Snacks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答が冗長で不自然な表現が多いです。例えば、「your snack snacks」という表現は意味が不明瞭で、繰り返しもあります。より自然で簡潔な表現を心がけ、具体的な理由や状況を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: I usually eat snacks when I have free time because they make me feel happy and refreshed. For example, I enjoy eating fruit or nuts as a healthy treat.

제안: 内容が不明瞭で、具体的な理由や説明が不足しています。また、発音や単語の選択に誤りがあり、意味が伝わりにくいです。健康に悪い理由を具体的に説明し、正しい語彙を使う練習をしましょう。

예시: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks contain a lot of sugar and unhealthy fats, which can lead to health problems if eaten too often.

제안: 文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去形の使用や語彙の選択に注意し、具体的な内容を簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。

예시: Yes, when I was young, I often ate snacks. I liked trying different flavors because it was fun to discover new tastes.

제안: 回答は比較的自然ですが、繰り返しや曖昧な表現が見られます。より流暢に話すために、繰り返しを避け、具体的な理由や好みを明確に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: I like eating Japanese snacks such as potato chips and Jackalico because they are tasty and popular among children. I especially enjoy the variety of flavors they offer.

× When I have free time, I sometimes eat your snack snacks because it makes me feel happy every time because it is very tasty and delicious for me and also it can give me refresh myself.

✓ When I have free time, I sometimes eat your snacks because they make me feel happy every time since they are very tasty and delicious for me and also they can refresh me.

'snack snacks' is incorrect; 'snacks' is the correct plural form. Also, 'it makes me' should be 'they make me' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'it is' should be 'they are' for plural. 'give me refresh myself' is incorrect; correct form is 'refresh me'. These are plural and subject-verb agreement issues.

× I totally disagree with this opinion. I think eating snacks is very unhealthy because it's containing UH-230 and a boil. So I think snacks offer uh unhealthy.

✓ I totally disagree with this opinion. I think eating snacks is very unhealthy because they contain UH-230 and oil. So I think snacks are unhealthy.

'it's containing' is incorrect; modal verb 'is' should not be used with 'containing'. Correct is 'they contain'. Also, 'a boil' is likely a mishearing of 'oil'. 'snacks offer uh unhealthy' is incorrect; correct is 'snacks are unhealthy'. This is a modal verb and verb form issue.

× Yes, when I was young, I usually eat years. I usually eat your snacks because I really one of my favorite snacks and there are many different type of taste. It is very fun to find your original 1, so I really.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I usually ate snacks. I usually ate your snacks because they were one of my favorite snacks and there were many different types of taste. It was very fun to find your original ones, so I really liked them.

'eat' should be past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. 'I really one of my favorite snacks' is incomplete; corrected to 'they were one of my favorite snacks'. 'type' should be plural 'types'. 'It is' should be past 'It was'. 'original 1' corrected to 'original ones'. These are past tense and singular/plural issues.

× I prefer eating, uh, Japanese, Japanese originals snacks like uh, potato chips or Jackalico, which is very tasty and popular, popular for children and also I really love the flavor or variety.

✓ I prefer eating Japanese original snacks like potato chips or Jackalico, which are very tasty and popular among children, and I really love the flavor variety.

'Japanese originals snacks' should be 'Japanese original snacks' (adjective order). 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'popular for children' corrected to 'popular among children'. 'flavor or variety' corrected to 'flavor variety'. These are adjective order, subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage issues.