Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然で効果的ですが、文の繰り返しや冗長な表現を避け、より簡潔にすることが望ましいです。また、接続詞を使って文の流れを滑らかにすると良いでしょう。

예시: I usually eat snacks around 3:00 PM when I feel a bit hungry. After lunch, I prefer fruits or light snacks because they help me stay energized and focused until dinner.

제안: 回答が途中で終わっており、内容が不完全です。文を完結させ、具体的な理由や例を明確に述べることが必要です。接続詞を使って論理的に説明しましょう。

예시: I believe snacks can be healthy or unhealthy depending on my choices. For instance, fruits like apples and bananas provide essential vitamins, which are good for health. However, eating too many sugary snacks can be harmful.

제안: 質問に直接答えていません。過去の習慣について具体的に述べる必要があります。また、内容が前の質問と重複しているため、新しい情報を加えましょう。

예시: When I was young, I often ate snacks, mostly fruits like apples and bananas. However, I sometimes ate sugary snacks, which made me gain weight.

제안: 回答が途中で終わっており、文法的な誤りもあります。文を完結させ、季節ごとの具体的な例を明確に述べることが重要です。

예시: I enjoy eating fruits as snacks, especially apples because they are naturally sweet and nutritious. Depending on the season, I also like juicy peaches in summer and sweet persimmons in autumn.

× if I eat some fruits like apples and bananas, they help me stay healthy because it they provide vitamins.

✓ if I eat some fruits like apples and bananas, they help me stay healthy because they provide vitamins.

The phrase 'because it they provide vitamins' contains an unnecessary pronoun 'it' which causes confusion. The correct pronoun to refer to 'fruits' (plural) is 'they'. Remove 'it' to fix the singular/plural agreement and improve clarity.

× However, eating too many.

✓ However, eating too many sugary snacks is unhealthy.

The sentence 'However, eating too many.' is incomplete and lacks an object and a verb, making it a sentence fragment. To correct it, complete the thought by specifying what is eaten too many of and adding a verb or complement.

× if I eat too many sugary snacks, I will gain weight because of its sugar.

✓ if I eat too many sugary snacks, I will gain weight because of their sugar.

The pronoun 'its' incorrectly refers to 'sugary snacks' which is plural. The correct plural possessive pronoun is 'their'. This ensures agreement between the pronoun and its antecedent.

× I like apples because they are naturally sweet and nutritious keep helping me keep me healthy.

✓ I like apples because they are naturally sweet and nutritious and help me keep healthy.

The original sentence has redundant and awkward phrasing 'nutritious keep helping me keep me healthy'. It lacks proper conjunction and verb form. Correcting it by adding 'and' and simplifying the verb phrase improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Depending on the season, I also like to try other fruits like juicy Peaches in summer or.

✓ Depending on the season, I also like to try other fruits like juicy peaches in summer or berries in autumn.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'or.' which makes it incomplete. To correct it, complete the list or thought to form a full sentence. Also, 'Peaches' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun.