Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp câu hợp lý hơn. Ngoài ra, nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because it's a good time to relax. At that time, I often chat with my friends and share new snack flavors with them. Also, I like to have snacks after a hard day to feel refreshed.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn, ví dụ như chia động từ và danh từ số nhiều. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm rõ ý kiến của bạn.

예시: In my opinion, eating snacks can be healthy if I choose fruits like strawberries and bananas. They provide vitamins and natural sugars, which not only nourish my body but also make me feel happier.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

예시: Yes, when I was young, I often ate snacks, especially potato-flavored ones. I remember they tasted a bit salty and had a nice aroma, which I really enjoyed.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý đến cách dùng từ và ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi sai như 'my favorite night' thay vì 'my favorite snack'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết giữa các ý. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: My favorite snack is potato-flavored chips, especially those made by Lays or Swing. They are a little salty and have a nice aroma. Moreover, I like their attractive packaging, which catches my attention.

× I usually it's nice in the afternoon at this time I can eat, snack and talk with my friend and then I share the new flavor of snacks for them.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon. At this time, I can eat, snack, and talk with my friends, and then I share the new flavors of snacks with them.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with unclear structure and missing verbs. Separating it into clear sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' because it refers to multiple people, and 'flavor' should be plural 'flavors' to match 'snacks'.

× It's also most my most after hard day.

✓ It's also my favorite after a hard day.

The phrase 'most my most' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'my favorite' to indicate preference. Also, 'after hard day' needs an article 'a' before 'hard day'.

× I usually eat some flavors from my favorite fruit like strawberry and bananas so I can eat as much as I like.

✓ I usually eat flavors from my favorite fruits like strawberries and bananas so I can eat as much as I like.

'Some flavors from my favorite fruit' is awkward; 'flavors from my favorite fruits' is better. Also, 'strawberry' should be plural 'strawberries' to match 'bananas'.

× It not only provide vitamin but also it make me feel happier.

✓ It not only provides vitamins but also makes me feel happier.

The verbs 'provide' and 'make' do not agree with the singular subject 'It'. They should be 'provides' and 'makes'. Also, 'vitamin' should be plural 'vitamins' because it refers to multiple types of vitamins.

× Yes, when I work it I usually ate snacks, especially potato flavors.

✓ Yes, when I worked, I usually ate snacks, especially potato flavors.

The verb 'work' should be in past tense 'worked' to match the past tense context. The phrase 'work it' is incorrect and should be 'worked'. Also, a comma after 'worked' improves readability.

× When I eat a piece I can feel a bit salty and good smell from snacks.

✓ When I eat a piece, I can feel a bit of saltiness and a good smell from the snacks.

The sentence lacks a comma after the introductory clause. 'A bit salty' should be 'a bit of saltiness' to function as a noun phrase. 'Good smell' should be preceded by an article 'a'. Also, 'snacks' should have 'the' to specify.

× To me, my favorite night is potato flavored chips, which is made by Lays or Swing instead, is a little salty and has a nice aroma.

✓ To me, my favorite snack is potato-flavored chips, which are made by Lays or Swing. They are a little salty and have a nice aroma.

'Night' is incorrect; it should be 'snack'. 'Potato flavored' should be hyphenated as 'potato-flavored'. 'Which is made' should be 'which are made' because 'chips' is plural. The sentence is long and confusing; splitting into two sentences improves clarity. 'Has' should be 'have' to agree with plural subject 'chips'.

× Moreover, its packaging is so good to pay attention for me.

✓ Moreover, its packaging is so good that it catches my attention.

The phrase 'so good to pay attention for me' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'so good that it catches my attention' or 'so good that I pay attention to it'. The preposition 'for' is misused here.