Weather— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and correct facts, use concise sentences and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific details. Avoid inaccuracies (e.g. "Queen's name") and unnecessary repetition.

예시: It is generally very sunny where I live; we have more sunny days than most other Australian states. Because of that, people often spend time outdoors at parks and beaches, especially on weekends.

제안: Give a clear preference in the first sentence, then support with two specific reasons using linking words (because, while, so). Correct small grammar issues (e.g. "you wearing" → "you wear", "air condition" → "air conditioning"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer cold weather because I enjoy the cozy feeling of wearing warm clothes and scarves. Also, when it is hot I feel uncomfortable outdoors and often have to go inside to use air conditioning.

제안: Clarify your meaning and avoid unclear phrases. State your preference, then give clear, specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary for sweating and humidity. Remove irrelevant or confusing references (e.g. "use my dresser"). Keep answers coherent with linking words (for example, "because" and "so").

예시: I prefer dry weather because high humidity makes me sweat a lot and feel sticky. For example, in very humid places my clothes stick to my skin and I feel uncomfortable, so I find dry days much more pleasant.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical statement about your habit first (e.g. "I don't check it regularly"). Then explain when you do check and give specific examples. Use simple, accurate vocabulary and avoid word confusion. Keep to two sentences max.

예시: I don't check the forecast every day, but I do when I see dark clouds or plan to go out. For instance, if it looks cloudy I will check my phone to see the chance of rain before leaving.

제안: Answer directly with one clear statement about effects, then support with two specific examples (e.g. more frequent storms, higher temperatures). Use correct collocations ("frequency and severity", "extreme weather events") and avoid vague phrasing. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "for example" or "because".

예시: I think climate change has increased the frequency and severity of extreme weather events. For example, we have seen more intense storms and longer heatwaves in recent years, which affect agriculture and daily life.

제안: State your preference clearly and give a specific reason. Use correct verbs and vocabulary (e.g. "visit a city with snow", "excited to experience snow"). Provide one concise supporting detail about what you want to try or see. Keep it to 2 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a city that has snow because I have never experienced it. I think trying activities like building a snowman or seeing snowy landscapes would be a fun new experience.

× Queen's name is known as the Sunshine State, so we have the most and sunny days out of any states in Australia.

✓ Queensland is known as the Sunshine State, so we have the most sunny days of any state in Australia.

The student used 'Queen's name' incorrectly instead of 'Queensland' and 'the most and sunny days' is ungrammatical. Use the proper proper noun 'Queensland'. Use 'the most sunny days' or better 'the sunniest days' and match 'state' (singular) with 'any state'. Also remove the unnecessary 'and'. Suggestions: learn proper noun spelling and simplify comparative phrases (e.g., 'the sunniest days of any state').

× I think that's quite good when you want to enjoy yourself out in the park or next to the beach.

✓ I think that's quite good when you want to enjoy yourself in the park or at the beach.

The original is mostly correct but 'out in the park' and 'next to the beach' are awkward. Use prepositions 'in the park' and 'at the beach' for natural English. This is a preposition choice issue tied to verb context; keep verb forms unchanged.

× I think cold weather is better 'cause I love the warm fuzzy feeling when you wearing thick clothes, whereas if you're getting hot and you're walking outside, you can't do anything.

✓ I think cold weather is better because I love the warm, fuzzy feeling when you wear thick clothes, whereas if you get hot while walking outside, you can't do anything.

Use base form 'wear' after 'when you' (present simple) for habitual or general statements rather than 'you wearing' which is a participle phrase. Use parallel present simple 'you get' not 'you're getting' for general truths. Also replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because' and add a comma between 'warm' and 'fuzzy'. Grammar types: present tense and verb form corrections.

× You need to get inside and use that air condition.

✓ You need to get inside and use the air conditioner.

The phrase 'air condition' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'air conditioner' (a device). Use 'the' if referring to a specific device, or omit it: 'use an air conditioner'. This is an article and word choice issue.

× I think dry weather is better because you can use my dresser to fix it if the weather is hot and humid, just like in Thailand or in Cairns.

✓ I think dry weather is better because you can use a dehumidifier to fix it if the weather is hot and humid, like in Thailand or Cairns.

The student used 'my dresser' which is incorrect for controlling humidity; likely meant 'dehumidifier'. Also 'in Cairns' does not require 'in' before place when listing with 'like'. Replace pronoun 'my' with correct noun and adjust article 'a'. This is a pronoun/word choice error.

× I think it's made through skin really, like really crying.

✓ I think it affects the skin a lot, causing it to feel like it's sweating.

The original uses incorrect passive/phrase 'made through skin' and 'crying' to describe sweating. Use active verbs 'affects' and 'causing' followed by gerund to describe result. This fixes verb form and clarity.

× And it's wet, it's sticky, it's uncomfortable.

✓ It's wet, sticky, and uncomfortable.

No major tense errors but combine adjectives naturally using commas and 'and'. This improves fluency and coordination of adjectives.

× I'm not shaking them regularly can say, but it's more like if I notice any dot class in the spot then an upper check it with the weather forecast, which sometimes is kind of recently because it might say that on just cloudy days and let's say 10% of rain, but that is rain anyway.

✓ I don't check it regularly, but if I notice any dark clouds I check the weather forecast; sometimes it says only a 10% chance of rain, but it can still rain.

The original sentence has many structural problems and incorrect words ('shaking','dot class','an upper'). Recast as clear sentences: 'I don't check it regularly' and the conditional 'if I notice any dark clouds I check the weather forecast.' Simplify the explanation of forecast probabilities. This is a sentence structure and word choice correction.

× I think it had increased both the recurrence and the severity and of the decisions and also the abnormal weather patterns.

✓ I think it has increased both the recurrence and the severity of extreme events and abnormal weather patterns.

Use present perfect 'has increased' to refer to recent changes up to now rather than past perfect 'had increased'. Remove extra 'and' and change 'decisions' to 'extreme events' (likely intended). Correct word order and noun choice. Grammar types: past tense corrected to present perfect.

× But we can clearly see the alignment from memory.

✓ But we can clearly see the change from memory.

The word 'alignment' is incorrect in this context; 'change' or 'difference' fits better when talking about climate patterns. This is a word choice issue within adjective/adverb category to improve meaning.

× So as to what it patterns, we are normal, but they're pouring more frequently.

✓ As for the patterns, they are becoming abnormal; heavy rains are happening more frequently.

'So as to what it patterns, we are normal' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'As for the patterns, they are becoming abnormal' and clarify 'pouring' as 'heavy rains' occurring more often. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.

× I would like to fix city is snow one day.

✓ I would like to visit a city with snow one day.

Use 'visit' to express intention, and 'a city with snow' to describe the place. 'Fix' is wrong here. Also maintain correct noun phrase order. This corrects verb choice and present participle confusion.

× I know snow is It is not fun to cry.

✓ I know snow is... It is not fun to be cold.

The sentence is confused: 'not fun to cry' likely means 'not fun to be cold' or 'not fun to shiver/feel cold'. Replace with 'not fun to be cold' for clarity. This corrects word choice and adjective use.

× It's going to be a new experience so I look at it right to it.

✓ It would be a new experience, so I'm looking forward to it.

'I look at it right to it' is ungrammatical. Use the idiom 'look forward to' with the correct gerund/object: 'look forward to it.' Change tense to conditional/modal 'would be' to match hypothetical desire. This fixes sentence structure and verb phrase usage.