Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be more structured and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons or situations using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' and try to be concise within 5 sentences.

예시: I usually eat snacks when I am studying or watching movies because it helps me feel happier and less bored. For example, during long study sessions, a small snack keeps me energized and focused.

제안: Your answer should be more coherent and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid informal expressions like 'oh' and be more specific about why snacks are unhealthy. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition.

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. However, many people enjoy them because snacks make life more enjoyable despite the health risks.

제안: Your answer is too short and unclear. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain with specific details. Use linking words to compare past and present habits and avoid repetition.

예시: I didn't eat snacks very often when I was young. However, nowadays I eat snacks much more frequently because they are more available and convenient.

제안: Your answer should be more organized and use linking words to contrast your preferences. Also, use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

예시: I like many snacks, but my favorite is chocolate, especially chocolate cakes. On the other hand, I don't like ice cream very much because I prefer sweeter treats.

× I usually eat snacks, for example, studying process, uh, when I'm boring, maybe when I'm watching movie, umm, it makes me happy.

✓ I usually eat snacks, for example, during the studying process, uh, when I'm bored, maybe when I'm watching a movie, umm, it makes me happy.

The phrase 'studying process' needs the preposition 'during' to indicate the time when snacks are eaten. 'I'm boring' is incorrect because 'boring' describes something that causes boredom; the correct form is 'I'm bored' to express the speaker's feeling. Also, 'watching movie' requires the article 'a' before 'movie' because 'movie' is a countable singular noun.

× Snacks is not healthy.

✓ Snacks are not healthy.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× There's many snacks I don't like and I like chocolates.

✓ There are many snacks I don't like and I like chocolates.

'There is' contracts to 'there's' and is used with singular nouns. Since 'snacks' is plural, the correct form is 'there are'.

× I don't like very much ice creams.

✓ I don't like ice creams very much.

The adverbial phrase 'very much' should come after the object 'ice creams'. Also, 'ice creams' is plural and does not require a definite article here.