentence about the weather, then add specific details about the seasons and current weather.

예시: I live in the hill region of Nepal, which mainly has two seasons: summer and winter. Currently, we are approaching winter, so the weather is mild and cool. It is neither too hot nor too cold, which makes it very pleasant to be outside. I really enjoy this kind of weather because it is comfortable and refreshing.

제안: Good content but some grammar and word choice errors (e.g., 'hardware' should be 'hot weather'). Use linking words to improve coherence. Keep sentences clear and concise.

예시: I prefer cold weather to hot weather because it is easier to stay comfortable. For example, I can wear warm clothes like jackets and scarves to keep warm. However, in hot weather, I often feel sweaty and uncomfortable, which makes it hard to enjoy activities.

제안: Answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Keep sentences natural and concise.

예시: It depends on my mood. Sometimes I enjoy wet weather, especially when it rains, because I like to go outside and feel the rain on my skin. Other times, I prefer dry weather because it is easier to stay active.

제안: Answer is incomplete and contains unclear phrases. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Provide clear, complete answers with linking words. For example, explain your habit clearly and give reasons.

예시: I usually do not check the weather forecast because it is not very accurate in Nepal. However, when I lived in Japan, I checked it daily because the forecasts were more reliable and helpful.

제안: Answer has grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Provide specific effects of climate change, not just causes. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Climate change in recent years is mainly caused by modernization and industrialization. These activities release pollutants like carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide, and nitrogen gases into the air. As a result, we see effects such as rising temperatures, melting glaciers, and extreme weather events.

제안: Answer is unclear and has grammar errors. Use simple, clear sentences and correct grammar. Provide specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates. For example, I have lived in warm and mild regions, but I am curious to experience very hot or cold weather. I also want to learn how people adapt to these conditions and try different local foods that help them stay warm or cool.

× When I live in hill region of Nepal who is mainly has two seasons summer in winter.

✓ I live in the hill region of Nepal, which mainly has two seasons: summer and winter.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'When' instead of 'I' to start the sentence and 'who' instead of 'which' to refer to the region. Also, 'is mainly has' is incorrect; it should be 'mainly has'. The pronouns and verb forms need correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× When I live in hill region of Nepal who is mainly has two seasons summer in winter.

✓ I live in the hill region of Nepal, which mainly has two seasons: summer and winter.

The phrase 'in hill region' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'hill region'. Prepositions and articles must be used correctly to specify locations.

× Right now we are approaching the winter season, so the weather is neither too hot, not too cold.

✓ Right now, we are approaching the winter season, so the weather is neither too hot nor too cold.

The correlative conjunction pair 'neither...nor' is used incorrectly as 'neither...not'. This affects sentence structure and meaning.

× It's quite mild and cool at the moment, making it very pleasant to be outside and this is my favorite.

✓ It's quite mild and cool at the moment, making it very pleasant to be outside, and this is my favorite season.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'this is my favorite' without specifying what is favorite. Adding 'season' clarifies the meaning and corrects the pronoun reference.

× I can wear warm clothes, light jackets and any scarves to keep myself warm.

✓ I can wear warm clothes, light jackets, and scarves to keep myself warm.

The use of 'any' before 'scarves' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.

× However, in hardware, I often feel sweaty and uncomfortable.

✓ However, in hot weather, I often feel sweaty and uncomfortable.

The word 'hardware' is incorrect here; it should be 'hot weather'. This is a misuse of vocabulary affecting pronoun reference and meaning.

× Even my body become smelly, so I it's hard to enjoy other activities.

✓ Even my body becomes smelly, so it's hard to enjoy other activities.

The verb 'become' should be 'becomes' to agree with the singular subject 'my body'. Also, 'I it's' is incorrect and should be 'it's'.

× Sometimes I do enjoy wet weather such as rainy.

✓ Sometimes I do enjoy wet weather, such as rain.

The phrase 'such as rainy' is incorrect; 'rainy' is an adjective and should be replaced with the noun 'rain' after 'such as'.

× Uh, I like to wake myself out there and see the rain, feel the rain in my skin, such type.

✓ Uh, I like to walk outside and see the rain, feel the rain on my skin, that kind of thing.

'Wake myself out there' is incorrect; it should be 'walk outside'. Also, 'in my skin' should be 'on my skin'. 'Such type' is awkward and replaced with 'that kind of thing' for natural expression.

× I have not such habit of taking weather forecast because the weather forecast here in Nepal is not that accurate.

✓ I do not have the habit of checking the weather forecast because the weather forecast here in Nepal is not that accurate.

The phrase 'have not such habit of taking weather forecast' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'do not have the habit of checking the weather forecast'. Also, 'taking weather forecast' is unnatural.

× But while I was in up Rd. in Japan, I used to do daily because there were.

✓ But while I was in Upland Road in Japan, I used to do it daily because it was necessary.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Used to do daily' needs an object, and 'there were' is incomplete. The correction provides a complete and grammatically correct sentence.

× The main effects of climate change in recent years is because of the modernization and industrialization.

✓ The main effects of climate change in recent years are because of modernization and industrialization.

The subject 'effects' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'the modernization' and 'industrialization' do not need 'the' here.

× The the outcome gases is is a pollutant for the year sources.

✓ The output gases are pollutants for the air sources.

The phrase 'The the outcome gases is is' contains repeated words and incorrect verb agreement. 'Outcome gases' should be 'output gases', and the verb should agree with the plural subject 'gases'.

× Carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide and other nitrogen gases are the main causes.

✓ Carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide, and other nitrogen gases are the main causes.

A comma is needed before 'and' in a list (Oxford comma) for clarity, though this is stylistic. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× Yes, I would love to be cities with different climates because I have been already lived in a warm in a mild reason for example.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit cities with different climates because I have already lived in warm and mild regions, for example.

'Love to be cities' is incorrect; it should be 'love to visit cities'. 'Been already lived' is incorrect; 'have already lived' is correct. 'In a warm in a mild reason' should be 'in warm and mild regions'.

× I am curious about experience very hot or cold weather to see how people add up to those condition.

✓ I am curious about experiencing very hot or cold weather to see how people adapt to those conditions.

'Curious about experience' should be 'curious about experiencing'. 'Add up to' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'adapt to'. 'Condition' should be plural 'conditions'.

× Or even we can have different kinds of food to get warmth or cold to our to our body and no more.

✓ Or even we can have different kinds of food to keep our body warm or cool, and nothing more.

The phrase 'get warmth or cold to our to our body' is incorrect and repetitive. It should be 'keep our body warm or cool'. 'No more' is unclear and replaced with 'nothing more'.