Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be specific about the times you eat snacks.

예시: I usually eat snacks either after meals or during the day, especially when I'm watching a movie or doing something that takes a long time.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity by using complete sentences and correct verb forms. Use linking words to contrast different types of snacks and be more specific about why some snacks are healthy or not.

예시: It depends on the type of snack you eat. For example, nuts are a healthy option, but sweet snacks are usually unhealthy because they contain a lot of sugar.

제안: Use past tense consistently and avoid question forms in your answer. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details with linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I ate snacks almost every day when I was young because my parents often gave them to me as a reward for doing something good.

제안: Make your answer more natural by using varied vocabulary and linking words. Be specific about why you like jelly and avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: I enjoy all kinds of snacks, but my favourite is jelly because it's sweet, easy to carry in my pocket, and I can eat it whenever I want.

× I usually eat the snack after the meal or during the day or when I want to do something in the long term, like in watching the movie.

✓ I usually eat snacks after meals or during the day or when I want to do something for a long time, like watching a movie.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'snack' and 'meal' when speaking generally. Also, 'in watching the movie' is incorrect; it should be 'watching a movie' without 'in' and with the indefinite article 'a' because it refers to any movie, not a specific one.

× Is depend on the type of snack that you eat.

✓ It depends on the type of snack that you eat.

The sentence lacks a subject and auxiliary verb. 'Is' should be 'It is' or contracted to 'It's'. The modal verb 'depends' requires the subject 'it' to be correct.

× Some people lighter snack is made from a nut but some is like the snack like a sweet snack so it's not healthy for you.

✓ Some people's lighter snacks are made from nuts, but some are sweet snacks, so they're not healthy for you.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match 'some people', and 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subjects. Also, 'a nut' should be plural 'nuts' to generalise, and 'some is like the snack like a sweet snack' is awkward and corrected for clarity.

× Yes, I eat the snack almost every day when I was young.

✓ Yes, I ate snacks almost every day when I was young.

The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference 'when I was young'. Also, 'the snack' should be plural 'snacks' to indicate habitual action.

× Did my parents always give the snack as a reward when I do something good?

✓ My parents always gave me snacks as a reward when I did something good.

The sentence is incorrectly structured as a question but intended as a statement. The past tense 'did' should be used properly, and 'do' should be 'did' to match past tense. Also, 'the snack' should be plural 'snacks' and 'gave me' is clearer.

× I love all the snacks but my favorite is Jelly.

✓ I love all snacks, but my favourite is jelly.

'All the snacks' can be simplified to 'all snacks' for generality. 'Jelly' as a snack is uncountable here, so singular is correct. Also, 'favourite' is the British English spelling.

× I can eat it every day and it is easy to put in your pocket and you can eat it all the time you want.

✓ I can eat it every day, and it is easy to put in my pocket, so I can eat it whenever I want.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrectly used; it should be 'my' to refer to the speaker's pocket. Also, 'all the time you want' is better expressed as 'whenever I want' for clarity and correctness.