Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更自然且语法准确。用主题句直接回答，然后用一两句具体细节支持。注意时态和冠词，用“where I live”要加介词或改为更自然的表达。避免冗长或重复。

예시: The weather where I live is quite changeable. For example, summers are very hot and can exceed 30°C, while winters are mild and sometimes drop to around 18°C.

제안: 回答结构良好，有观点与具体理由，但可更简洁并增加连贯词。避免重复表达（例如同时用 uncomfortable 和 embarrasses）。可以再加入对比或一个简短例子。

예시: I prefer cold weather because I sweat less and feel more comfortable. For example, in winter I enjoy eating hot pot with friends, which makes the cold season enjoyable.

제안: 表达不够自然且有语法错误或不连贯的句子（如“The bathroom will know”意思不明）。应先直接回答，再用两条清晰的支持理由并用连词衔接。注意固定搭配（convenient 而非 'more like convenient'）。

예시: I prefer dry weather because it makes outdoor activities easier and more enjoyable. Also, dry conditions tend to keep my home cleaner, for example there is less damp and mold in the bathroom.

제안: 答案要注意时态一致并更简洁自然。首句用现在时表习惯（I check）。第二句可更连贯地说明目的并给出具体例子。

예시: Yes, I check the weather forecast every morning before I go to work. It helps me choose clothes—for instance, if the temperature is below 18°C I wear a thicker jacket.

제안: 观点明确但细节可更具体且语言需更自然。避免模糊代词（they）。可加入更多后果或例子（如海平面上升、极端天气）并用连接词扩展。

예시: One major effect is rising temperatures; for example, winters in Hong Kong have become warmer so people sometimes use air conditioning even in winter. This can also lead to more extreme weather events and heatwaves.

제안: 表达有语法和拼写问题（如 'As I'm a sport water sport lovers'）。应该先给出直接回答，然后用一到两句具体原因并保持句子简洁。注意数的一致性和词序。

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit warmer countries like Singapore and Malaysia because I love water sports. For instance, I would enjoy diving every day there, whereas in Hong Kong I avoid it in winter because the water is too cold.

× The weather I live is quite changeable.

✓ The weather where I live is quite changeable.

句子缺少表示地点的关系词“where”，原句“The weather I live”词序不正确。应使用“where I live”来限定地点或将句子改为“The weather in my area is quite changeable”。建议记住：表示“我居住的地方的天气”常用结构为“the weather where I live”或“the weather in my area”。

× In summer the weather is extremely hot and the temperature can exceed 30°C, but in winters it may drop below 18°C.

✓ In summer the weather is extremely hot and the temperature can exceed 30°C, but in winter it may drop below 18°C.

“winter(s)”在表示季节时通常用单数“winter”。此外当泛指某个季节时不加冠词："in winter"。建议：记住季节作泛指时使用单数形式，例如：in spring, in summer, in winter, in autumn。

× I prefer cold weather because I tend to sweat a lot in hot and humid conditions, which makes me feel uncomfortable and sometimes embarrasses me when my clothes get damp.

✓ I prefer cold weather because I tend to sweat a lot in hot and humid conditions, which makes me feel uncomfortable and sometimes embarrassed when my clothes get damp.

“embarrasses me”表示使我尴尬（主动）但这里从句结构需要形容词表结果状态，应使用过去分词或形容词“embarrassed”来表示“我感到尴尬”。因此将“embarrasses me”改为“embarrassed”。建议区分使役动词（make/embarrass）与表示感受的形容词：我感到…用形容词（I feel embarrassed）。

× I also enjoy winter because I can eat comforting foods like hot pot which makes the season pleasant.

✓ I also enjoy winter because I can eat comforting foods like hot pot, which makes the season pleasant.

原句缺少逗号隔开非限制性定语从句，导致阅读不流畅。这里“which makes the season pleasant”指代整个前句，应与前句用逗号分隔。建议写作时注意非限制性定语从句前加逗号。

× I prefer dry to wet weather because I enjoy experiencing outdoor activities and it's more like convenient during dry weather.

