Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the morning because I am often busy and don't have time for a full breakfast. So, having a quick snack helps me save time and stay energized.

제안: Focus on giving a clear opinion with supporting reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid unclear phrases and improve grammar for better clarity.

예시: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar or fat. However, people can balance this by doing activities like yoga to maintain their health.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. Use past tense consistently and explain your opinion with specific details. Avoid confusing phrases like 'myth of my life'.

예시: No, I did not often eat snacks when I was young because my mother told me they were bad for my health. So, I avoided them to stay healthy.

제안: Be specific and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then list examples with linking words. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure.

예시: I like to eat various snacks daily, such as light spring rolls and finger fries. These snacks are delicious, so I enjoy having them regularly.

× I prefer to take snacks in the morning because I do not have much time to take a breakfast because of my daily routine life.

✓ I prefer to have snacks in the morning because I do not have much time to have breakfast due to my daily routine.

The verb 'take' is incorrectly used with 'snacks' and 'breakfast'. In English, we usually say 'have snacks' or 'have breakfast' instead of 'take snacks' or 'take breakfast'. Also, 'because of my daily routine life' is awkward; 'due to my daily routine' is more natural.

× Then I prefer to take snack which saves my a lot of time.

✓ Then I prefer to have snacks which save me a lot of time.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context. Also, 'saves my a lot of time' is incorrect; it should be 'save me a lot of time' because 'snacks' is plural and the object pronoun is 'me'.

× No it is not healthy to eat snack but every individual like to eat snacks sometime and they from different type of activity for maintain their health such as yoga.

✓ No, it is not healthy to eat snacks but every individual likes to eat snacks sometimes and they do different types of activities to maintain their health such as yoga.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to be consistent. 'Every individual like' should be 'every individual likes' due to subject-verb agreement. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'They from different type of activity' is incorrect; it should be 'they do different types of activities'. 'For maintain' should be 'to maintain'.

× No, when I was a kid I don't like to eat snack because my mother said to me snack is dangerous for their health and this is a myth of my life.

✓ No, when I was a kid I didn't like to eat snacks because my mother told me snacks are dangerous for health and this is a myth in my life.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Don't like' should be 'didn't like' to match past tense. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'Said to me' is better as 'told me'. 'Snack is dangerous for their health' should be 'snacks are dangerous for health' for subject-verb agreement and clarity. 'Myth of my life' is better as 'myth in my life'.

× I like to eat different type of snack on daily basis such as snack light spring roll and finger fries.

✓ I like to eat different types of snacks on a daily basis such as light spring rolls and finger fries.

'Different type' should be plural 'different types' to match plural 'snacks'. 'Snack light spring roll' is incorrect; it should be 'light spring rolls'. Also, 'on daily basis' needs an article: 'on a daily basis'.

× These snacks is very delicious and I prefer to eat snacks on daily basis.

✓ These snacks are very delicious and I prefer to eat snacks on a daily basis.

'These snacks is' is incorrect; it should be 'These snacks are' for subject-verb agreement. Also, 'on daily basis' needs the article 'a' to be 'on a daily basis'.