Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复表达，且句子结构需更自然流畅。可以简洁直接地说明吃零食的时间，并用连接词丰富内容。

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I feel hungry between meals. For example, I often choose spicy snacks like chili-flavored nuts.

제안: 回答中出现了矛盾，应避免自相矛盾的表达。建议先明确观点，再用具体原因支持，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. Therefore, I try to limit how often I eat them.

제안: 回答内容较好，但句子结构稍显重复。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my family owned a snack store. As a result, I had easy access to various snacks from the store.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“use it spicy snacks”和“sweetie snacks”。建议使用正确的表达方式，并丰富细节。

예시: It depends on my mood. Sometimes I enjoy spicy snacks like chili-flavored chips, while other times I prefer sweet snacks such as chocolate.

× I enjoy eating snacks very much, therefore I almost eat snacks every day, especially those spicy snacks.

✓ I enjoy eating snacks very much; therefore, I almost eat snacks every day, especially those spicy snacks.

这里的“therefore”是连接词，前后句子之间需要用分号或句号分开，并且“therefore”后面需要加逗号，表示因果关系。

× Absolutely. I don't think so, although I do enjoy eating snacks.

✓ Absolutely not. I don't think it is healthy, although I do enjoy eating snacks.

“I don't think so”用法不当，应该明确表达“不健康”的观点，且“Absolutely”后面需要补充否定，表达强烈否定。

× My mom and my grandparents, they run a store to sell snacks, so I usually eat snacks from the stores.

✓ My mom and my grandparents ran a store to sell snacks, so I usually ate snacks from the store.

描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去时态，“run”应改为“ran”，“usually eat”应改为“usually ate”。

× Sometimes I like to use it spicy snacks well, in other occasions I like to eat sweetie snacks such as chocolate.

✓ Sometimes I like to eat spicy snacks; on other occasions, I like to eat sweet snacks such as chocolate.

“use it spicy snacks”结构错误，应改为“eat spicy snacks”；“sweetie”用词不当，应改为“sweet”；“in other occasions”应改为“on other occasions”，介词使用错误。