Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਸਹੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਅਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟਤਾ ਦੀ ਘਾਟ ਹੈ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਧਾਰਨ ਅਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਬਣਾਉਣ ਲਈ, ਸਿੱਧਾ ਸਵਾਲ ਦਾ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਅਤੇ ਵਧੀਆ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ਾਂ ਨਾਲ ਆਪਣੀ ਗੱਲ ਨੂੰ ਸਮਝਾਓ।

예시: I usually eat snacks on weekends when I meet my friends or spend time with my family. I avoid fast food during the week to stay healthy.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਗਲਤ ਬਣਤਰ ਅਤੇ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਹਨ। ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਕਾਰਨਾਂ ਨਾਲ ਆਪਣੇ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਨੂੰ ਸਹੀ ਢੰਗ ਨਾਲ ਪ੍ਰਗਟ ਕਰੋ।

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks contain low-quality ingredients and high sugar, which can harm our health.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਗਲਤ ਬਣਤਰ ਅਤੇ ਅਧੂਰੇ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਹਨ। ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਪੂਰੇ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ਾਂ ਨਾਲ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਅਤੇ ਆਪਣੇ ਅਨੁਭਵ ਨੂੰ ਵਧੀਆ ਤਰੀਕੇ ਨਾਲ ਵਿਆਖਿਆ ਕਰੋ।

예시: Yes, when I was in college, I often ate junk food with my friends daily, which caused me some health problems later.

제안: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਗਲਤ ਬਣਤਰ ਅਤੇ ਅਧੂਰੇ ਵਿਚਾਰ ਹਨ। ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਸੰਖੇਪ ਜਵਾਬ ਦਿਓ ਅਤੇ ਆਪਣੇ ਮਨਪਸੰਦ ਨਾਸ਼ਤੇ ਬਾਰੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਜਾਣਕਾਰੀ ਦਿਓ।

예시: I don't eat snacks daily, but on special occasions with friends, I like to eat wraps because they are tasty and healthy.

× Remember how to change person and I am not to eat the fast food and the regular basis, so I will try to eat the snacks in the weekend with the friends and sometime with the family.

✓ I remember how to change person and I do not eat fast food regularly, so I try to eat snacks on weekends with friends and sometimes with family.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I am not to eat' and 'the regular basis'. The correct form is 'I do not eat' and 'regularly'. Also, 'the weekend' should be 'on weekends', and 'the friends' should be 'friends'. The pronouns and articles are misused, leading to confusion.

× No, I think it's not be healthy for human in the modern era 'cause they have not to provide the better quality on that time, 'cause every person have to do the business on that time and they can earn the money to invest the sum, invest the large number of money and get the.

✓ No, I think it's not healthy for humans in the modern era because they do not provide better quality now, since everyone has to do business and earn money to invest large sums.

The phrase 'it's not be healthy' is incorrect; it should be 'it's not healthy'. Also, 'have not to provide' is incorrect modal usage; it should be 'do not provide'. The sentence also misuses 'human' instead of 'humans' and has incomplete thoughts. Modal verbs should be used correctly to express necessity or obligation.

× Yes, that the time when I have to study in the college, that time my friends always show the curiosity to eat the jungle junk food in the daily basis, so that time I will also face the large number of health issues. But.

✓ Yes, that was the time when I was studying in college. At that time, my friends were always curious to eat jungle junk food daily, so I also faced many health issues then.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense verbs like 'have to study', 'show', and 'will face' when referring to past events. The correct past tense forms are 'was studying', 'were curious', and 'faced'. Also, 'in the daily basis' should be 'daily'. Proper tense usage is essential for clarity.

× Firstly, I have not to eat the snacks in the daily basis. I eat the snacks with the special occasion with my friends at that time I will prefer to the rap because. This can. It cannot be.

✓ Firstly, I do not eat snacks daily. I eat snacks on special occasions with my friends. At that time, I prefer rap snacks because...

The phrase 'have not to eat the snacks in the daily basis' is incorrect; it should be 'do not eat snacks daily'. Also, 'with the special occasion' should be 'on special occasions'. The quantifiers and prepositions are misused, affecting the sentence's meaning.