Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ, ví dụ như thiếu từ 'not' trong câu 'I really eat snacks' nên câu này không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I usually eat snacks during my breaks or when I feel bored. This helps me relieve stress and boost my energy.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý đến cách dùng từ và ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'more active more' không đúng. Hãy cung cấp lý do cụ thể và rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời thuyết phục.

예시: Although some people believe snacks are unhealthy, I think eating sweets like chocolate can help my brain stay active and give me extra energy.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không tự nhiên. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động trong quá khứ và tránh dùng các cụm từ không chính xác như 'transferred into my mind'. Hãy trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I rarely ate snacks when I was young because my parents told me they were bad for my health and could cause toothaches. However, I did eat some snacks occasionally.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn không liên quan và không trả lời câu hỏi. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp về loại đồ ăn vặt bạn thích, sử dụng câu đầy đủ và từ vựng phù hợp.

예시: I like to eat fruits like apples and bananas because they are healthy and tasty.

× Well to be honest I really eat snacks but right now I usually have snacks during break time or whenever I'm bored to release my stress and get something to feel my energy.

✓ Well to be honest I don't really eat snacks but right now I usually have snacks during break time or whenever I'm bored to relieve my stress and get something to boost my energy.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'don't' to form the negative 'don't really eat snacks'. Also, 'to release my stress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to relieve my stress'. Additionally, 'get something to feel my energy' is awkward; 'boost my energy' is more appropriate. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, while others might think that snacks are not good for your health, I personally think snacks are good for my health. So basically snacks such as sweets or chocolates can help our brain to be more active more. More over, snacks can help you get more energy too.

✓ Well, while others might think that snacks are not good for your health, I personally think snacks are good for my health. So basically, snacks such as sweets or chocolates can help our brain to be more active. Moreover, snacks can help you get more energy too.

The phrase 'More over' is incorrect; the correct word is 'Moreover'. Also, the sentence 'can help our brain to be more active more' is redundant and awkward; removing the extra 'more' and adding a period improves clarity. Proper use of prepositions and adverbs enhances sentence flow.

× Well, the main reason that I rarely had snacks when I was young was mainly because of the belief that my parents transferred into my mind.

✓ Well, the main reason that I rarely ate snacks when I was young was mainly because of the belief that my parents instilled in my mind.

The verb 'had' is less appropriate here; 'ate' is the correct past tense verb for consuming food. Also, 'transferred into my mind' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'instilled in my mind'. These changes correct verb tense and preposition usage.

× They told me that eating snacks is not good for your health and you also can have a toothache of it.

✓ They told me that eating snacks was not good for your health and you could also get a toothache from it.

Since the reporting verb 'told' is in the past tense, the subordinate clause should also be in the past tense ('was' instead of 'is'). 'You also can have' should be 'you could also get' to maintain tense consistency and natural phrasing. 'A toothache of it' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'from it'.

× But so I already eat snacks when I was little.

✓ But I already ate snacks when I was little.

The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference 'when I was little'. The word 'so' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow; removing it improves clarity.