Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น การใช้ tense และคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม รวมถึงการเชื่อมโยงประโยคให้ลื่นไหลและเป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น ใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่ออธิบายเหตุผลและผลลัพธ์อย่างชัดเจน

예시: I usually eat a snack after work because I feel stressed. Therefore, I like to eat something relaxing, such as gummies or potato chips.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น การใช้ tense และคำเชื่อมเพื่อแสดงเหตุผลและความตั้งใจอย่างชัดเจน รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำซ้อน

예시: In my opinion, I don't eat many snacks like potato chips or gummies because I know they are unhealthy. So, I try to maintain a balanced diet.

제안: ควรใช้คำศัพท์และโครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น การใช้ tense และคำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม รวมถึงการจัดลำดับความคิดให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ

예시: When I was young, I often ate snacks at school. However, my mom didn't like me eating unhealthy food, so she didn't support me buying snacks like potato chips, gummies, or soft drinks.

제안: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้องและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น การใช้ tense และคำเชื่อมเพื่อแสดงความรู้สึกและเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน

예시: I really like potato chips because they make me happy when I eat them. However, I don't eat them too often because they are unhealthy.

× Usually I away a snack after work because I'm feel straight from work so I need something that make me feel relaxes so that why I should snack like a gummies or like a potato chips.

✓ Usually I have a snack after work because I feel tired straight from work so I need something that makes me feel relaxed, so that's why I snack on gummies or potato chips.

The verb 'away' is incorrect; it should be 'have' to indicate eating. 'I'm feel' should be 'I feel' as 'feel' is a stative verb and does not use 'am' + verb-ing here. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'something'. 'Relaxes' should be 'relaxed' as an adjective describing the feeling. 'Should snack like a gummies' is incorrect; it should be 'snack on gummies' or 'snack like gummies' without 'a'. The sentence needs proper verb forms and subject-verb agreement.

× In my opinion, I think I didn't take much snack like a potato chips or gummies because I know it takes too much it uh make unhealthy and so I try to balance my healthy.

✓ In my opinion, I don't eat many snacks like potato chips or gummies because I know they are unhealthy, so I try to balance my health.

'Didn’t take much snack' is incorrect; 'eat many snacks' is appropriate for countable plural nouns. 'A potato chips' is incorrect because 'chips' is plural and does not take 'a'. 'It takes too much it uh make unhealthy' is unclear and ungrammatical; it should be 'they are unhealthy'. 'Balance my healthy' should be 'balance my health'. The sentence needs correct quantifiers and clearer structure.

× When I was a shy I always snack of the school so that's why my mom didn't like me unhealthy so she didn't support me to buy a snack like a potato chips or gummies or soft drinks.

✓ When I was shy, I always snacked at school, so that's why my mom didn't like me being unhealthy and didn't support me buying snacks like potato chips, gummies, or soft drinks.

'Was a shy' is incorrect; 'was shy' is correct. 'Always snack' should be past tense 'always snacked' to match 'when I was'. 'Snack of the school' is incorrect preposition; 'snacked at school' is correct. 'Didn't like me unhealthy' should be 'didn't like me being unhealthy'. 'Didn't support me to buy' should be 'didn't support me buying'. The sentence needs past tense consistency and correct prepositions.

× I really crazy about potato chips because uh, I feel happy when I eat that, but I didn't take it too much because it is unhealthy anymore.

✓ I am really crazy about potato chips because I feel happy when I eat them, but I don't eat them too much because they are unhealthy.

'I really crazy' lacks verb 'am'. 'Eat that' should be 'eat them' to refer to plural 'potato chips'. 'Didn't take it too much' is incorrect; 'don't eat them too much' is appropriate. 'It is unhealthy anymore' is incorrect; 'they are unhealthy' is correct. The sentence needs correct verb forms, pronouns, and tense consistency.