Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan penggunaan kata yang kurang tepat. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat lebih alami dan singkat, serta gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

예시: I live in Bandung City, which is surrounded by mountains, so the weather here is mostly chilly. Additionally, many trees have been planted, so the air quality is quite good.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah menjelaskan preferensi dengan alasan, namun kalimatnya terlalu panjang dan kurang terstruktur. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas, serta tambahkan kata penghubung untuk memperjelas hubungan antar ide.

예시: I prefer cold weather because when I visited Jakarta, which is hot, I couldn't go outside much. Even at home, I had to take a bath three times a day.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung ke poin, serta gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk menjelaskan alasan Anda.

예시: Currently, I prefer dry weather because the chilly air, as I mentioned earlier, makes it difficult for me to go out freely during wet weather.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik dan jelas. Namun, Anda bisa membuatnya lebih singkat dan menghindari pengulangan untuk membuat jawaban lebih efektif.

예시: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast on my phone before going out, especially when I plan to hang out with friends. If the weather is sunny, I go out; otherwise, I stay home.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah menyampaikan pendapat, tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan kalimat kurang terstruktur. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan tambahkan kata penghubung untuk memperkuat argumen Anda.

예시: Climate change has affected the weather in recent years. It is gradually getting hotter every day, partly because many people cut down trees without considering the negative impact on our environment.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas dan terstruktur. Namun, Anda bisa menggunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan menghindari pengulangan untuk membuat jawaban lebih efektif.

예시: I don't want to visit other cities in Indonesia because their weather is similar, mostly rainy and dry seasons. However, I would like to visit Germany to experience snow and very cold weather.

× I live in Bandung City which this city is surrounded by mountains, so the weather mostly here is chilly.

✓ I live in Bandung City, which is surrounded by mountains, so the weather here is mostly chilly.

The phrase 'which this city is surrounded by mountains' is incorrect because 'which' already refers to 'Bandung City', so 'this city' is redundant. Also, the placement of 'mostly' should be after 'here' to correctly modify 'chilly'. The definite article 'the' before 'weather' is correct here because we are talking about specific weather in Bandung City.

× Moreover, many trees are planned, so the air quality is quite good here.

✓ Moreover, many trees have been planted, so the air quality is quite good here.

The verb 'are planned' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'have been planted' to indicate that trees have been planted, affecting air quality. This is a verb tense and form issue but also relates to the correct use of verb forms rather than the definite article. However, the sentence structure needed correction for clarity.

× I prefer cold weather because I remember that when I went to Jakarta with the hotter weather I couldn't go anywhere and even though I just stay at home I could take a bath like 3 times in a day.

✓ I prefer cold weather because I remember that when I went to Jakarta with hotter weather, I couldn't go anywhere, and even though I just stayed at home, I took a bath about three times a day.

The verb 'stay' should be in past tense 'stayed' to match the past context. Also, 'could take a bath like 3 times in a day' is better expressed as 'took a bath about three times a day' for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× Currently I prefer dry weather, of course with the chilly air as I mentioned in the first question with whether makes me difficult to go out freely.

✓ Currently, I prefer dry weather, of course with the chilly air as I mentioned in the first question, which makes it difficult for me to go out freely.

The word 'whether' is incorrect here; it should be 'which' to refer to the chilly air. Also, 'makes me difficult' is incorrect; it should be 'makes it difficult for me'. The definite article 'the' before 'chilly air' is correct.

× Climate change in recent years affect on the weather.

✓ Climate change in recent years affects the weather.

The subject 'Climate change' is singular, so the verb should be 'affects' (third person singular present tense). Also, 'affect on' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'affects the weather' without 'on'.

× It's getting hotter gradually, day by day, and given that many people cut trees randomly, they don't consider the bad impact to our environment.

✓ It's getting hotter gradually, day by day, and given that many people cut trees randomly, they don't consider the bad impact on our environment.

The correct preposition to use with 'impact' is 'on', not 'to'. So, 'bad impact to our environment' should be 'bad impact on our environment'.

× I don't want to go to other cities in Indonesia because they have the same weather, which are rain and dry.

✓ I don't want to go to other cities in Indonesia because they have the same weather, which is rain and dry seasons.

The phrase 'which are rain and dry' is incorrect because 'weather' is singular, so the verb should be 'is'. Also, 'rain and dry' should be 'rain and dry seasons' for clarity and correctness.