Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时有较多的口头语“uh”，影响流畅度。建议减少口头语，回答更简洁自然，同时可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I usually eat snacks while working or studying because the sweetness helps motivate me and makes me feel happy.

제안: 回答中存在重复和不连贯，建议使用连接词如“however”或“but”来表达对比，同时减少口头语，使表达更自然。

예시: I think it depends on the type of snacks; fruits are healthy, but eating too much chocolate or candies is unhealthy.

제안: 时态使用不准确，且句子结构不够清晰。建议注意时态一致性，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks like dark chocolate and cookies when I was young, but I don't eat them as much now that I am older.

제안: 回答中口头语较多，建议减少“umm”，并使用连接词如“and”或“also”使句子更连贯。

예시: I prefer eating fruits such as pineapple and oranges, and I also like nuts like pistachios.

× I usually eat snacks when I am, uh, working or studying because the sweetness can motivate me to do things better and can make me feel enjoyable and happy.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I am, uh, working or studying because the sweetness can motivate me to do things better and can make me feel happy and enjoy it.

句中“make me feel enjoyable”用法错误，“enjoyable”是形容词，不能用来描述人的感受，应该用“enjoy it”来表达“享受它”。

× Umm I think that depends if you like eating snacks like umm fruits and that is healthy but if you eat too much chocolate or candies and that is unhealthy.

✓ Umm I think it depends on whether you like eating snacks like fruits, which is healthy, but if you eat too much chocolate or candies, that is unhealthy.

原句结构混乱，缺少连接词和介词，导致句意不清。应使用“depends on whether”引导条件状语从句，并用逗号分隔句子，使表达更清晰。

× Yes, I often ate snacks like umm, the dark chocolate and umm cookies when I was young, but when I gradually grow older I don't.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks like umm, dark chocolate and umm cookies when I was young, but as I gradually grew older, I didn't.

句中“grow”应使用过去式“grew”以保持时态一致，且“don't”应改为过去式“didn't”，因为前半句是过去时，后半句也应保持过去时态。

× Yes, I often ate snacks like umm, the dark chocolate and umm cookies when I was young, but when I gradually grow older I don't.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks like umm, dark chocolate and umm cookies when I was young, but as I gradually grew older, I didn't.

“the dark chocolate”中“the”不应使用，因为这里指的是一种食物类别，而非特指某个巧克力。去掉“the”更符合英语习惯。

× Umm I prefer eating fruits like umm pineapple and oranges and also nuts like umm pistachio.

✓ Umm I prefer to eat fruits like umm pineapple and oranges and also nuts like umm pistachio.

动词“prefer”后面可以接动名词或不定式，但在正式表达中，使用不定式“to eat”更自然且常见。