Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy by not repeating 'snacks' multiple times. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't usually eat snacks, but I enjoy them when I'm out with friends or spending time with my family.

제안: Your answer addresses the question well but contains filler words like 'uh' which affect fluency. Try to use linking words like 'however' more effectively and avoid repetition for a smoother response.

예시: It depends on the type of snack; fruits and nuts are healthy, but eating too many spicy or sweet snacks can harm your body.

제안: Your answer provides personal details but is affected by many filler words and lacks coherence. Try to organize your answer with clear linking words and avoid unnecessary hesitation to improve fluency and clarity.

예시: Yes, I used to eat many snacks as a child, like Lee's Curry and sweets such as candies and chocolates. Unfortunately, this may have contributed to my current liver problems.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains many filler words, which affects clarity and coherence. Try to complete your thoughts fully and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with pronunciation and word choice (e.g., 'snakes' instead of 'snacks').

예시: I like many snacks, especially chocolates and candies. For spicy snacks, I enjoy Indian foods like samosas and pakoras.

× I often eat snacks whenever I am outside with my friends or family or spending family time together.

✓ I often eat snacks whenever I am outside with my friends or family or spending time together with my family.

The phrase 'spending family time together' is awkward and redundant. It is better to say 'spending time together with my family' to clearly express the idea. This is a singular/plural and phrase structure issue related to clarity and natural expression.

× if uh, if I talk about fruits or nuts, then they are definitely beneficial for our health.

✓ if I talk about fruits or nuts, then they are definitely beneficial for our health.

The sentence is correct in terms of singular/plural usage. No correction needed here.

× However, eating too much spicy or sweet dishes can ruin our body.

✓ However, eating too many spicy or sweet dishes can ruin our body.

'Dishes' is plural, so the quantifier should be 'too many' instead of 'too much'. 'Too much' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'too many' is used with countable plural nouns like 'dishes'.

× I really remember when I was a child, I used to eat lots of snacks, umm, such as uh, Lee's Curry, some uh, sweet dishes like candies, lots of chocolates.

✓ I really remember when I was a child, I used to eat lots of snacks, such as Lee's Curry, some sweet dishes like candies, and lots of chocolates.

The sentence is mostly correct, but adding 'and' before 'lots of chocolates' improves sentence structure and clarity. The past tense 'used to eat' is appropriate here.

× And I think they really uh, damage my liver.

✓ And I think they really damaged my liver.

Since the speaker is referring to past effects of eating snacks, the past tense 'damaged' is more appropriate than present tense 'damage'. This is a past tense issue.

× And now I'm suffering from a little bit of liver problem.

✓ And now I'm suffering from a little bit of a liver problem.

The phrase 'a little bit of liver problem' is missing an article before 'liver problem'. Adding 'a' makes it grammatically correct. This is an article error.

× To be honest, there are lots of snakes umm, but I mostly prefer to eat chocolates and candies.

✓ To be honest, there are lots of snacks, but I mostly prefer to eat chocolates and candies.

The word 'snakes' is a typo and should be 'snacks'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it is necessary for clarity.

× Moreover, uh, for uh, if I talk about spicy ones, then uh, my favorite is of course, umm, Indian, uh, food like Indian snacks such as.

✓ Moreover, if I talk about spicy ones, then my favorite is, of course, Indian food like Indian snacks such as samosas and pakoras.

The original sentence is incomplete and has many filler words that disrupt sentence flow. Removing fillers and completing the sentence improves clarity and structure. This is a sentence structure error.