Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: أحسّن التنظيم والاقتصاد في الإجابة وقلل التكرار. ابدأ بجملة موضوعية واضحة عن المناخ ثم أضف تفاصيل محددة قصيرة (مثلاً: درجات الحرارة، مدة الأمطار) مع رابط منطقي واحد. تجنّب الكلمات الزائدة مثل "also" و"though" المتكررة وحاول جملة واحدة رئيسية وزملة توضيحية واحدة.

예시: It's mostly hot and sunny throughout the year where I live. We get a little rain in winter, but it usually doesn't last long or fall heavily.

제안: استخدم ربطًا أقوى بين السبب والنتيجة وأضف مثالًا محددًا واحدًا لتوضيح فكرتك. تجنّب التعبيرات غير الضرورية مثل "to be honest" إذا لم تضف معنى جديدًا.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I find it more comfortable for physical activity; for example, I often go jogging or play football in cool mornings without getting overheated.

제안: نظّم إجابتك واذهب مباشرة للإجابة ثم قدّم تفاصيل محددة ومتناسقة. تجنّب الاسئلة غير المرتبطة بنبرة المقابلة واصل الجمل بشكل صحيح (قواعد وتصريف الأفعال). صِغ مثالًا واحدًا واضحًا مع ربط منطقي مثل "for example".

예시: I prefer dry weather because it's ideal for outdoor sports. For example, last week I went to the desert and played volleyball with my cousins, which was easy without worrying about rain.

제안: اجعل الإجابة أكثر دقة وقلّل التكرار. اذكر تكرارًا واضحًا (مثلاً: "always"، "usually"، "before leaving home") وبيّن سببًا واحدًا محددًا بلغة صحيحة. انتهِ بجملة مكتملة.

예시: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast before I leave the house, especially before going to the beach, so I know whether to bring a jacket or sun protection.

제안: قدّم جملة موضوعية واضحة تتبعها أمثلة محددة أو نتائج ملموسة. تجنّب العبارات المبعثرة وغير المكتملة واذكر أمثلة واقعية (مثل: ارتفاع درجات الحرارة، فيضانات، موجات حر). اختصر الأفكار في جملتين على الأكثر.

예시: Climate change has worsened recently, causing more frequent heatwaves and floods. For example, increased emissions from factories and cars have raised temperatures and led to extreme weather events.

제안: أجب مباشرة بجملة موضوعية قصيرة، ثم قدم سببًا محددًا واحدًا ودعمه بمثال. تجنّب التردد والكلمات الملء مثل "uh" و"for" المكررة. استخدم تراكيب صحيحة مثل "I enjoy visiting" و"to experience different cultures and activities."

예시: Yes, I enjoy visiting cities with different climates because it's a chance to try new activities and experience different cultures. For instance, I like spending a few days in cooler mountain towns to hike and explore local food.

× It is mostly hot here and also sunny all year long.

✓ It is mostly hot and sunny here all year long.

The sentence's word order is slightly awkward; moving 'here' after 'sunny' and combining adjectives makes it more natural. Use consistent present tense description for habitual weather.

× However, we got some rain in the winter but not that much though.

✓ However, we get some rain in the winter, but not that much.

The speaker discusses habitual climate, so present simple 'get' is appropriate rather than past 'got'. Remove redundant 'though'.

× To be honest, I prefer cold weather because it is easier to stay active and comfortable.

✓ To be honest, I prefer cold weather because it is easier to stay active and comfortable.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple for general preference and adjective 'easier'.

× I can go play and enjoy my time out and about.

✓ I can go play and enjoy my time out and about.

Sentence is acceptable; 'go play' is informal but correct. No change required.

× Actually, I prefer a dry weather because it is perfect to outdoor activities like volleyball.

✓ Actually, I prefer dry weather because it is perfect for outdoor activities like volleyball.

Do not use the indefinite article 'a' before uncountable noun 'weather'. Use preposition 'for' with 'activities' instead of 'to'.

× When I remember last week I came to desert and play a volleyball with my cousins.

✓ When I think about last week, I went to the desert and played volleyball with my cousins.

For past events use past simple verbs 'went' and 'played' not 'came' and 'play'. Use article 'the' with 'desert' and omit 'a' before 'volleyball' when talking about the activity.

× Which is the best? Which is the best sport for?

✓ Which is the best? Which sport is it best for?

The second question's word order is incorrect. Place the auxiliary 'is' before the subject and include 'for' at the end of the question for clarity.

× Actually, yes, I usually check the weather forecast before going to the beach and also before going out because checking the weather forecast is important because some people going out and feel cold and they don't bring some jackets and.

✓ Actually, yes, I usually check the weather forecast before going to the beach and before going out because checking the forecast is important; some people go out, feel cold, and don't bring jackets.

Use present simple 'go' instead of 'going' in the clause 'some people go out'. Remove redundant 'because' and trailing 'and'. Use plural 'jackets' without 'some' in negative context.

× Actually, a climate change became worst in recent years because about the human activities that lead to climate change is it is dangerous and we should work together and to stop these dangerous activities for example, it's.

✓ Actually, climate change has become worse in recent years because of human activities that cause it. It is dangerous, and we should work together to stop these activities.

Use 'climate change' without article 'a'. For recent changes use present perfect 'has become worse'. Use 'because of' to show cause, 'cause' instead of 'lead to' with 'it'. Remove filler and correct infinitive usage: 'work together to stop'.

× For me, yes, I enjoy going to other cities that have different climate, uh, because, uh, it is something new in my life and uh, I enjoy to go and get to these cities in the holidays, uh, for, for, uh, several days to have fun and to know different.

✓ For me, yes, I enjoy going to other cities that have different climates because it is something new in my life. I enjoy visiting these cities during the holidays for several days to have fun and to experience different cultures.

Use plural 'climates'. Remove fillers 'uh'. Use gerund 'visiting' rather than 'to go and get to'. 'During the holidays' is natural; replace vague 'to know different' with 'to experience different cultures'.