Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误，如“I usually is nice as afternoon”应为“I usually eat snacks in the afternoon”。建议简洁明了地表达时间和原因，避免冗余，同时注意句子结构的正确性。

예시: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I often feel stressed then. Eating snacks helps me relax during a busy day. Sometimes, I enjoy cheese snacks with my classmates.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不清晰，建议使用简单明了的句子表达观点，并具体说明原因，如高糖高油导致不健康。避免使用不连贯的表达。

예시: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks contain a lot of sugar and oil. They have high calories, which can be bad for my health.

제안: 回答中有较多语气词和重复，影响流畅性。建议简洁表达，避免重复，注意语法，如“couldn't”后应接动词原形。

예시: No, I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because my mom didn't allow it. She thought snacks were junk food and encouraged me to eat healthier foods.

제안: 回答中有许多填充词和语法错误，建议减少语气词，使用完整句子表达喜好，并具体描述喜欢的原因。

예시: I like many kinds of snacks, but if I have to choose, I would say chocolate bars. I enjoy their creamy and smooth texture, which feels great in my mouth.

× I usually is nice as afternoon because I always feel stressed at that time and eating snacks can help me to relax and unwind during the busy day.

✓ I usually feel nice in the afternoon because I always feel stressed at that time and eating snacks can help me to relax and unwind during the busy day.

句子中“I usually is nice”主语是“I”，应使用动词原形“feel”而不是“is”，这是现在时态的错误。应使用“I usually feel”表示习惯动作。

× I usually is nice as afternoon because I always feel stressed at that time and eating snacks can help me to relax and unwind during the busy day.

✓ I usually feel nice in the afternoon because I always feel stressed at that time and eating snacks can help me to relax and unwind during the busy day.

介词“as afternoon”用法错误，表示时间应使用介词“in”，即“in the afternoon”。

× By the way, sometimes I will eat cheese snacks with my classmates.

✓ By the way, sometimes I eat cheese snacks with my classmates.

这里表示习惯动作，不需要使用“will”，应直接用一般现在时“eat”。

× No, I think eating snack is not a good habit because more snacks contain has sugars and oil, so I need to spend the time on brand actual high calories and you know, it's too hard to refuse delicious night so.

✓ No, I think eating snacks is not a good habit because many snacks contain sugars and oil, so I need to spend time on brand actual high calories and you know, it's too hard to refuse delicious snacks.

“eating snack”中“snack”应为复数“snacks”；“more snacks contain has sugars”中“contain has”错误，应为“contain”；“delicious night”应为“delicious snacks”。

× No, I think eating snack is not a good habit because more snacks contain has sugars and oil, so I need to spend the time on brand actual high calories and you know, it's too hard to refuse delicious night so.

✓ No, I think eating snacks is not a good habit because many snacks contain sugars and oil, so I need to spend time on brand actual high calories and you know, it's too hard to refuse delicious snacks.

“more snacks”用法不当，应使用“many snacks”表示数量多。

× No, I couldn't. It's like when I was a child because my mom didn't allow me to eat them.

✓ No, I couldn't. It's like when I was a child because my mom didn't allow me to eat them.

此句无明显时态错误，符合过去时态要求。

× Uh, she saw snacks were junk food, uh, and I couldn't in take them.

✓ Uh, she saw snacks were junk food, uh, and I couldn't take them.

“couldn't in take”中“in”多余，应去掉。

× Uh, she encouraged me to eat more, uh, healthy foods.

✓ Uh, she encouraged me to eat more healthy food.

“healthy foods”通常用不可数名词“food”表示食物的总称，更自然。

× Uh, it's a really tricky question because I love all kinds of snacks.

✓ Uh, it's a really tricky question because I love all kinds of snacks.

此句结构正确，无需修改。

× If you, I had to pick up, I would say the chocolate bar because I love, uh, it's creamy and smooth texture that match in my mouth and you know.

✓ If I had to pick, I would say the chocolate bar because I love its creamy and smooth texture that matches in my mouth, you know.

“If you, I had to pick up”结构混乱，应为“If I had to pick”；“it's creamy and smooth texture”中“it's”应为“its”；“that match”主语为单数“texture”，动词应为“matches”。