✓ I prefer dry to wet weather because I enjoy outdoor activities and it's more convenient during dry weather.

1) “enjoy experiencing outdoor activities”冗余，通常说“enjoy outdoor activities”。2) “more like convenient”不合语法，错误使用“like”；应为“more convenient”或直接“convenient”。建议简化表达："enjoy outdoor activities"且使用正确比较结构或形容词。

× Also, dry weather provides a cleaner living environment to me.

✓ Also, dry weather provides me with a cleaner living environment.

“provides a cleaner living environment to me”词序和搭配不自然。英语中常用结构是“provide somebody with something”。因此改为“provides me with a cleaner living environment”。建议记住“provide sb with sth”的固定搭配。

× The bathroom will know.

✓ The bathroom will be cleaner.

原句“The bathroom will know.”没有逻辑意义且缺少正确动词搭配。根据上下文应表达“浴室会更干净”，因此改为“The bathroom will be cleaner.”。建议确认句子主语后使用合适的谓语并保持语义连贯。

× I checked the weather forecast in the morning every day before I go to work.

✓ I check the weather forecast in the morning every day before I go to work.

句子描述的是经常性的习惯，应使用一般现在时而不是过去时。将“checked”改为“check”。建议区分一般现在时（习惯/常态）与一般过去时（过去发生的动作）。

× Weather forecast provides important information to me and choosing the appropriate clothing items to wear each day.

✓ The weather forecast provides important information to me and helps me choose the appropriate clothing to wear each day.

原句缺少谓语结构并且不完整。“Weather forecast provides ... and choosing ...”前后不并列。应改为“provides ... and helps me choose ...”。同时加上定冠词“the”。建议保证并列结构的动词形式一致。

× If the temperature gets below 18, then I need to get a thicker jacket.

✓ If the temperature drops below 18°C, then I need to wear a thicker jacket.

1) 常用表达为“drop below”而不是“get below”。2) 穿衣用“wear”更自然，非“get a thicker jacket”（后者也可但更常说wear）。3) 补全单位“°C”。建议使用更自然搭配并保持温度单位。

× I think increasing temperature is one of the most significant effects of climate change in recent years.

✓ I think increasing temperatures are one of the most significant effects of climate change in recent years.

“increasing temperature”应使用复数“temperatures”表示气温上升的趋势，并与主语一致（temperatures are ...）。此外“one of the most significant effects”后接复数主语前需注意结构一致性。建议使用“increasing temperatures”表达更自然。

× In Hong Kong right now in winter, sometimes they still need to turn on the air conditioner because the weather is very hot.

✓ In Hong Kong right now in winter, people sometimes still need to turn on the air conditioner because the weather is very hot.

句中“they”指代模糊，不如用“people”更清晰。并且“right now in winter”可简化为“in winter”或“right now, in winter,”。建议避免不明确代词，使用具体主语如“people”或“residents”。

× I'd like to visit countries with no winter like Singapore and Malaysia.

✓ I'd like to visit countries with no winter, like Singapore and Malaysia.

在列举例子前应加逗号以引出举例。此外“countries with no winter”虽可理解，但更自然的表达可为"countries that don't have a cold winter"。建议在举例前使用逗号并考虑更自然的短语。

× As I'm a sport water sport lovers.

✓ I'm a water sports lover.

原句结构混乱，既有“As I'm a”又有复数“lovers”，而且“sport water sport”重复。应简化为“I'm a water sports lover.”或“I love water sports.”。建议保持主谓一致并避免重复词语。

× I would like to dive into the ocean every day, but in Hong Kong I can't do it because I'll be freezing in winter.

✓ I would like to dive into the ocean every day, but in Hong Kong I can't do it in winter because I would freeze.

1) 时间一致性：句中谈的是一般情况，使用“in winter”更自然，而不是“I'll be freezing”（将来时）。2) 用“would freeze”或“would be freezing”作为条件/假设更合适，或直接用一般现在“I freeze”表事实。建议在表达假想愿望时保持时态一致，例如“I can't do it in winter because I would freeze”或“I can't do it in winter because it's too cold.”