Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'the figure of Kuwait' and 'in weather, the weather is quite quite'. Use clear topic sentences and supporting details with linking words.

예시: The weather in Kuwait is mostly hot and sunny, which makes it difficult to stay outside for long. Usually, people rely on air conditioning to stay comfortable. However, right now the weather is quite mild and pleasant.

제안: Focus on giving a clear and direct answer first, then add specific reasons. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer moderate weather because I find both very hot and very cold weather uncomfortable. For example, extreme heat makes me tired, and cold weather affects my mood. Therefore, normal weather is the best for me to enjoy daily activities.

제안: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases like 'you know'.

예시: I prefer moderate weather rather than very dry or wet conditions. Dry weather can negatively affect my mood and health, while wet weather makes me feel lazy and less productive. So, moderate weather suits me best.

제안: Provide a direct answer first, then explain with clear reasons. Avoid excessive hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I usually do not check the weather forecast because I have lived in Kuwait for a long time and can predict the weather based on experience. Since it is mostly sunny here, I find it easy to know what to expect.

제안: Avoid unclear phrases like 'The lyrics would say'. Give specific examples and organize your answer with linking words. Reduce hesitation and filler words.

예시: Climate change has caused many problems recently. For example, extreme weather conditions have increased health issues, leading to more hospitalizations. Additionally, people may suffer because they do not drink enough water during hot weather.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clear sentences. Avoid incomplete thoughts and unclear phrases like 'The you know the temperature is always above 4'.

예시: I would love to visit other countries with different climates because I have only experienced two so far. For instance, I lived in Pakistan where the weather was moderate, but here in Kuwait, it is extremely hot most of the time.

× Mostly here the weather is remain hot and sunny and you cannot stay outside for more than 5 minutes and you need always air condition all the time.

✓ Mostly here the weather remains hot and sunny and you cannot stay outside for more than 5 minutes and you always need air conditioning all the time.

The verb 'remain' should be in the third person singular form 'remains' to agree with the singular subject 'weather'. Also, 'air condition' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'air conditioning'. The adverb 'always' should be placed before the verb 'need' for correct adverb placement.

× you need always air condition all the time.

✓ you always need air conditioning all the time.

The adverb 'always' should be placed before the main verb 'need' to correctly modify it. Also, 'air condition' is incorrect; the correct term is 'air conditioning'.

× But right now in weather, the weather is quite quite I would say.

✓ But right now, the weather is quite calm, I would say.

The phrase 'in weather' is incorrect and unnecessary. Also, repeating 'quite' is redundant. Adding 'calm' clarifies the meaning. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper pronoun use.

× Will I prefer always a normal weather?

✓ I always prefer normal weather.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used here. The sentence is a statement about preference, so 'I always prefer' is correct. Also, 'a normal weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable and does not take 'a'.

× Will I prefer always a normal weather?

✓ I always prefer normal weather.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'normal weather' because 'weather' is an uncountable noun and does not require an article here.

× Like I don't like more sunny and hot weather or neither I like, uh, the most cloudy, uh, weather or cold weather because I cannot tolerate both of them for me and normal weather is uh, completely, uh, acceptable where I can enjoy or I would say I, I can.

✓ I don't like very sunny and hot weather, nor do I like very cloudy or cold weather because I cannot tolerate either of them. Normal weather is completely acceptable where I can enjoy myself.

The conjunctions 'or neither' are incorrectly used; 'nor' is appropriate after a negative. The sentence is also run-on and unclear, so it is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, as I already discussed, I prefer normal weather because if the weather is very dry, so it will definitely effects your mood or it is it will, you know, also effects your body.

✓ Well, as I already discussed, I prefer normal weather because if the weather is very dry, it will definitely affect your mood and it will also affect your body.

The verb 'effects' is incorrectly used; the correct verb is 'affect'. Also, 'so' is unnecessary after 'because'. The sentence is corrected for verb form and clarity.

× So yeah, wet weather is also not comfortable for me because I don't feel like doing work at that mood.

✓ So yeah, wet weather is also not comfortable for me because I don't feel like working in that mood.

The phrase 'doing work' is better expressed as 'working'. Also, 'at that mood' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in that mood'.

× I never check, uh, the weather forecast because, uh, it's, uh, normally I would say I can predict the weather because when you're living in a place for a longer period of time so that you can easily predict the weather.

✓ I never check the weather forecast because normally I would say I can predict the weather since when you live in a place for a longer period of time, you can easily predict the weather.

The phrase 'when you're living' is better as 'when you live' for general truth. Also, 'so that' is unnecessary here; 'since' or 'because' is more appropriate. The sentence is corrected for tense and conjunction use.

× And especially here in Kuwait, like most of the time it's sunny and, uh, you know, there's, you can only experience the 2.

✓ Especially here in Kuwait, most of the time it's sunny, and you can only experience two seasons.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'You can only experience the 2' is vague; it should specify 'two seasons'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and completeness.

× The lyrics would say that there are a lot of effects of climate change in the recent year, For example, uh, uh, the weather is affecting people's life a lot because of the climate change, people are getting more diseases and they are, you know, uh, getting hospitalized most of the time.

✓ I would say that there are a lot of effects of climate change in recent years. For example, the weather is affecting people's lives a lot because of climate change; people are getting more diseases and are often hospitalized.

'Lyrics' is incorrect; 'I would say' is appropriate. 'In the recent year' should be 'in recent years' for plural. 'People's life' should be 'people's lives' (plural). The sentence is corrected for word choice and plural forms.

× And people are not feeling well, maybe because they are not, uh, drinking water properly.

✓ People are not feeling well, maybe because they are not drinking enough water.

The phrase 'drinking water properly' is awkward; 'drinking enough water' is clearer and more natural.

× Well I would love to visit other countries or sites to check the weather like I have only right now I have only experienced the weather of only two countries.

✓ Well, I would love to visit other countries or cities to check the weather. Right now, I have only experienced the weather of two countries.

'Sites' is incorrect; the correct word is 'cities'. The sentence is split for clarity and corrected for word choice.

× Like previously I was living in Pakistan where the weather was completely normal and moderate I would say.

✓ Previously, I lived in Pakistan where the weather was completely normal and moderate, I would say.

The past continuous 'was living' is less appropriate here than simple past 'lived' for a completed action in the past.

× But here in Kuwait it's extremely hot. The you know the temperature is always above 4.

✓ But here in Kuwait, it's extremely hot. You know, the temperature is always above 40 degrees.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Above 4' is likely a mistake; it should specify the temperature unit and a realistic number, e.g., 'above 40 degrees'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and completeness.