Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多いです。より明確で簡潔な文を使い、スナックを食べる時間と理由をはっきり述べましょう。

예시: I usually eat snacks while studying because they help me concentrate better.

제안: 内容が不明瞭で繰り返しが多いです。健康への影響について具体的に述べ、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: I think eating too many snacks can lead to weight gain and health problems, but eating light snacks occasionally is fine.

제안: 文法と語順の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去の習慣を明確に述べ、理由や感情を簡潔に説明しましょう。

예시: Yes, I often ate snacks after school when I was young. I enjoyed eating them while watching TV shows because it made me happy.

제안: 文が不自然で繰り返しがあります。好きなスナックとその理由を明確に述べ、簡潔にまとめましょう。

예시: I like to eat sweet snacks like chocolate because they help me concentrate and study for longer periods.

× I usually eat snacks a while studying are by eating snacks I can more focus on study and are keep keep eye on the study.

✓ I usually eat snacks while studying because by eating snacks I can focus more on my study and keep my eyes on the study.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'are' and repeats 'keep' unnecessarily. The phrase 'a while studying are by eating snacks' is ungrammatical. The correction uses the present participle 'studying' correctly and clarifies the sentence structure for better meaning.

× I usually eat snacks a while studying are by eating snacks I can more focus on study and are keep keep eye on the study.

✓ I usually eat snacks while studying because by eating snacks I can focus more on my study and keep my eyes on the study.

The preposition 'a while' is incorrect; it should be 'while' to indicate the time during which the action happens. Also, 'focus on study' should be 'focus on my study' to be grammatically correct.

× I think if people eat snacks, so many, so many, so many, they will be fat and it's which will be your very danger for their health, health.

✓ I think if people eat too many snacks, they will become fat and it will be very dangerous for their health.

The original sentence misuses 'it's which will be your very danger' which is ungrammatical. The modal verb 'will' is used correctly in the correction to indicate future consequence. Also, 'so many' is replaced with 'too many' for natural expression.

× However, if they if they eat light snack.

✓ However, if they eat light snacks.

The sentence is incomplete and repeats 'if they'. Also, 'light snack' should be plural 'light snacks' to match the context. The correction completes the sentence properly.

× Yeah, I often a snack when I was young after going to school, I often it's night.

✓ Yeah, I often ate snacks when I was young after going to school, usually at night.

The verb 'a snack' is incorrect; it should be 'ate snacks' in past tense. 'I often it's night' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'usually at night' to indicate time.

× I like to I like it too eat snacks while watching TV drama or shows and also it's very happy.

✓ I like to eat snacks while watching TV dramas or shows and it makes me very happy.

The phrase 'I like to I like it too eat snacks' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'TV drama or shows' should be plural 'TV dramas or shows'. 'It's very happy' is incorrect; the subject should be 'it' and the verb 'makes' to express emotion.

× I like to eat sweet snack like chocolate because I can it's can it's help me focus on study more and also I can study for long period.

✓ I like to eat sweet snacks like chocolate because they can help me focus on my study more and also I can study for a long period.

The singular 'sweet snack' should be plural 'sweet snacks' to match 'like chocolate'. 'I can it's can it's help' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'they can help'. 'Focus on study' should be 'focus on my study'. 'For long period' needs an article 'a' to be 'for a long period'.