Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'I used to eat', you can say 'Previously, I ate a lot of snacks, but now I only eat them occasionally when I'm slightly hungry.'

예시: Previously, I ate a lot of snacks, but now I only eat them occasionally when I'm slightly hungry and want to stay full. I also try to avoid sweets because I used to consume them frequently.

제안: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words to explain reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'next is not really bad'.

예시: In my opinion, eating snacks occasionally is not harmful to health; however, consuming them excessively can be detrimental. Therefore, people should limit their snack intake and only eat them when they truly feel the need.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I used to eat a lot of snacks' and improve word choice, for example, use 'addicted' instead of 'addictive'.

예시: Yes, I used to eat many snacks when I was younger because I was addicted to sweets. However, now I try to avoid them and only eat sweet snacks occasionally.

제안: Your answer covers the question but could be more organized and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid hesitation words like 'maybe'.

예시: I usually enjoy sweets such as chocolate cakes and sweet drinks. Additionally, I like salty snacks like chips, but I try to limit my consumption compared to when I was younger.

× I used to eat a lot of snacks maybe month ago or even 2 months ago, but now I eat snacks only when I'm not really hungry but I want to eat something to stay full.

✓ I used to eat a lot of snacks maybe a month ago or even 2 months ago, but now I eat snacks only when I'm not really hungry but I want to eat something to stay full.

The phrase 'month ago' is missing the article 'a'. In English, when referring to a single month in the past, we say 'a month ago'. This is a common article usage with time expressions.

× I don't really eat many snacks so I try to avoid sweets because I was used to eating them.

✓ I don't really eat many snacks, so I try to avoid sweets because I used to eat them.

The phrase 'was used to eating them' is incorrect here. 'Used to' is used to describe past habits without 'was'. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× From my perspective it is next is not really bad for your health, but eating a lot of snacks could be really bad.

✓ From my perspective, it is not really bad for your health, but eating a lot of snacks could be really bad.

The phrase 'next is not really bad' is incorrect and likely a typo. The correct phrase is 'it is not really bad'. Also, a comma is needed after 'From my perspective' to separate the introductory phrase.

× That's why people should try to avoid eating them a lot and only eat them when they really want to have snack.

✓ That's why people should try to avoid eating them a lot and only eat them when they really want to have a snack.

The word 'snack' is countable and requires an article 'a' when singular. So, 'have snack' should be 'have a snack'.

× Yes, as I already mentioned I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was younger because I was really addictive to sweets, but now I try to avoid snacks and only eat them when I really want to eat something sweet.

✓ Yes, as I already mentioned I used to eat a lot of snacks when I was younger because I was really addicted to sweets, but now I try to avoid snacks and only eat them when I really want to eat something sweet.

The word 'addictive' is an adjective meaning causing addiction. The correct word here is 'addicted', the past participle adjective describing the person's state.

× Usually I like to eat some sweets like chocolate cakes, maybe some sweet drinks.

✓ Usually I like to eat some sweets like chocolate cake, maybe some sweet drinks.

The phrase 'chocolate cakes' is plural but usually 'chocolate cake' is uncountable or singular when referring to the type of sweet. Using singular 'chocolate cake' is more natural here.

× Also I really like chips and salty snacks, but as I said, I try to avoid them and not to eat as many as I was eating when I was younger.

✓ Also I really like chips and salty snacks, but as I said, I try to avoid them and not to eat as many as I used to when I was younger.

The phrase 'as many as I was eating' is awkward. The correct expression is 'as many as I used to' to indicate past habitual action.