Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中表达了主要观点，但句子结构略显重复，且最后一句未完整表达具体的零食种类。建议避免重复表达，补充具体例子，使回答更完整自然。

예시: I usually avoid eating snacks now because I'm focusing on my health by controlling sugar and salt intake. However, I used to enjoy snacks like cookies and chips in the past.

제안: 回答内容清晰且有逻辑，但用词稍显重复，如“unhealthy for people's health”。建议使用更丰富的词汇表达相同意思，避免重复。

예시: No, I don't think eating snacks is beneficial because they often contain excessive salt and sugar, which can contribute to health issues like obesity and hypertension.

제안: 回答结构合理，但连接词使用不够自然，且句子较长。建议使用更自然的连接词并适当拆分句子，使表达更流畅。

예시: No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young. Firstly, I was born in a small, remote village where snacks were not easily available. Secondly, my parents didn't allow me to eat many snacks.

제안: 回答中出现了口头语“uh”，影响流畅度。建议避免使用口头语，并且具体说明“some other sweet food”，使内容更具体丰富。

예시: When it comes to my favorite snacks, I enjoy chips, chocolates, fried chicken, and other sweets like cookies and candies.

× But in the past I like eating snacks such as.

✓ But in the past I liked eating snacks such as.

这里时态应该用过去式，因为句子描述的是过去的习惯。'like' 应改为 'liked'。

× I believe that eating snacks is unhealthy for people's health because snacks are always full of high salt and sugar, which are unhealthy and can lead to some healthy problems such as obesity and high blood pressure.

✓ I believe that eating snacks is unhealthy for people's health because snacks are always full of high salt and sugar, which are unhealthy and can lead to some health problems such as obesity and high blood pressure.

'healthy problems' 应为 'health problems'，这里应使用名词 'health' 修饰 'problems'，而不是形容词 'healthy'。

× No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because firstly I was born in a small village which is a remote area and I didn't have access to many snacks and secondly my parents didn't allow me to eat some snacks.

✓ No, I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because firstly I was born in a small village which is a remote area and I didn't have access to many snacks, and secondly my parents didn't allow me to eat snacks.

'allow me to eat some snacks' 中 'some' 不合适，因否定句中通常不使用 'some'，应直接用 'snacks'。

× When it comes to my favorite snacks, I have to say that I won't say no to chips and chocolates.

✓ When it comes to my favorite snacks, I have to say that I won't say no to chips and chocolate.

'chips and chocolates' 中 'chocolates' 应为不可数名词 'chocolate'，表示巧克力这种食物。

× Additionally, I also like eating fried chicken and, uh, some other sweet food.

✓ Additionally, I also like eating fried chicken and, uh, some other sweet foods.

'some other sweet food' 应为复数 'sweet foods'，因为指多种甜食。