Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and structured. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'literally' to sound more natural and fluent. Start with a direct response, then provide examples using linking words for coherence.

예시: I usually eat snacks whenever I feel hungry. For example, I might have some crisps or chocolate with milk. However, I know it's not a very healthy habit to maintain.

제안: Your answer has good points but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'always scrub'. Try to use correct expressions and linking words to improve clarity and coherence.

예시: I don't think eating too many snacks is healthy. While some snacks like milk, cookies, or vegetables can be good, eating too much chocolate may lead to obesity. Therefore, it's best to eat snacks in moderation.

제안: Your answer is well-structured and detailed. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance fluency and coherence.

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For instance, at around five years old, I had a bad habit of eating too much chocolate and lollipops while watching TV. Although my mother tried to stop me, I couldn't resist, which eventually damaged my teeth.

제안: Your answer is detailed and uses good vocabulary. To improve, avoid repeating words like 'texture' and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I enjoy different snacks depending on my mood. For example, I like dipping cookies into milk because the combination creates a pleasant texture. Additionally, I often choose healthy snacks such as crisp carrots and fresh cucumbers, which are refreshing and rich in vitamins.

× No, it's not healthy at all to eat too much snacks.

✓ No, it's not healthy at all to eat too many snacks.

The quantifier 'much' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'many' is used with countable nouns like 'snacks'. Since 'snacks' is countable and plural, 'many' should be used instead of 'much'.

× But another another hand, eating too much chocolate can make you get obesity, so it's not really good idea to always scrub.

✓ But on the other hand, eating too much chocolate can make you obese, so it's not really a good idea to always snack.

The phrase 'another another hand' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on the other hand'. Also, 'make you get obesity' is awkward; 'make you obese' is more natural. Additionally, 'good idea' requires the indefinite article 'a'. The word 'scrub' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is likely 'snack'.