Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中时态使用不准确，且句子结构不够自然。建议使用现在时态描述习惯行为，并简化句子结构，使表达更流畅。

예시: I usually eat snacks when I feel unhappy or tired because they provide energy and help release dopamine, which makes me feel better.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I think eating snacks is unhealthy because most of them are fried and high in fat and calories, which can lead to weight gain and increase the risk of diabetes.

제안: 时态和主谓一致错误较多，表达不够自然。建议使用过去时态描述过去习惯，并注意主语和动词的一致性。

예시: I seldom ate snacks when I was young because my mother thought they were unhealthy and discouraged me from eating them. Instead, she encouraged me to eat vegetables and fruits.

제안: 回答较为完整，但句子结构可以更自然，避免重复“chocolate”，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: My favorite snack is definitely chocolate because I love its taste. Moreover, it holds special meaning for me since my girlfriend gave me chocolate as my first gift.

× I often eat the snacks while I was unhappy and tired because the snacks can offering the energy and it also can stimulate the brain exerts dopamine which make you feel better.

✓ I often eat snacks when I am unhappy and tired because snacks can offer energy and they can also stimulate the brain to release dopamine which makes you feel better.

句子中时态混用，'was' 应改为现在时 'am'，因为描述的是现在的习惯行为；'can offering' 应改为 'can offer'，动词不定式形式错误；'exerts' 应改为 'release'，动词用法错误；'make' 应改为 'makes'，主谓一致错误。建议注意时态一致和动词形式的正确使用。

× I think it's unhealthy because most of the snacks are made of fried which includes many energy and fat and it can make me become fat and increasing the risk of diabetes.

✓ I think it's unhealthy because most snacks are fried, which contains a lot of energy and fat, and it can make me gain weight and increase the risk of diabetes.

'made of fried' 用法错误，应改为 'are fried'；'includes many energy' 中 'many' 用法错误，应改为 'a lot of'；'make me become fat' 表达不自然，改为 'make me gain weight'；'increasing' 应改为动词原形 'increase'，保持句子结构一致。建议注意介词搭配和词汇搭配的正确使用。

× I seldom eat that because of my mother, she think the snacks is unhealthy and I be avoided to eat that. But he encouraged me to eat some vegetables and fruit.

✓ I seldom ate that because of my mother; she thought snacks were unhealthy and I was told to avoid eating them. But she encouraged me to eat some vegetables and fruit.

描述过去习惯，动词应使用过去时：'eat' 改为 'ate'，'think' 改为 'thought'，'is' 改为 'were'，'be avoided' 改为 'was told to avoid'；'he' 应为 'she'，代词错误。建议注意时态一致和代词的正确使用。

× I seldom eat that because of my mother, she think the snacks is unhealthy and I be avoided to eat that. But he encouraged me to eat some vegetables and fruit.

✓ I seldom ate that because of my mother; she thought snacks were unhealthy and I was told to avoid eating them. But she encouraged me to eat some vegetables and fruit.

句中 'he' 指代错误，应为 'she'，因为前文提到的是 'my mother'。代词使用错误会导致句意混乱。建议注意代词与先行词的一致性。

× I think must be the chocolate because I like the taste of the chocolate. Plus it is very significant to me because my first gift is a chocolate from my girlfriend.

✓ I think it must be chocolate because I like the taste of chocolate. Plus, it is very significant to me because my first gift was chocolate from my girlfriend.

'the chocolate' 不需要定冠词，且 'chocolate' 作为不可数名词不加复数；'my first gift is a chocolate' 中 'a chocolate' 不自然，改为 'was chocolate'；时态应为过去时 'was'，因为描述过去的事件。建议注意不可数名词的用法和时态一致。